Bite the bullet. Face up to our worst apprehensions. This piece is so emotive (and I've been there and it was just like this)Are you writing from personal experience?
Not sure whether 'I enjoyed it' is quite the right expession - it certainly touched a raw point in me.XX

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Biting the bullet seems a good idea considering what's in store!!

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safe and secure in my candy floss.detached,two point two world such a vulnerable line...love it

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Cate, I'm finally back to you. Dave and Isobel covered my reactions eloquently.
I did find myself making my own stanzas. The first idea seemed to be assertions of 'I do not want..' up to ' ....clappy World'. Then you grip the real subject with the metaphor of 'bullet' and you beg not to be physically tortured using 'bullet' imagery, deliberately excessive. Next is 'the silent scream' section with its emotional 'soundless spaces'. And finally, you assert your realism again, recognizing the inevitable circumstances, but begging only for more time. It is really well-structured; the 'stanzas' idea just helped me to appreciate it.

The kids are leaving home, or some such?

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You express well the imminent doom that brings about apprehensive feelings.

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Cate, this is so moving. You really feel the pain when reading. fab poem
xxx

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This is just so good, Cate, well done. xx

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A good themed poem, powefully descriptive in its delivery, I think nobody would like to bite this piece of ordnance XX

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This is absolutely brilliant Cate. Stylistically much more contemporary than your usual stuff - I love it.
From an emotional point of view it is heart breaking - made me cry in fact - but then I have been up half the night as well...
I know it must have been hard for you to write this. I should comment on the poetry - there is too much to say. I like the repetition at the beginning. I like the idea of empty space ricocheting round (strange we should have both chosen to use that unusual word!, I also love the ending - the short sentences - the repetition, the overwhelming sadness and denial it evokes.
I'm done. x

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I've kept you up all night? You know what people will say - WOL being WOL.

Joking aside,Cate,this is really really good. It's the best poetic description I personally have ever seen of the universal human experience of being in denial. It's going to be an interesting competition

PS get some kip! xx

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I cannot believe Ive been up all night doing this Dave!!! But when youve gotta write youve gotta write.Ive had somewhat of a literary wasteland recently.... thanks for getting my literary flow going again!Cate xx

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