Thankyou very much, I wondered whether adding pain would be too long or not. I shall now be able to improve my piece. The laat bit didn't flow the way I wanted without that rhyme so thank you so much

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We understand each other Hayley. You know I'm a rhymer. This piece lilts along nicely. Can I suggest a last line which rhymes with 'drain'

'One day I will escape the pain' emphasise es-
If I thought more I might get a better flowing line. Anything rhyming attracts me

Don ?

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