Thank you for taking time to read. I'll work on the wordy-ness.

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There are some nuggets in this piece. The trouble is they are difficult to mine out of the whole poem. It is difficult to read and for my money needs to be in shorter lines.

It’s hidden well, but I search
deep within the crevices of your mind.
I interpret your words and actions
to depict intention and longing, want and need.

etc etc! Just my view, the words are good though

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