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Woman of the Flowing Hair

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Soft face is yours

And your hair is waving to the sea

Woman of the flowing hair

You stand so still

One hand resting on the creaking gate

The other shielding from the sun

Woman with the flowing hair

Why do you wait

And the world travails around you

Step down with care

From your pedestal of woe

He who left you once

Has stepped down from his long ago

Oh woman with the tears of pearls

Falling to the ground of sombre greyness

Heed me now

Woman with the flowing hair

I wish to take you down with me

To the depths of life

For there only, may you see

The image of your face in the mirror of time

And leave your mourning

To the rest - who have just begun to grieve 

Starman ►

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 25th Aug 2010 08:37

I really love this Jean Lucy. xx

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Bernadette Herbertson

Thu 19th Aug 2010 13:41

Hi jean what a beautiful poem this is and so meaningful and thought provoking..bernadette x

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Wed 18th Aug 2010 23:17

This,being the third poem of yours which I have read tonight,doubtless suggests your love of spiritual writing-I personally,find it quite moving and love the indefinite aspect of it-the almost mergence of sprituality and hints of mythology-please keep them coming-love them! thank you-Stefan-xx

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jean lucy thompson

Wed 18th Aug 2010 22:09

Yes comments noted tyvm :)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 18th Aug 2010 12:43

Some deep thoughts here, with some very imaginative expressions. It has an essence of beauty captured in words. Perhaps you could condense a bit and keep this vitality still intact. 'to grieve' - 'to mourn' I can understand the spelling compulsion to link it to 'grave'.

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