Thanks so much for your feedback everyone!

I'm new to this but am challenging myself to write a new poem every week

Looking forward to reading everyones work :)

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Original item by Rachael J. Low

As Stu and Vicki have said there is some great imagery here Rachel. I also caught a hint of an almost Jerkyl and Hyde quality about this with
'I can't control the beast you see he's all I now and love'
Great poem.

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Original item by Rachael J. Low

Hi Rachael
there is some wonderful images and lines in here
sugared suns peppered with hate
^^ wonderful
as vicki mentioned, acid tongues spit twisted words is also fab.
the last line is very clever and ties the whole thing up.
confession - i dont much like this kind of poetry (woman-man, heartbreak etc) but this is one i'd come back to.
excellent.

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Acid tongues spit twisted words

I love that! It's an apt description of a tortured relationship - I like it - Vic x

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