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Walking away

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I sat and watched you walk away

long after you had gone

aware of all the distance since

you decided to move on

I followed you till out of sight

the course you had to take

the reasons were so clear to me

your will was less opaque

and so the worthy part of me

was severed, cleaved away

but in a moment rationale

conquered hope that day

if I should give my all to you

support your through to bloom

I must not grasp the tattered reins

of conscience or entomb

the joy, the very essence of

the person you'd become

no weakness of my own resolve

the self could not succumb

so though I knew you'd never know

that love had cost me dear

in letting you just walk away

I left your pathway clear.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 12th Jun 2011 12:52

Lovely poem - I must have missed it before. To me it reads like letting a son or daughter go.

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Christopher Dawson

Tue 31st May 2011 14:51

Hi Alan, many thanks for that, and particularly the link.In honesty I must say that I don't read much of the work of the Acclaimed, I'm far more likely to research their background and character. Having read that one I can see why my effort made you think of Cummings' piece, though in mine there is no thought or concern of another man at any time, or of the leaver's future contentment. What I sought to conjour was the thought that in setting free this was a continuation of the relationship, the giver having fulfilled their part and understanding that.

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Alan Morrison

Tue 31st May 2011 13:13

Nice one. Selflessness in love often comes at a cost - especially when it means giving freedom for the other to walk away. It's a perfect subject for poetry because of the irony, contradiction, paradox and delicious melancholia. Thanks for sharing.

PS: e.e. cummings (my favourite poet) wrote a great one on this subject which always has my eyes raining tears. http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/it-may-not-always-be-so/

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