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Insomniacs Ball

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Drip follows drop as tick follows tock in my world of wakefulness

Every noise heightened, amplified vividly

Every wandering thought the most important you ever had

The air thick with stale sleepless breath choking the drowsiness

The walls loom expectantly around entombing your mattress of woe

Your quilt suffocates and smothers the sleep from the air

Encased in a crypt of unrest, every feeling begging thought

Every right was wrong and every wrong was a pitiful waste

The dripping rain forms the metronome of your being

Staccato and un-unified

But still as far as tick follows tock

You will still listen

◄ Conceptual

Torn ►

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Elaine Booth

Tue 11th Jan 2011 20:50

I was also pulled in by the first line and also, like Dave, have the misfortune to identify with the theme! Very evocative images.

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alan barlow

Mon 10th Jan 2011 16:17

thanks folks appreciated i feel another version of this coming along probably with more play around the title though, stay tuned

<Deleted User> (7164)

Mon 10th Jan 2011 14:47

The first line of this pulled me in.
Personally i tend to reach for the Horlicks..works every time ;-)

Enjoyed :-)

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Dave Bradley

Sun 9th Jan 2011 22:52

Wish I didn't connect with this, but I do. Well written

Philipos

Sun 9th Jan 2011 20:07

Yes indeedy - have learnt always to have a pen and pad by my side for just such an occasion and more productive than counting sheep - best way I know of turning a negative into a positive - thanks for checking mine out - liked yours too

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