'the snow outside' is particularly apt as I read this and I particularly liked the lines:
he is sitting
listening to the shadows
move from room
to room
A sad but enjoyable poem.
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'the snow outside' is particularly apt as I read this and I particularly liked the lines:
he is sitting
listening to the shadows
move from room
to room
A sad but enjoyable poem.
Comment is about Exes (blog)
Original item by A.M. Clarke
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Cynthia Buell Thomas
Fri 16th Jan 2015 12:30
Succinct and strong.
Would you consider the short, sharp 'he sits', cutting out one 'ing' ending after another, and so leaving space for 'he is tracing' which implies 'continued time' in a very poignant way? Just a thought because I really like the poem. It doesn't imply 'better'.
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