Hi guys! I’ve just started this, but I would like to be even more out than I already am! I would really appreciate it if you had any input on my poems, or if you have any advice on how to become more popular with my work. I would also love it if you could share my poems with others (with credit), as well.
Thanks,
Ryn.

Ryn,
Everything Colin says is correct. One of the biggest errors WOL members make is over-posting as the site archives on a monthly basis with only the last poem posted readily visible.
Looking at your work I can only offer one piece of advice. Imagine your poem is being written on something like Twitter with only a set number of words which can be used. So make every word count and mean something. Don't repeat unless it is for effect and consider every word like and, so, but, then as a waste unless absolutely necessary.

Why do you want to become more popular? If you want to be popular, you could join a boy band. Or say something everyone agrees with.

Or you could write out of your own experience, using the words that mean something to you. And you could read poetry and other literature and learn about structure and form and actually think about stuff. It takes time and dedication and the desire to learn.

Unfortunately, the latter won't make you popular. Nobody likes a clever dick.

Thank you for the good advice I will definitely use it!