Very different for you Andy! An intriguing one and a little sad. The fact that a life can just pass away without even the excitement of a gory murder, unnoticed, unmissed, unimportant. An original idea which successfully makes you think...
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I'm glad you've posted this, Andy. I do think it is good. I hope more readers respond.
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Sun 14th Feb 2010 13:50
Hi Andy, some interesting imagery in this. I don't think it needs the stanza next to the last one and to be completely honest i'd be tempted to scrap 'with angels' from the ending for greater impact.
Of course you should stick with you're own ideas, after all, you are far more educated in the art of writing poetry than i am. I just comment on what i feel. ;-)
Good theme.
Janet.x
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winston plowes
Wed 24th Feb 2010 10:16
Hi Andy... liked the drifting limbo of the body waiting to be collected. The snow image and the story you were telling which had start middle and end. not sure about the repetition parts. Good stuff Win
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