good stuff, Steve.. I thought it was quite subtle when you read it out the other day... I must admit it is even more subtle on page.
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Wed 27th May 2009 20:26
I have to say I am very impressed - so well structured and thought out - look forward to hearing one day :-)
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Wed 27th May 2009 20:18
wow Steve!
agree with Bill too
read many times and love the rhythm :-)
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Très bien...
First and fourth verses are my fave...
Adventures and dreams...
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Wed 27th May 2009 15:31
I like the three-line verses, I don't see a lot of them. They take some of the 'predictability' out of it -I think ???
Sleep fell like temple stones is a great image.
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Hi Steve
A delightul perspective into book at bed time.. great poem
love it.
Gus
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Jeff Dawson
Sat 13th Jun 2009 13:45
Hi Steve, great little poem this and works well the way you structured it, nice one Jeff
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