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Nineveh

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There is a place called Nineveh.

The name is etched on cloudy glass

above the squat wide door.

A door for coffins and their bearers.

A place called Nineveh.

 

Once the old range was warm

with the peppery smell of pasties

and the sound of miners' boots rang.

 

It had its time for guests to stay

in this place called Nineveh.

Of breakfast bacon frying

and trifle with clotted cream

rounding off the evening meal.

 

Later handrails and stair lifts were

fitted, in this place called Nineveh.

That was before the ghosts came.

Now all is frowzy

and furniture is swaddled like ghosts

in deserted rooms.

 

Nineveh has a postcode now but it will

always be in the lane at Promised Land.

The house called Nineveh.

Standing its ground.

 

 

◄ or gently go . . . .

plastic garden ►

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 28th Sep 2010 11:09

Well I took the ghosts out but now I've put them back. Can't think of another word for my first lot of ghosts. I was going to put before the shadows came, but that made me think of Cliff Richard! (Never a nice thought!)

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jean lucy thompson

Mon 27th Sep 2010 21:43

Lovely poem Seems like a lovely place too The name sounds similar to the name of a Sumerian god Is that an actual photo of the cottage if so its beautiful

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Greg Freeman

Mon 27th Sep 2010 10:22

I like this, Ann, the religious air surrounding the name of the cottage and its place, and the final line, "standing its ground". There's the repetition of the name, which is fine, like a folk song chorus, but maybe you might consider changing the second "ghosts"?

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 26th Sep 2010 18:15

I don't usually do as I'm told ;-) but I agree Jo about fusty dusty. Have changed it, thanks. Might change to another word if I think of one I like better. Thought maybe frousty, partly because miners used to call their meal croust. But maybe that's a bit esoteric!

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Sun 26th Sep 2010 17:05

Lovely. I like the contrast of mystical syntax and quaint, homely words like 'pasties' and 'rounding off'. Not sure about 'fusty dusty' possibly a little twee for my taste, but I could get used to it.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 26th Sep 2010 15:39

I'm often moved by the names of old cottages, also places here in Cornwall. This is the name of one that I have passed a lot recently.

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