Wed 18th Nov 2015 02:05
Thank you very much for the feedback I'll make sure I'll make the necessary changes in the ones coming up.
Comment is about Answer to a Prayer (blog)
Original item by Allen Jo Mathews
A delightful little piece, charming, consistently lyrical and well-rhymed.
Because it is a 'page presentation, perhaps you might eliminate your commas after the end words 'before' and 'hoping'; they seem to interrupt the flow of a thought for no reason. Running a line 'idea' from one into another is very acceptable, very adept.
Comment is about Answer to a Prayer (blog)
Original item by Allen Jo Mathews
M.C. Newberry
Wed 18th Nov 2015 17:15
Nice, gentle love song with a satisfying pay-off, that could be rewarded with a tune to match.
In verse 2 I would have been tempted to use something
like -
"You're the rhythm to my rhyme" - for the last line.
But that's me being subjective...nothing more.
Comment is about Answer to a Prayer (blog)
Original item by Allen Jo Mathews