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After studying a painting by John ruskin.

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After we watched the night cloud

set into the concrete of silence

in the hour when souls play

truant in the dirt of the winds

battling in the coil of minds

where light escapes higher

planes the place

where the words overcome

the fear

and the scorch of the mundane

days stolen by the pounding

routine

where nature fleers my

thoughts in every

rise of the sun

beyond the stars

and the tongue of time

holds out it`s palm

of words

the daybreaks in feathered song

where shadows stretch 

where kisses fade in mist

of you

the brain chews

the eternal vision

below the eyes

and natures hides all it`s

secrets in the cosmos

forked branches of time

and gravity

the universe is made of

flowers

and

stars

tonight

my love.

 

◄ Your smile keeps me from madness

Have you seen him? Slam style ►

Comments

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Alison Mary Dunn

Sat 31st May 2008 14:25

And I also!
You're work is continually exploring newness. You're styles are diverse. I'm enjoying very much reading your findings.
This particular write fast unfolds and some darkness. I just love it. It's exciting! Very interested in your work Mr Brooks.
thanks
Ally

darren thomas

Fri 30th May 2008 10:34

'Fleers' is a wonderful word.

darren thomas

Fri 30th May 2008 08:43

I always look forward to your postings. Your poetry is simply wonderful and many of your pieces would not be intimidated by some of this country's most respected poets.

<Deleted User> (4744)

Thu 29th May 2008 10:03

I stumbled on that word as well. Longer than the other two I got a little lost in the fragmentation this time, couldn't hold an image together all the way though. The washig of the words over me had a very pleasant effect but I can't admit to understanding you this time.

Keep on posting though... I might get it in the end.

<Deleted User> (5646)

Thu 29th May 2008 09:42


This painting reminds me of Jesus. It's the hands more than anything else. They remind me of a picture which used to hang on our church wall, showing him bearing the cross.
It actually goes against our religion, as a true spiritualist is supposed to have personal responsibility, meaning they take responsibility for their own actions.Bad, Evil, Good. whatever.
So, naturally being human, we are open to carrying a whole lot of guilt around with us. Baggage. We beg forgiveness from God because humans sometimes play on that fact.
Creating conflict within and all around as we struggle to maintain how we "try" to live.

Thankyou for giving me this opportunity to express my thoughts through your writing.
Peace be yours, always. Janet.xxx


I hate picking up on spelling mistakes but i have difficulty understanding whether "fleers" means "flees" or even possibly "seers."

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