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A crystal clarity

Clinks against my cheek

Cold as ice

 

There’s nothing there

Ice melts

It will only leave a tear

To trickle

 

Brittle as stars

Love shoots off

At a tangent.

Sparks, then gone

 

Did you see it

Or were you looking

the other way?

 

Ask the Titanic

How it felt

To knock into

A transparent nothingness.

 

Tears are real enough.

 

 

 

 

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winston plowes

Mon 19th Jul 2010 13:45

ice and relationships, always a good are to explore through poetry Ann. Win

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 19th Jul 2010 13:43

Thanks for comment Cynthia. I didn't actually use the word invisible at all though, so I don't see how there could be too much emphasis on that particular word. I was more thinking of something cold and clear and transparent as a block of ice. Not necessarily invisible. xx

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 19th Jul 2010 12:28

Interesting ideas; but I think they are stretching the relationships a bit too far. Individually, I feel they work, as separate poetical observations. Perhaps it is the emphasis on 'invisibility' that bothers me; ice is not invisible, and the iceberg that sank the Titanic certainly wasn't.

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