Ian, bloomin' brilliant. I do admire your succinct scheme. Jeez! Well done. You stir me out of laziness.

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Good sentiment. And iamic pentameter. I think those ghosts would be friendly - teddy bears really!

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It seems strange to think of the Tudor lying empty with no more words to be spoken on that stage and just memories of all that went before.

If we'd only known in October that that was going to be the last one, how painful would it have been?

Well done you for writing this - it echoes what we all feel.

I would try to write something myself, but I've got a panto to write :) Onwards and upwards eh?

Look forward to hearing this.

xx

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i never went there, Ian but i can really see this poem. top stuff..

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thanks for the comment Graham - it's a Ballade Royal stanza form - so the rules don't allow me to add that last line rhyme you suggest as it has to be seven lines ending on a CC rhyme - sorry :-)

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This is really strong but I can't help feeling on several readings it needs another line to rhyme with "night" as a penultimate line.

Well done Ian, a fine au-revoir

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