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WOODEN ZOO

WOODEN ZOO

I recall when you arrived

six months old in your pram

and your parents so young,

says Dorothy at the gate.

A daughter lost to cancer,

the oldest son a heart attack

climbing up a mountain.

 

He came to play with us

just once, back then

and we sniggered at his

peculiar way of talking

and wouldn't let him touch

the wooden zoo I owned

that held my plastic animals.

 

The other son on Sundays

parks a car, she opens the door.

My broken zoo's discarded

in a dusty corner of the garage

under its patina of grime.

I'll use it as a home for plants

when I move house, I say.

 

The poem appears not to have a watertight narrative. The connection between the unfortunate family across the street and the wooden zoo is tenuous and incidental. Loose threads are not really tied up in the final stanza either. But does a poem have to 'make sense' in the conventional way in order to convey something worthwhile? Perhaps the lack of closure creates a certain mystery.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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john short

Thu 13th Feb 2025 18:13

Hi Stephen,

Thanks for your encouraging words. I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

All the best

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Stephen Gospage

Thu 13th Feb 2025 08:00

Thank you for this, John. I read it through many times and found it fascinating. There is a sense of place and of passing time. Enjoyed it very much.

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john short

Thu 13th Feb 2025 01:18

Thinking about this I think the central point is where do we draw the line between what we let go and what we feel we have to keep.

John S

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john short

Wed 12th Feb 2025 19:59

Hi Graham,
Thanks for your feedback. Well, the note after the poem is my analysis of the poem, for what it's worth. I'm pleased you agree with the conclusion. Unfortunately, many editors are conformist and lack imagination and probably will not agree.

Best wishes

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 12th Feb 2025 07:33

It's a really clever and tender piece John and I don't really think or like the explanation and I agree with its final sentence.

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