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Wed 17th Feb 2010 16:44

Hi Thomas - I very much enjoyed reading your poem "Pull Apart The Perfect Nest". Beautifully structured and very clever, love the imagery which this conjures.

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Tue 16th Feb 2010 19:02

I know just what you mean about quality control. I think that every time I open my mouth, let alone what I've put in writing. Your 'One of Us Was Right to Leave' feels like it very much comes from the heart and is very powerful.

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Alison Mary Dunn

Sat 19th Dec 2009 11:49

Hey Thomas, a very warm welcome to WOL. I'm so glad to have read the poems you've posted so far. You have a gift and it's lucky for us that you're sharing it.
At the moment I like them all but 'Raining in Darlington' seems to have impacted on me most.
Ally x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 16th Dec 2009 15:33

Thomas, your Bio is considered and honest, sharing with us those things about you that really matter. Second paragraph - ace!

And with your posted poems I so appreciate your care with common spelling and grammar, just editting in general. Comments are more relaxed, of course, and prone to hasty mistakes - no biggee. By the way, Ann's advice about spaced blogs is absolutely right - great for you to have a friend on board already. And she came on to WOL like a tornado, too.

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 15th Dec 2009 08:53

Hi Thomas - your poems are very good. I know I encouraged you to post some bloggs, but they would get more attention if you maybe put one up a day rather than several all at a time. I have found that if people see a stream of them together, they might not read them all properly, and some people even seem to almost resent seeing several bloggs in a row. As I feel I encouraged you in the first place, I don't want your poetry (which really is a lovely addition to this sight) to sink without trace all in one go. I know I'm sounding like your old mum giving you advice but I would actually delete them except the first one or two, then pop them back up individually over the days to come. But do tell me to but out if you like! lol AF x

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 14th Dec 2009 21:33

Sorry Thomas, I tried to email your profile email and it bounced back. Have you written it correctly?

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 14th Dec 2009 21:22

Hello Thomas, welcome to WOL. If this is a taste of what is to come, we're in for a treat. Your words are very well chosen.
If you'd like some initial criticism, I would punctuate your lines to give them more emphasis, so that we can read them as you do.
It helps this too if a poet doesn't start each line with a capital letter, although many poets do not think this important. It's up to you.

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 14th Dec 2009 17:43

Hi Thomas - welcome to WOL. I think we all (unless we're super-bigheaded, not many poets like that surely!) have doubts re quality control! But I really think that if Pull Apart The Perfect Nest is the sound of your voice, then you are a poet! It's very good and very moving. And it's very original the way you've used images from nature, with moss and twigs and feathers, to describe this sad tearing apart of two people and their home and their hopes for the future.
I find that if you want some feedback, people usually read the blogg poems. Hopefully many also read the profiles, but there are so many poets on the site that you could get missed. So don't be shy, blogg away!

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