Thanks all your likers: Graham David Jennifer Jon Heart of Lead and Devon - nice to know people are reading my stuff.
And thanks Don for expressing that and Josie I guess it is an entreaty of sorts. We all need to look on the bright side.
Ray
Comment is about SIMPLE MINDS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Philipos
Wed 31st Jul 2019 19:37
An enjoyable read this one, reflections in the rain, mirrors, memories, -mists, where would be without them chugging away at our thoughts. ?
Comment is about On a London bus (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
<Deleted User> (18980)
Wed 31st Jul 2019 18:20
Belinda - you ask for comments but haven't made clear if they should be posted here on WOL or on your creative writing website.
Also, do you want comment on the sentiment expressed, the quality of the poetry, or something else? And are you prepared for complete honesty from commenters?
Comment is about On A Wing and A Prayer (blog)
Original item by Belinda Sue Kiser
And I must say to this...
Why?
It happens one day
Totally out of the blue.
I came to realize
A poet inside grew.
But life as a poet
Is but a lonely fate.
Your heart on your sleeve
Will make you, sure bait.
So why do I continue
To put these words down?
For my yearning desire
In my soul is deep down.
Yes someone is reading.....?
Comment is about The Benefit Gig (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
Brian Blanchard
Wed 31st Jul 2019 17:48
Excellent...and an on spot observation of the world today.
Comment is about A LOOK AT LIFE (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hi Jason - so sorry for your loss - this short but so poignant poem is a loving send off. Jennifer
Comment is about Bye Dad (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Nice one! Cubism was totally innovative then, and very difficult to paint. I prefer the later style, like 'the Farmer's wife', 'Crying woman', 'The fishermen' etc.
Jennifer
Comment is about Pablo’s Progress (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Beautifully put, and so well written. There are moments like this when one unknown person appears special to us alone.
Jennifer
Comment is about There is only one (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I don't peruse this site as attentively as I should - otherwise I would surely have commented on this excellent poem. Also like your sample 'And'. cheers Trevor
Comment is about Pondweeds (blog)
Original item by Richard Alfred
age is all right-
what's scary is
the alternative.
Like Annie Lennox says "Dying is easy it's living that scares me to death"
Comment is about d.knape (poet profile)
Original item by d.knape
As ever John thanks for your support
Comment is about Elephants on the Beach (blog)
Original item by Richard Alfred
dk you've gone and tripped up
Tripped over/up yourself
Cos writing this 'ere poem
You've done something thyself
I picture you exhausted
After creating this
But thankyou for your effort
Your fodder I would miss.....
Comment is about Nuttin (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Sure that's you in the vid John? Doesn't look anything like that WOL guy (giving praise to the sky?)
You now need to go to the next step and make a frypan guitar (despite a holey one - could add unique tonal qualities?).
You've already got a neck (the pan). Maybe some kitchen twine for strings? Then put this to good use by twanging a tuneful melody to help bonding back to Gert.
Sorted......
Comment is about THE FISH PAN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks, Josie. And it works too! I gave it a run-out two nights ago. Excellent; it lets the smoke and wood-flame through the holes to impart a barbecue flavour.
Thanks also, Devon, for the Like.
Comment is about THE FISH PAN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (9882)
Wed 31st Jul 2019 10:57
great and well-formatted piece of repetition Eiren.
Rose ?
Comment is about recognition (blog)
Original item by Eiren Water
<Deleted User> (9882)
Wed 31st Jul 2019 10:54
very clever and most definitely a poem for us girls to take note of.
Absolutely LOVED it!
Rose ?
Comment is about I am (blog)
Original item by Josie
Normally I'd encourage you to go to rehab myself but it's a sweet-sweet addiction this one! Keep it up !?
Mae
Though Jack and Jill
would like to chill
in the end they will
go up the hill
Though Jack and Jill
always go up the hill
Don Matthews will
use his mad skill
to make them wheel
and roll downhill!
Isn't it about time
We upgraded that rhyme?
So do go on!
My dear friend Don!
Thank you ?
Mae
Comment is about Everything- An Etheree (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
I like this too ..! I like its directness - the way it speaks directly to the reader - challenging and encouraging us! Thank you.
Comment is about SIMPLE MINDS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I found this really moving. You describe a feeling I can really relate to. Thank you.
Comment is about Reaching for you (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
I really really like this! I love the repetition and the structure - the way the sentences shrink as the poem progresses. It's very poignant. Thank you for sharing.
Comment is about recognition (blog)
Original item by Eiren Water
Mae I put myself
In so much bloody pain
Trying to upgrade Jack and Jill
Who down the hill they came
Don your bloody hopeless
Although your rhyming's fab
You're overloading system WOL
You need to go rehab
He's hopeless Mae.....
Comment is about Everything- An Etheree (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Megan - I have a problem with this. Write Out Loud is a poetry site and this is not a poem. It is one long monologue which goes on and on and on which after the first few lines I couldn't be bothered with.
Having said that I like your attitudes. Try new things, get out of your comfort zone. Just post poems. It is not a site for story telling.
Boats have oars not ores
responsability - spelling
believes - don't you mean beliefs?
condacenting - spelling
influnece - what is this??
becuase - spelling
unision - spelling
finantially - spelling
havn't - spelling
conquored - spelling
sabatauge - spelling
defiine - spelling
Playing large Megan is fine but you have to play it correct otherwise people will not take any notice of you. E.g. don't post errors like this, and not long monologues on a poetry site.
You have good ideas - use them well......
Comment is about Train of thoughts... (blog)
Original item by Magic
Thank you dear Jason! I'm enjoying the process!
Dear Don! I tried to make it rhyme after I'd finished but it was very difficult to do it and at the same time keep it from losing its strength and meaning which came in that fateful epiphany-type manner. You don't mess with that! Plus, the verse with the song which is the only part that rhymes would have had no effect at all! Plus, plus, I'm not the awesome rhyner that is Don Matthews! ?
Thank you both! ?
Mae
Comment is about Everything- An Etheree (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Hi Lisa,
Congratulations on POTW!
A note of sadness here as well? The diner not managing to communicate the thing that's missing; eating lots alone, getting home alone? Is Happy Tuesday what the restaurant does to attract Tuesday traffic – good deal on burritos that night?
And "los muertos" – who are they and what do they signify?
For me, this is full of enigma and I really enjoyed it.
Peter T
Comment is about 'Happy Tuesday' by Lisa C Bassignani is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wed 31st Jul 2019 03:04
age is all right-
what's scary is
the alternative.
Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)
Original item by Don Matthews
Wed 31st Jul 2019 03:02
humor is the soft cushion
for the hardness of life.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Wed 31st Jul 2019 03:01
don't worry about age
it's just a number
what matters is
what goes on inside your head.
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
The thrill of it!
Adrenaline flows
as thighs flash.
Can you fly fast?
Panting, hot, cheeks flush
and we fall.
Comment is about The Chase (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Brian - EAP is pleased with your first line but thinks the next line needs working on.....
Comment is about Are You Happy With Your Poem? (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
MC you've made my day you have
Why plus-like I do feel
Like you, an aging geriatric
Humour is my deal
This dk guy from Yankee land
Spurs me to write stuff
What would I do without him MC?
I'd have to write just fluff
How boring.....
Comment is about All There Is To See (blog)
Original item by d.knape
HOL what you say is what I often think. I can rant and rave poet lyrical as much as I want but it won't change a thing. All it does is get it out of my system. It needs a strong person to lead a mass movement pack......a politician???
Comment is about Rats (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
Golly gosh almighty
Whatever's going on?
Ether this and ether that
Can you do this Don?
Nah- it don't rhyme......
Comment is about Everything- An Etheree (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
This is extremely good Mae, watching you grow as a writer is like watching a flower come into bloom. Excellent.
J. x
Comment is about Everything- An Etheree (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Thanks Devon! It's like I'm learning English all over! I love it! I'll stop by your profile with a new form suggestion!
Cheers?
Mae
Comment is about Everything- An Etheree (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Devon Brock
Tue 30th Jul 2019 21:52
Dang, Mae, this is great and everything counts correctly. Nice work. On to the next challenge!
D
Comment is about Everything- An Etheree (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Deryn Bishop
Tue 30th Jul 2019 20:42
I am so sad to hear this news. Dave was hugely talented and such a lovely person. I first met him when I interviewed him back in the early 80s when he led the Dudley Arts Umbrella and I was doing a project for an A level I was doing at night school, and knew him as a friend thereafter. I shall treasure his poetry and music, and his smile. I cannot make the celebration of his life tomorrow, but I give my heartfelt condolences to his family, and will remember him x
Comment is about Tributes paid to performance poet, musician, and historian Dave Reeves (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thank you Branwell! ?
Mae
Comment is about Everything- An Etheree (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
very clever and very good
Comment is about Everything- An Etheree (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
A gem that gives the impression it is bursting at the seams
with a dozen other poems. I'm sure they would all be just as wise and wonderful.
Comment is about Time is My Fall (blog)
Original item by Belinda Sue Kiser
Pink not Blue
July orange thoughts
drift and dream
inside tangerine marmalade.
Comment is about BlueGirlPoetry (poet profile)
Original item by BlueGirlPoetry
Thank you so much, Don and Keith. I wish poetry had the power to topple the biggest rats.
Comment is about Rats (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 30th Jul 2019 17:32
A poem about poets' poems?
It'll never catch on...
Comment is about Are You Happy With Your Poem? (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Alison Nichol-Smith
Tue 30th Jul 2019 17:10
Thanks guys for this extensive and fitting tribute to a wonderful guy - I had no idea just how much Dave had achieved and how widely his interests and influence spread. And the photos are an absolute delight. There was nobody like him and he will indeed leave a Dave-shaped hole that's going to take some filling
Comment is about Tributes paid to performance poet, musician, and historian Dave Reeves (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
We all need something to "hop towards". Good work!
Comment is about 'We all lose something, though that day I hadn't lost a thing' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Was it Bette Davis (or maybe Joan Crawford?) who observed that
old age ain't for sissies? I have the feeling that in making my
leisurely way towards 76, I have as much right to discuss the
subject as anyone - and probably more than most on WOL - and.
will offer assurance that possessing a sense of humour is a great plus towards looking after number one in later life.
Comment is about All There Is To See (blog)
Original item by d.knape
More and more people need to hear what this poem is saying.
Thanks, Keith
Comment is about Rats (blog)
Original item by Heart of Lead
John Coopey
Wed 31st Jul 2019 19:43
I don't think I need any more, Don. I've got a dozen for sale.
Comment is about THE FISH PAN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey