I liked this a lot, Rachel, especially the final line, which sums up the poem; and the juxtaposition of aunties, handbags, and hankies! Greg

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oo i like this but tell em your going to wear white every night just to pull all those perverts in search of a virgin...only an idiot would wear it twice. great poem. thanks for your comments on 'so poor the martyr of love' also.

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Hi Rachel,
I think this is definitely worth carrying on with, it's so reminiscent of my own holy communion, it brought lots of memories back.The snippets of ideas/ information work really well for me, the poem works as if it's the child looking back on her experiences, she can only remember bits of what happened rather than a coherent narrative of the day! Great stuff!

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Thanks Steve,
it's part of a much longer piece which deals with some of the religious stuff and a child's response to that but it's at the endless roll of toilet paper stage at the minute. I posted this to see if it was worth carrying on with....thanks to your comment, I bloomin well will....just need to get my headache cured and my editing head on!
Thanks again.
xxx

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I think it's very nice as a poem. It's weird to introduce Catholic kids to a concept as mind-blowing as Holy Common as young as is customary, but hey-ho, it sure gives a young life a sense of occasion, and your poem, even as a work-in-progress, evokes that. I'd like you develop it a bit to express some of the mystery of the day.

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