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winston plowes

Thu 4th Nov 2010 23:25

Hi Dave. how are you? 'Inside Out' is unknown to me. I don't have a telly! Win x

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Tue 2nd Nov 2010 21:32

Hi Dave and thanks for your comment on my poem 'Autonomy.'
I'm in a miniature poetry phase :-)

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winston plowes

Mon 1st Nov 2010 13:10

Hi Dave, thanks for commenting on my boat poem, maybe its the fish who had their FREEDOM. Win x

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Gus Jonsson

Fri 15th Oct 2010 16:21

Good afternoon Dave

Thank you so much for your comments you are very kind.

It seems to me that FREEDOM is a catalyst of circumstance, for example the cigarette crying for freedom is at once set ablaze and is extinguished humiliatingly into the stench of the ash tray who in turn cries out to be set free from its foul labour.

Of course not one of them realising that the cigarette smoker desires to cease his or hers odorous habit and be set free ….and so on.

Once again many thanks
Gus

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Paul F Blackburn

Thu 14th Oct 2010 18:48

Thanks for your comment on my Freedom poem.

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winston plowes

Tue 28th Sep 2010 20:44

Hi Dave thanks for the bullet comments. In fact I started another some weeks ago which had some very strong similarities to your first stanza! Win x

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Thu 16th Sep 2010 08:02

Hi - "bite the bullet" - thanks for the comments Dave.
all the best. B

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Isobel

Tue 14th Sep 2010 22:12

I'm not so liberated that I don't keep checking my emails a zillion times a day though! Still - it is a good exercise to clear the decks ever so once in a while...
You also made me realise that I spelt Spartacus wrong - I shall correct it immediately. Thanks for your comment.xx

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Isobel

Sun 12th Sep 2010 10:27

That's a good enough excuse... last time I stored stuff for people doing a round the world trip, I ended up infested with cat fleas... What a lucky girl! See ya next month then. xx

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Isobel

Sun 12th Sep 2010 09:55

Aww thanks Dave - it was a huge shock and honour. Where were you on Thursday - you were missed at the Tudor. x

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Louise Fazackerley

Fri 10th Sep 2010 22:19

hey dave,

i've got a performance opportunity for you :) any chance you could email me? louisefazackerley@hotmail.com

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Rachel McGladdery

Thu 2nd Sep 2010 22:15

Thanks very much Dave, both for the lovely comment and the congrats. :)

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Pete Crompton

Wed 1st Sep 2010 16:50

Dave, thanks for your feedback on 'cryogenic'. I'm glad you found some interest in there, it was a bit of a stream of...type poem.
I like your 'PapaOscar' poem with the 'rarer/sierra' couplet being a fave of mine. 'Fear/Ikea' is another fun couplet, I have an Ikea/BnQ poem which I would like to share with you, maybe read it out if I see you at a reading. Pete.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 26th Aug 2010 07:46

Hi, Dave! Thank you so much for reading my poems "Ballad about the Soldier" and "The Victory Day". Thank you very much for your thoughtful comments.
With warmest wishes, Larisa

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Wed 25th Aug 2010 22:00

Hi Dave-many thanks for comments on 'T'inking' poem.-Stef.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Wed 18th Aug 2010 09:13

Hi, Dave! Thank you so much for your comment on my poem "Life is short". I enjoyed reading your poems. And "The Freckleton Air Disaster" is a great poem. If you have time please read my poems "The Victory Day" and "Ballad about the soldier". I would like to know your opinion about them.
With warmest wishes,
Larisa

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 11th Jul 2010 20:12

Ta Dave - Ladys Bedstraw. x PS I have added an audio to that poem.

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winston plowes

Sat 10th Jul 2010 21:16

Hi Dave... Heather said "Does anyone know who wrote Eyam and the Wells? I'm intrigued but I tried googling it and couldn't find a reference." Can you please enlighten her and me :-) Thx Win

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Ray Miller

Sat 10th Jul 2010 11:59

Dave. Thanks for your comments on Anything Goes. The rhyme scheme crept in as a result of listening to Leonard Cohen one day.It's more of a song, I suppose, with Anything Goes as the refrain. It's about literary pretensions, would you believe!

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 10th Jul 2010 06:11

Hi Dave - thanks for comments on my last two. x

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Isobel

Sat 10th Jul 2010 01:57

Oh my Goodness - I've just got it! I was reading it with a french accent before - what a twit! Only you could come up with that! Need to find myself an oar, obviously...Tee hee - you should write a funny french poem - you'd bring the house down!

Yours,

Sleepless from Wigan. xx

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Isobel

Sat 10th Jul 2010 01:24

You can be as flippant as you like on my poems Dave - all friendly banter more than welcome!I am struggling to understand your french though - was that the back of a wine bottle?Tell me where you went to get such a clean beach - I haven't managed to find one yet...xx

ps I will read and comment on yours tomorrow. Am tired - I need to sleep. I enjoyed that pasta one at the Tudor though - it was one of those funny groan ones - where each line takes you to new hights...

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Pete Crompton

Sat 10th Jul 2010 00:27

brilliant performance at Wigan
Love the 'nude twister' imagary, sounds suburban wife swap ish, super curtain twitchin stuff!

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 25th Jun 2010 21:39

Thanks Dave - re Love to the Blood and Bone. x

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 19th Jun 2010 18:13

I see you've got time to put your feet up, Dave! x

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winston plowes

Fri 18th Jun 2010 23:21

Hi dave...thanks for commenting on "It only Ends Once", much apreciated. win

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Chris Dawson

Fri 28th May 2010 03:15

Hi Dave,
Thanks for your comment on 'Play Me', glad you liked it.
Cx

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 28th Apr 2010 21:41

Thanks for nice comments on Dark Moon. x

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John Coopey

Sat 17th Apr 2010 17:36

Thanks Dave for the comment on my Nightjar villanelle.
I got wrong some of the alternate endings in each stanza but put them right in the mp3 (or vice versa) but you're right that I take a few liberties coaxing in the repeating lines for new contexts!
I write this after we beat Arsenal midweek but before we lose to Chelsea this afternoon!

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Ray Miller

Tue 30th Mar 2010 10:01

Dave, glad you liked First to Depart.Thanks for the kind words.

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Chris Dawson

Tue 30th Mar 2010 08:08

Hi Dave - glad you liked my war poem, it's not easy writing about domestic violence without making it clichéd - so I decided to ...erm... make it clichéd! I don't often rhyme these days - it often feels forced to me. I love Papa Oscar Echo Mike - nothing forced about that...very clever!
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Andy Sewina aka Danny Wise

Mon 1st Mar 2010 11:25

Hi Dave, love your sestina, and that word 'machino' is a stroke of genius!

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Isobel

Thu 25th Feb 2010 00:30

Thanks for paying me a visit Dave. Am touched that you liked it. It is probably one of my favourites and I may never find it in me to write one like that again.
Hope to see you at the Tudor next month.
Isobel x

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Richard Tyrone Jones

Thu 25th Jun 2009 14:14

POEM: 'I wish I'd thought of that'

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Dave Carr

Mon 15th Jun 2009 17:50

Thanks for comments everyone and great reception at Wigan.
The Prisoner is an older poem so maybe could be improved. I'll think about changing it although I've got used to reading it without a problem. (in my humble opinion) I'm usually quite rigorous about line length myself and I've read Stephen Fry's The Ode Less Travelled, although I can't claim to follow his rules to the letter.
Dave

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Sun 14th Jun 2009 12:24

Hi Dave,
enjoyed your performance at Wigan, nice to see you posting here.
I like the prisoner, it reminds me of how i feel i Debenhams stores. When in Ikea i feel a bit like Dorothy in the wizard of oz. Follow the yellow brick road and you end up back in the same place. ha ha.

Your phonetic alphabet poem is fantastic, really enjoyed reading that one. :-)

Janet.

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Tony Walsh

Sun 14th Jun 2009 07:38

Hi Dave

Welcome to WOL. I've enjoyed both your pieces. The second is very clever, I particularly like "Delta" :-)

The IKEA piece is strong too but, would you allow me to offer a supportive comment? I stumbled on a couple of occasions reading it as you have varying line lengths between corresponding lines in the different verses. (Count 'em!)

Forgive me, but I'm a bit obsessive about this, and find that - for comic verse especially, it really helps to get this right as it's to do with the comic necessity about timing.

Because I value the piece (and because I've been awake since Stupid O'clock this morning! Oh, and because I have the same nightmare about the bloody place!), I've been drawn to have a quick play around with it and would suggest a form with lines of 8,6,9,6 syllable length.

Then with a few tweaks and the odd linking word like "and/as/then" etc inserted, there's an even stronger poem in there trying to get out. The same end rhymes and (your very good) jokes, just a bit tighter on the old metre and scansion.

Feel free to tell me to stick this, Dave :-) But, if you're interested then take another look at the piece and then maybe message back here or contact me via my profile page and I could either email my thoughts to you privately or post them up here.

Cheers.

Tony

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winston plowes

Sun 14th Jun 2009 00:36

Hi Dave, Welcome to WOL. your PapaOscarEchoMike piece is a great idea. Winston

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