lot going on in here, emma. i particularly like the use of the first and last line here but there is a lot of excellent lines in here (really).

really enjoyed this.

andy

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Thanks very much Ged. You've picked up on exactly what I was trying to show. I think it's important to give a voice to a tortured soul. Quite often they/we don't get a chance.

Emma

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A train poem with a heart of darkness. Some very striking lines here, Emma. Nice to see you back on Write Out Loud.

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Wow!

Very dark, the poetic accent of a tortured soul. I think all poets are somewhat tortured souls. I hate when you hear someone ask another poet why they started writing and they reply with such garbage as "Ive always been creative and had a nice way of putting things" Pain creates poets, if we are honest it is the fundamental catalyst to becoming a writer....

I digress sorry....

I love the darkness of this and its honesty, its broken nature the way it stops starts and fragments as if the poet is viewing the situation through a smashed mirror and trying to put the pieces of the situation together through a process of extrapolating through tiny windows and clues. It comes across really well.

I love the second line, it cuts the first line dead as you read it as though a wind itself is cutting through the piece.

Sorry if I went on bit I tend to ramble when I am tired....

Good piece well done XXXX

Ged

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