Great writing, powerful stuff and well put together.
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I really liked this. The internal rhymes draw you in. It seems to be quite fast-paced as well. Nice.
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Ouch! Pure Arabica poetry - dark and bitter.
Regards,
A.E.
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Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 30th Jul 2014 10:42
The conclusion is interesting 'there are no gods' when, in the first stanza, you use the strong expression 'uncleansed of sin' as though the god-idea was very strong in your psyche.
Did you do anything for 12-12-12?
It is an interesting structure, very. Is the 'limp' and 'hop' in the metre scan deliberate? To emphasise your point?
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