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Thu 25th Apr 2019 21:55

Wow! Heartbreaking details. Next level storytelling in just a few words. Feels like it should be a best selling book or movie. Perhaps then justice would prevail and suffering not be in vain. Thanks for sharing John. ?

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John Marks

Thu 25th Apr 2019 21:52

Thanks Mae. My gran used to say: "don't run yourself down John, the rest of the world will do that for you!"

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 21:27

Do I detect some questions of creation existence and cosmogony dear John?
Lovely piece, thank you for it ?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 21:25

Complex and I have to say out of my league, understanding-wise but I loved it ?
You're a brilliant man John E Mark's!
Sincerely?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 20:45

What Rachel said. Raw and stripped of embellishments. True.
I have enjoyed your work, so original.
Thank you Mila?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 20:44

"I have not felt any pain, yet continously i burn at the stake." Powerful stuff! Heart is right in everything she so eloquently said.
Thank you?
Mae

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Lisa C Bassignani

Thu 25th Apr 2019 20:42

Thanks so much Adam. I appreciate the comments. I know that the ending is not as epic as it could be. I wrote it for a young man who once said that he would sell his soul to make it in the music business.
I like to think that the story is not complete as he still has some growing up to do. I will definitely revisit this one.


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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 20:39

And you are heard dear Mila.?I Love your writing!
Thank you ?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 20:32

Outstanding, Mila!
Thank you for this ?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 20:30

Thank you Steve! ?Appreciate it!
Mae

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 25th Apr 2019 20:14

Spot on John. Tommy

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anamaria

Thu 25th Apr 2019 19:44

love is deeply painful and yet like gravity, there is little escape. always love your words, always.
and guilt... we carry it with us, on one shoulder and shame on the other.

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anamaria

Thu 25th Apr 2019 19:43

a true piece of raw poetry... it's all i want. rawness. thank you Rachel.

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Jeannot

Thu 25th Apr 2019 19:36

Mona, thank you very much for your kind words

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mona s

Thu 25th Apr 2019 18:55

Beautifully rendered and heart tugging one..

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 17:02

Thank you Shifa?

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Shifa Maqba

Thu 25th Apr 2019 16:59

Thank you, Mae and M.C. Newberry! Means a lot!

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Shifa Maqba

Thu 25th Apr 2019 16:51

Brilliant work!

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 16:34

Hi Graham. Know the feeling, I agree and sincerely sympathize. Aside from that, truly beautiful poem!
Thank you?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 16:27

Yes that sounds about right! First you pass the Adriatic then the Ionian then the Aegean! I sound like a GPS! Haha!
Sounds like a nice trip anyway?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 14:49

A devastating truth. I think "heartstrings" is a very real notion, and hence a word. And your poem does touch them.
Thank you ?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 14:44

Beautiful and craftily made! Bravo!
Thank you?
Mae

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 25th Apr 2019 14:43

haha i'm getting it - it was from France to Italy to Greece to Turkey. All seas are beautiful. Tommy

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Laura Taylor

Thu 25th Apr 2019 14:18

Hi Jason

Thanks for your lovely note on 'Helicoid' - appreciate that ?

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 25th Apr 2019 13:57

A "picture in words" that draws the reader into its story - needing to
know how it ends. Vivid and sad at the same time, it is well worth the
effort!

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 25th Apr 2019 13:52

Brutal deeds invariably come from brutish minds, with an inability to
understand how they can cause a "coming together" of others to
oppose the nihilism their deeds represent. Well captured in these
lines. Hope springs eternal - as the saying goes.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 25th Apr 2019 13:42

Interesting stuff, to be sure. I have a copy of "Usage And Abusage - A Guide To Good English" by Eric Fowler which first appeared in
the United States in 1942. In his Forward, the author mentions -
"To be fit for American publication, Professor W. Cabell Green
extensively annotated the work". On a purely personal level, I was
privileged to know the late William Benzie, author of a biography
about the founder of the Oxford English Dictionary. It intrigued me
that an Aberdonian living and teaching In Canada should write such
a work. I suppose that such a flexible language as English will
always be a subject for discussion - and long may it be so.

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Philip Stevens

Thu 25th Apr 2019 13:37

D.knape..that's very cryptic ???

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Mae Foreman

Thu 25th Apr 2019 13:24

Hey Tommy. Thanks for stopping by at my profile! If it was the Adriatic Sea you crossed then you passed from Italy to Greece and it wasn't the Aegean but The Ionian Sea. The South Mediterranean is my home and I find it ravishing! But I don't think it's just I that feels this way. I guess it's no wonder it took you breath!
Thanks Tommy ?
Mae

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 25th Apr 2019 13:24

Eh? Broke down or just broke?
More like sometimes dazed...often confused! ?

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 25th Apr 2019 13:00

I once sailed across the Adriatic from Greece to Turkey (or was it from Italy to Greece?)
at dawn - The sun inches above the Islands in the mist and a glass-like sea. It was the most transforming vision that I have...shh I do go on
ps I grind my own beans.
tc
pps or was it the Aegean?

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 25th Apr 2019 12:49

Cheers Stu for your post re 'Knock-Knock' I agree! (chuckle) ? Tommy ...(have I already responded to you to my post earlier or...hang on I'm going to lie ((or is it lye?)) down...)

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 25th Apr 2019 12:41

Who's Lyra?

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Jeannot

Thu 25th Apr 2019 12:23

Thank you Jason for reading and taking the time to comment

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jennifer Malden

Thu 25th Apr 2019 11:31

Missed this one earlier - unfortunately too true. Like the two social workers who came across a brutally murdered corpse, and said -'the person who did this really needs help'! Here most of the judges are leftwing, and people who shot and injured or unintentionally killed violent robbers, usually from Eastern Europe, who broke into their homes or premises risked having to pay damages to the robbers' families, and being accused of murder. I don't want Europe to become like the US, where it seems to be normal to keep an arsenal at home, but one has a right to defend oneself and family, and in an emergency situation one doesn't stop to think.Now they have changed the law.

Jennifer

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jennifer Malden

Thu 25th Apr 2019 11:05

Thanks Jason and Martin! The homeless really touch my heartstrings (if that word exists!), especially in the winter. You feel guilty about having a warm comfortable home to return to.

Jennifer

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elPintor

Thu 25th Apr 2019 10:50

Hi Jason,

I was writing this and was reminded of a song I used sing to my son when he was an infant...

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=m8kQs91fj-w

He used to look up at me with darling sleepy eyes--so peaceful and sweet.

I knew without a doubt from the day I set eyes on him that love shows its truest forms in ways Hallmark will never be deep enough to express

Thanks-- glad it moved you to respond )

Rachel

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John Coopey

Thu 25th Apr 2019 10:19

Thanks, Steve.
I can’t remember why I made the link between NF and Fanlight Fanny. (It was 2014, I think). Though I’ve always thought it is a cracking tune.
Although I remain a convinced Remainer, you might be aware that I snipe in any direction, Left, Right, Leave, Remain. I have to say that this seems to gall my chums on the Left disproportionately who seem to feel that somehow their icons should be immune.
“Respect” as da yoof, say.

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John Coopey

Thu 25th Apr 2019 08:57

The tune existed, Steve.. I pinched it..So it was words onto tune.
It is George Formby’s “Fanlight Fanny”, which contains one of the greatest lines of poetry ever written,
“She’s a peach but understand
She’s called a peach because she’s always canned;”.

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=5d4mY5W-FcE

I’m delighted I was wrong too although I was part-right about needing the away goal (3, in fact). In truth, the two games at the Etihad showed they were always one goal better than us.

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Jason Bayliss

Thu 25th Apr 2019 06:36

Really, very touching. Beautifully put.

J.

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Randy Horton

Thu 25th Apr 2019 06:23

d.knape

Thu 25th Apr 2019 00:41

are you broke down
or
just Broke?

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d.knape

Thu 25th Apr 2019 00:09

pest control eh?
a good career for any budding poet.
all poets need backup
because there is no money in Poetry
it's not a true job
more like an Obsession..

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Wayne McLellan

Wed 24th Apr 2019 23:27

Pontins in Prestatyn in the 70's was my first holiday camp experience. Still not sure if the barbed wire on the perimeter fence was to keep unwanted visitors out or to keep the paying guests in?

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Wayne McLellan

Wed 24th Apr 2019 23:20

We need more humour in poetry. Thanks for sharing John?

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Philip Stevens

Wed 24th Apr 2019 23:16

It was Football for me
jumpers for goal posts
We were are own referee
There was no offside
Goal celebrations where a joyish fist pump nothing fancy
And when we lost
It was time for tea
Taking the ball
Which of course belonged to me

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Wayne McLellan

Wed 24th Apr 2019 23:15

Thanks for reading and the great comments on my first poem chaps ?

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Wayne McLellan

Wed 24th Apr 2019 23:12

That's why I tend to start with an ending and work backwards (if that makes sense) ?

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Wayne McLellan

Wed 24th Apr 2019 23:07

Quite poignant, considering what happened in Sri Lanka recently......

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Wayne McLellan

Wed 24th Apr 2019 23:03

Well said. Hopefully out of such a tragedy the seeds of hope, tolerance and unity will grow.

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