Let the rock to which I lash my storm battered soul be called, “Hope,”
Let no winds nor swell of tide wash me from this place,
Even if only by my fingertips, let me cling to its craggy face,
As the roaring waves come crashing heavy on its slopes,
Let me not question the strength at its peak,
Nor doubt that its solidity will give me strength to cope,
Let it be my foundation whenever I feel weak,
Let it be my rock, and let me call it hope.
Oh, Jason, I was thinking the singular only in keeping with the other 'ope' words at the end of lines. Nothing more. But the hiss of 's' and the 'sh' of 'crashing' do work well together. Writing is such FUN!
Thanks Jennifer, I'm glad to hear it's not too bad where you are, we're the same here for now. The government has ordered the closure of pretty much all public meeting places and stated that they'll pay up to 80% of people's wages if they have to go off sick or self isolate due to a family member in the household having to. I think it's a good call on their part. And yes I preferred, "Slopes," but having said that I do genuinely appreciate it when people make suggestions because very often they're right, and whilst I do believe that you write it how it comes to you, then leave it and move on, I do occasionally edit. But we're all here to learn from each other so I always welcome input and advice. Stay safe my friend.
J. x
Great poem Jason, don't see how I missed it. Very encouraging in these Covid times. Here in Tuscany things aren't too bad at the moment, but everything has shut down, and in the north it's really grim. Hope is desperately needed. I too would say slopes for a cliff, as usually they are many faceted, not just one slope.
Keep up the good work. Jennifer
Yeah, I think so, it just seems to fit better to me, thanks though Cynthia, I actually really genuinely like it when people ask those sort of questions.
J. x
Good one. Fine, universal feelings well expressed. Do you really need the 's' to make 'slope' plural?
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Jason Bayliss
Wed 25th Mar 2020 19:17
That's a really good point actually Cynthia, but I've always been a kind of, "Let it lay where it lands," type. I genuinely do appreciate the comment though because I'm dyslexic, so sometimes miss letters or whole words out, so it is genuinely, wholeheartedly appreciated.?
J. x