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the sea by night

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The sea by night is a beast of a different nature

Sinuously moving around the harbour wall

A snake, a boa, suffocating granite barricades.

It slips and mounts like a lover

Crashes home, then silent, waits.

An enemy, a mystery, oily, oleaginous,

Creeping deeper than fate.

In innocence boats rise and fall, as if sleeping.

Starlight sparkles and the town lights play

On the animal, roaring, angry.

An invisible power fading into black.

A void, a maw, the sea by night.

 

 

the sea

◄ last time

lap of luxury ►

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 25th Jun 2011 16:13

Thanks all - and wow! Steve! So lovely to hear from you. And thanks for your truly appreciated comment. I know nature poems are not everyone's cup of tea. But I think I care about the natural world more than I care about anything.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 25th Jun 2011 12:04

I really like 'creeping deeper than fate'.

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Bernadette Herbertson

Sat 25th Jun 2011 11:52

hi Ann ..hope you remember me after my long absence from wol ! I think this poem is so good and i really enjoyed it as it captures the imagination and the pic fits it well...xx bernie

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Elaine Booth

Sat 25th Jun 2011 00:20

So enjoyed this. I was imagining Mousehole harbour. You conjoured up the sea at night perfectly. X

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 24th Jun 2011 18:39

Thanks guys - I've changed it a bit at the end. Inspired by being on St Ives harbour wall (Smeaton's Pier) last year in the dark with a rough sea at my feet.

Philipos

Fri 24th Jun 2011 15:27

Hi Ann lots of pleasing images here - agree withy Greg's comment about the last line etc. Interesting that you should refer to the sea as a beast I always think of it as awesome. Nice poem.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 24th Jun 2011 09:12

Some great lines in this Ann, but not sure about those last two.

'suffocating granite barricades...oily, oleaginous'

lovely!

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Greg Freeman

Fri 24th Jun 2011 07:54

There are lots of great lines in this, Ann. Well-observed, like it a lot. You maybe don't need the last line at all. Unless you expanded it, and wrote a verse about the sea by day as well. "Half a poem ..." at the moment, as you say?

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 24th Jun 2011 07:25

Maybe only half a poem here - and the last line is a bit rubbish.

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