I like this lots but see it as a series of five interconnected short poems that I want to separate with ~'s or number 1,2,3,4,5. They are all quite delightful and near perfect in their own right - although I would personally axe 'because I'm lost in the deep' which to me breaks the flow and sleep / deep is just too rhymey for me. Nice one MDA.
All the best, Col.
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Sun 12th Feb 2017 09:07
I like this lots but see it as a series of five interconnected short poems that I want to separate with ~'s or number 1,2,3,4,5. They are all quite delightful and near perfect in their own right - although I would personally axe 'because I'm lost in the deep' which to me breaks the flow and sleep / deep is just too rhymey for me. Nice one MDA.
All the best, Col.
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