On further reading there is a D H Lawrence feel to the descriptors.
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I can't claim to understand the first two lines. for me this piece starts in line 3 where it really gets going. Again some good lines,
"but the wolf is inside me, he rides me!
The wolf is in my mouth, he is in my mind,
he is in my heart, his sharp claws wrapped around my soul".
Personally I feel the repetitious baby's weaken this and it work equally well if not better without them, at least at the start.
You always seem to be able to conjure up personal duress in your work Alexandra.
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Alexandra Parapadakis
Fri 17th Jun 2016 21:24
Thanks for the advice and insight Graham :)
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