Thanks Stu for your thoughtful comment and yes that line is this backdrop and the sabotaging brackets

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thanks for your lovely comment Robert . i think the brackets are something of a counter voice , but i do see what you mean . thanks again

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Thanks Vicki for taking the time to comment , glad it resonates and yes the brackets are exactly that

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I could use this as my mantra - I really enjoyed it & identify on all levels! I also agree with Stu I like the brackets - to me it's like my inner voice talking - you know the one you can't turn off but wish you could! Nice one xx

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great piece. i disagree with robert (purely a personal choice however) and think the brackets add an important fractured backstory. the key line here is 'does she wish i was another'. so much said in so few words

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I like this work on many levels, but I'm not sure on the bracketed passages - do they add enough to halt the flow, as they seem to in my mind?
Love the flavour of regret, and the false conviction in the quest to quit.

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