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In the woods

 

In the woods, unkind glances cascade down;

Corpses howl as they dangle from the trees.

Bored beasts run wild and roar at every pass;

Trespassers beg for life upon their knees.

The night-time tunes of childish thirst for blood

Make matters worse by willingness to please.

The rain drips through and drenches body parts,

As errant spouses plead outside and freeze.

Armed hunters shoot at anything that moves,

But only bring back prey for outsized fees.

The ghosts make law and hypnotize the crowd;

The police stay clear and postmen work in threes.

Ambition peels like bark and rots away,

Frustrated by the rustle and the tease.

 

From The Shape of the Trees  (Published January 2021)

◄ Essex

The Red Marriage ►

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Stephen Gospage

Sat 6th Feb 2021 16:47

Thanks to everyone for the likes and the comments.

Aviva, Brian and Shifa - I am most grateful for the kind words and perceptive analysis. You have seen where I was coming from and you are already way ahead. Yes, the frustration of ambition (glad you enjoyed the line!) and a descent into cynicism is a major element of this world, which is both dystopian and real.

The noble professions of police and postman are embedded in my family, so they both get mentions.

Many thanks to everyone!

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Shifa Maqba

Sat 6th Feb 2021 05:31

I'd like to echo Aviva and say that 'Ambition peels like bark and rots away' is among the most brilliant, evocative and effective lines I've ever read. Great read!

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Fri 5th Feb 2021 20:13

I'm guessing this is not really about the woods, but describes some sort of dystopia. As a ex-postman myself the 'work in threes' made me smile and is almost true already for parts of our inner cities. Great work Stephen.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 5th Feb 2021 18:31

This has got an enthralling rhythm which fairly pulls you through the poem at a pace. That just makes the kaleidoscope of imagery and association even more impactful. It feels like part of the woods are in the workplace and part of the woods are in the home and part in the wilder side of neither of these (the streets). 'Ambition peels like bark and rots away' is the pinnacle of the piece, not just poetically but also I think as it is the cumulative effect of exposure to the woods.
Oh did I forget to say... I like this poem!

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