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john short

Sun 4th Nov 2018 09:10

Okay thanks, I understand what you mean now. Keep up the good work, I'm enjoying the magazine.

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Thu 1st Nov 2018 06:21

I agree with the first observation. Thank you. Poppy flowers are associated with the cemeteries of soldiers fallen in wars. After a millennium, mankind did not understand anything and people talk through bullets.

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john short

Mon 27th Aug 2018 14:15

Hello Silviu,

Thanks for the message (which led me to this poem).

Generally it's a good piece and I liked the melancholy atmosphere and also the way it seems to have a deeper level of meaning.

Two small observations: I don't think brink is the best word and perhaps the twilight cusp or moment might be better - just a suggestion.

Also I don't know what "with a bullet to chat" means, so I failed to understand that line.

Best wishes

John Short

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