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a Taliban's Tigris

I think that when you see me smile
You’ll wonder why you killed me
I suspect that
You shall feel guilty
If not for a short moment,
American!
Staring at my photograph
You stole from the satchel heart.

I hope that you can pronounce my name correctly
We have pride too you know,
a thought for western eyes too smart.

From my height I see khaki knees
and rifle limp m16
From your victory
You felled me.

on weapon hold casually
sway
a chewing gum gift
to the bubbled oil you pray.
as this moment bleeds a rivers time
It holds a depleting breath
yet more desperate go the clinging
for the child I leave bereft.

so here is me the bearded man
my doubting benefit of hope
I feel for a second,  you may prod me
I felt your action unsure the slipping rope
the wicker basket lid, snake charmed on barrel
smoke another point to score
comrade tapped upon shoulder
And asked marine
“are there any more? “
“scum!”, I think it ,you lay me down to die
you say it...we all it...scum
 “how you Yankee say?…..slang?”

I am not a soldier!
I fight for my family
I ask only to be free
make mistakes of my own
All well and good
Until body parts
Blown

away

Your engagement in sandy land
Never suited or shown
And standard issue
Booted

I shall join you for tea shortly
rooted spot
-we pour it well from silver cups
going nowhere now
Just as soon as I sew my legs back on-
help
stem my lifeblood’s flow
a puddle around me, form the cuts
you know
soil and sand dont mix so well.

I tried to distract myself
With bizarre thoughts of art
to take away the pain
to distract from the fact I was dying
i imagined flatbread fingers prying
coals of a pheonix heart.

I can just hear the hammering of the remaining 47s’
-I wish my fellow fighters well
and I imagined this sound,
to be like your woodpeckers,
Happily tapping home, peace
Oblivious to the outside world
Wrapped up
In a western glade
Something as special as this,
yet East.
like my tigris memories of childhood

A peaceful thought upon which to close my eyes

◄ Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy)

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Francine

Sat 23rd May 2009 05:05

Beaucoup d'émotion quand tu écris de ces genres de choses...

J'aime ces lignes:

'I tried to distract myself
With bizarre thoughts of art
to take away the pain
to distract from the fact I was dying'

<Deleted User> (5164)

Mon 14th Jul 2008 01:57

very heart warming
and very true

my heart began to pound - just like janet ramsden said.
a very powerful poem, i think this has to be my fave!

sez x

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clarissa mckone

Mon 7th Jul 2008 02:37

Nice poem Peter,That poor place has been at war for so long I bet they dont know any other way. Im not sure if I pitty the taliban, or any extreem religion, or country. On a personal level i feel bad for people caught in the middle of it, that are not on either side. But a gun in hand makes it a fair fight, a bomb up a long dress, makes it a fair fight and a possible target. I read about some issues that go as far back as the 50s, and governments medling from all over, making promises and dumping them and then supplying one side with weapons, its a mess and Im glad that on a personal note I was not part of any of it.Its tragic, the hole world is a sick trash scum dump of a place. good write

Pete Crompton

Thu 3rd Jul 2008 01:04

Janet and Robbie:
thank you very very much for your comments. It means a heck of a lot to me.
just in case the '47s' refers to the ak47s but i think you know that.

in the case of this poem, i dont think i need say anything except that intepret it the way that feels right.

once again thank you so much, its very specilal to me what you say,

Peter x

<Deleted User> (5090)

Wed 2nd Jul 2008 21:20

Really beautiful and honestly real.
Thank you

<Deleted User> (5646)

Wed 2nd Jul 2008 20:19

Good grief, Pete.
My" feelings " when i first started to read this were all over the place. My heart began to pound in my chest as if i was going to have a heart attack. Very strong emotions.
Thanks. I think! wow, Janet.x

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