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Loves Label Lost

I have a shelf,
And on that shelf
There are jars.
Some labelled,
Some not.

There is one jar
I've been trying to find
Hidden in
Amongst the others;
Identical from the outside.

That jar
Was always labelled
But now that label's gone 
And I can't find 
The right receptacle.

I opened a few
In my hunt
And have to admit
To being skeptical
Of ever finding it!

So if you see a jar
Unlabelled on your shelf
Maybe I could borrow it?
And have a look inside?
 

◄ Castaway

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Steven Kenny

Tue 7th Dec 2010 01:09

Thanks to you both :-)

I fiddled with it again and removed the last line and I agree that it works better like this! Thanks for the suggestions, always greatly appreciated! :-)

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Laura Taylor

Tue 9th Nov 2010 16:17

Steve has said what I was gonna say. I think that last line is totally superfluous. Not so sure about losing the entire last verse though, you could just cut it dead after the 4th line?

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