Hi Lynn,

Thanks for the kind comments, yes, I do write from the heart, and I absolutely love doing so, yet technical stuff is really important too. I see the two as complimenting each other, not as being as opposed as some might.

I love writing and striving to improve is always the way forward.

Thanks for the comments.

Carol

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Hi Carol. I enjoyed your blog but I do not feel qualified to give any technical opinions. My outlook is just write from the heart and see what comes out and as long as if you enjoy it - do it! Lynn x

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Criticism is a double edged sword: we want it - we don't want it. I've been on WOL only a short time but the few conversations I have been involved with have all been extremely useful in helping to develop my own writing. It has also been interesting to see who is writing what. Definitely not personal.

Ka-ching or kerching? The sound of a cash register? The choice is yours. x

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I am currently editing a children's poetry book which has taken up a lot of time, but when I get the chance I will return to this poem and re-edit then post, might be a number of days though. I really appreciate your feedback, I know that honesty is the best policy, and from experience as a writer it is not good to be too sensitive to criticism especially because it is nearly always not personal I will take a look at your work soon. Good luck with your writing, Colin.

P.S. I am wondering whether if I put kaching instead of kuching would that alter the meaning?

Best wishes, Carol x

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Hope I wasn't too cruel Carol. Look forward to reading the re-write. x

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I guess I asked for honesty so I got it! Thanks for your feedback, it's made me realise that this poem does need quite a bit of work.

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Honest feedback Carol: rambling with some slightly obvious but awkward rhyming. Honesty / policy - bliss / amiss for example. It's hard to relate everything back to the loaded gun theme despite the (unnecessary?) repetition of the title throughout the piece. Maybe let the title speak for itself and cut 'loaded gun' from the poem altogether. Condense the rest and pick out the best.

What is your definition of 'kuching' btw? According to urbandictionary.com it's either the capital of Sarawak or 'having sex with a post op Malaysian tranny'. x

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