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Living

I wish for life to be easy.
I tire of waking each day
with worry on how to live
with only pieces of my life
lying within each hand.
I have a dream screaming
to be freed from within,
and I have a heart
that flows cold,
a fire no longer burns
because I have been burned
for so long.
I remember my life then.
I remember how hard it was
to live.
She's gone.
The ghost of me remains,
and it is still hard to live.
But I hear my dream's call,
and hope has touched me again.
Maybe, one day, my life
will fade from struggle
and rise up to the stars
that I wish to dance with.

Living
by, Melissa R. Mendelson

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clarissa mckone

Wed 12th Mar 2008 03:00

HI Melissa, I loved the poem, so full of heart. I understand it very well, and could feel each word. do take care, yours Clarissa

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Tue 11th Mar 2008 20:55

Dear Melissa

These sounds like an echo of my life; I know that I am almost repeating Philip words here. But this is exactly how I feel. Life was not meant to be easy. And it seems getting harder as each year progresses.
You have captivated the moments of reality in a very well written piece of poetry.

This Stanza """The ghost of me remains,
and it is still hard to live.
But I hear my dream's call,
and hope has touched me again."""

I hope this is only your imagination and creativity in this one. But truly sounds close to my home.

Warm Regards,
Zuzanna

darren thomas

Tue 11th Mar 2008 08:24

Hi Melissa - you posted an entry on my profile page which is don't really understand. Was it meant for me or as a reply to Philip's comments? Either way, I have read your work which I know is done to a very high standard. The style that you use is very intimate with words that appear smooth when the reader 'strokes their hand across them'.
Keep on writing and posting what you write - if you want a constructive critique (let's face it - none of us do - but it does improve our work) then let me know.

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Philip Golding

Tue 11th Mar 2008 05:10

This sentiment woven into your poem, hits home in so many ways, an echo of my own life. I wish I had written it.

Thanks for a great read

Phil
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