wonderful stuff ian. full of memories, romance and the ultimate acknowledgement of defeat and lessons learnt. and so beautifully written, all tied in wonderfully with the title and the brief dalliance of the mayfly.
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Ahhh this is beautiful... bitter sweet growing up!! Loved it!
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Mon 22nd May 2017 08:56
I like this lots Ian, especially the heart resetting line. However I do find the mayfly analogy somewhat out of context with the Christmas Eve setting although I understand why you have used it. I once walked a (future) girlfriend home on New Year's Eve and a shooting star briefly crossed the night sky. I wonder if something like that might be more fitting although on second thoughts it might make it a bit cheesy and Disneyfied. Not really a big criticism Ian, more me thinking out loud if you don't mind. All the best, Colin.
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