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Reluctant

The moon shone resplendent, 

made a neon sign 

of their youth, yet

their eyes were sightless,

their tries fightless;

they thought the moon 

was slovenly, and

as for doom, a

taste wouldn't do:

they'd have to indulge, 

for in their blood

races gluttony.

 

Perhaps they were born

an oxymoron, diffident

daffodils, question marks

to the world, their kin,

themselves. 

 

So, how to assuage despair

when they only know

to draw breath

for a reluctant

raison d'être?

◄ Beware the dyads...

A Sigh ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (33000)

Tue 12th Apr 2022 18:44

no way Holden!

when it comes to articulation, pole position is yours!

🎖

Holden Moncrieff

Tue 12th Apr 2022 01:30

Thank you so much for the kind comments, Leon and Stephen, I'm truly grateful! 😊

Leon, I love your interpretation of "a breed apart from the God-fearers" and "rebels without a cause or even wanting one", you've articulated it far better than I could have, thank you! 😉

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Stephen Gospage

Mon 11th Apr 2022 16:57

I love the concept of 'question marks to the world', Holden.

<Deleted User> (33000)

Mon 11th Apr 2022 14:14

Great poem Holden. One of those pieces that the readers are best left to make their own interpretations of, and our interpretation suggests a breed apart from the God-fearers? Rebels without a cause or even wanting one?

We are happy with our interpretation-thank you!

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