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Tom

Thu 10th Sep 2020 10:25

Ah thank you Neressa, Flavia, Stephen, Julie, Victoria and Jordyn for the likes. You've made my day. ?

And Jordyn and Victoria, thank you for the encouraging comments. I was in two minds about sharing this poem so it's doubly rewarding to hear that you enjoyed. ?

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keith jeffries

Thu 10th Sep 2020 09:37

Martin,

Thank you for this. It reminds me of those final moments as we drift into sleep, our last thoughts and the sense of awareness as we enter that blissful state.

Keith

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Thu 10th Sep 2020 09:01

I helped an eldery, white, middle class, heterosexual woman across the road last week....anyone interested?

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Martin Elder

Thu 10th Sep 2020 08:46

As you say sadly all too often these stories are all to readily lost

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Martin Elder

Thu 10th Sep 2020 08:43

I love the line 'aimed at my thoughts' in particular.
Wonderful stuff

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Martin Elder

Thu 10th Sep 2020 08:41

Very nice Andy

love them

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Martin Elder

Thu 10th Sep 2020 08:39

Very very very nice. A wonderful exposition of love

love it

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keith jeffries

Thu 10th Sep 2020 08:31

Sea Green,

an interesting poem seeking reassurance in love. Are our feelings reciprocated? A familiar quest in most relationships. In this poem you have written from the heart and in so doing introduced the reader to the reality of a dilema faced by most us. Thank you for this
Keith

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celcia evangelin

Thu 10th Sep 2020 04:34

?thank you sir

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Jordyn Elizabeth

Thu 10th Sep 2020 02:32

This is Beautiful ❤️ I enjoyed reading.

-J

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Thu 10th Sep 2020 01:54

Beautiful Tom. What a bountiful legacy!

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Nigel Astell

Thu 10th Sep 2020 00:34

Ginger hair smart jacket
skinny legs lets his fingers run
silk black tights ruined.

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julie callaghan

Wed 9th Sep 2020 21:10

I hope that very soon the whole world will realise that every life matters.

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julie callaghan

Wed 9th Sep 2020 20:47

Thanks Greg for the like. yes unfortunately it will probably be Aldi and salad shopping due to the over spending and over eating. But what else are holidays for?

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julie callaghan

Wed 9th Sep 2020 20:45

There’s definitely a few more verses to be added. Paul I think the NHS quote would fit in very well.

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julie callaghan

Wed 9th Sep 2020 20:43

Thanks very much Greg, Paul, Stephen and sea.green for the comments and likes. Wasn’t too sure about this post but pleased it raised a smile or two.

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Wed 9th Sep 2020 18:09

Thank you dear Po. Not from you either??

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Hugh

Wed 9th Sep 2020 17:54

In Manchester town centre 6 months ago a 3 year old Jamaican lad had wandered away from his family from a main street store.I saw him wandering around chased him and stayed with him,ten minutes later his family looking for him were relieved that he was safe and profusely thanked me.

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Stephen Gospage

Wed 9th Sep 2020 17:41

Love it.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 16:46

Sorry, chaps, I should have said earlier. It IS a newspaper headline, from this morning ... not mine at all!

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 9th Sep 2020 16:04

Nearly as good as Metro's this morning "SAFE SIX"

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 9th Sep 2020 14:33

HI there dk - just found your note of Tuesday 8th September about
"surgery tomorrow" (today) - so I hope this finds you having returned
safe and sound from the procedure and a suitable rest thereafter.
Onwards and upwards! ???
MC

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 9th Sep 2020 14:26

Incomprehensible idiocy wasn't rare in other days, that's for sure.
The mindset was surely the result of the presumption of "the right
to rule" that existed among the aristocracy and well-to-do of the
times. Emigration from England itself was not rare - e.g. to the
Americas due to religious beliefs and social ostracism - and it was
surely arrogant idiocy & incompetence that saw Lord North preside
over the loss of British influence and control in the America of the
day even while the old enemy, France, was vying for control there.
On such turns of history's wheel does the fate of succeeding generations find its outcome.
On a lighter "emigrational" note (of sorts), there was a huge
exodus from other European lands to places like the USA (the promised land?) and the latter benefitted accordingly. Look at how
a certain I. Baline became the "Anglicised" Irving Berlin - and
one of the world's immortal songwriters. And wasn't a certain
JFK of Irish origin? The world can move in mysterious ways!

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Wed 9th Sep 2020 14:14

That waives the rules has got to be a newspaper headline...if it isn't it should be. Greg...you might have copyright!

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 9th Sep 2020 13:53

This is certainly stimulating stuff. That's a good line GF, and raised
a smile here in London W1. I'm not au fait with the documentation
that Theresa May thought appropriate to sign in her version of
leaving the EU but wonder if that is now considered some sort of
appeasement item...apropos Chamberlain waving (!) his piece of
paper in other days . On the original discussion of Rule Britannia
and Land of Hope and Glory - I found myself watching a TV item
featuring Vanessa Feltz worrying over the empirical meaning of the
the latter's words "Wider still and wider may thy bounds be set..." etc.
This seemed to ignore the very real relevance of the words to the
beneficial aspects of law, medicine, social stability, inventions and military organisation that have served various countries well in the aftermath that is now the Commonwealth. In short, the "bounds"
can also be interpreted in this work as sought-after positive influences - and sung accordingly!

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Wed 9th Sep 2020 11:00

Rock music...a band with drumming....sounds funky ...hokey dokey...enjoyed it....better with music I guess ?

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Wed 9th Sep 2020 10:56

Thank you Keith!!?

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Wed 9th Sep 2020 10:55

Thanks Po!!?

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<Deleted User> (24283)

Wed 9th Sep 2020 10:55

Yes Nicola...I agree!!

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Wed 9th Sep 2020 10:54

Good one Po....as always....a witty note...ain't surprised at all.?

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 10:09

I agree, very difficult to learn the dance steps to this one. They seem to keep changing ... Nice work, Julie. Very skilful take on the latest bewildering development.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 10:06

Lovely list poem, Julie! Back to Tesco or Asda next week?

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:58

Trevor, sorry for splattering so many comments across your poems this morning. Well, actually, I'm not sorry. It was great to read them all, and I kept looking for the next one! Please keep writing with such skill and empathy. Your heart's in so many of the right places.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:55

There was a programme on Black Country dialect poetry on BBC Radio 4 last Sunday https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=106743

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:52

A poem written with great empathy.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:49

I remember when it was played on Juke Box Jury, and David Jacobs carefully enunciating the title. But I can't remember or find out whether they voted it a Hit, or a Miss. Anyway, it got to number 9.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:46

Very well said, Trevor.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:44

Aren't grandchildren wonderful? And inspirational! Even if you can only see them from a distance during lockdown.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:42

A kind of poetic 'American Pie', if I may so. So many lines to savour, including 'You can stand on a hill that looks out to the Urals, / Toward Tolstoy and Pasternak.' The last stanza, after the roll-call of literary giants that has gone before, could feel like bathos. But I don't think you intended it that way. Great work.

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julie callaghan

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:41

Thanks for the kind comment, enjoy your breakfast.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:35

I love this stanza: 'Whatever happened to the Angry Brigade? / Red Mole, and Black Dwarf? / The anthemic sham of Street Fighting Man/ has well and truly run its course." Good questions. The Stones have now opened a merchandise shop in London with their silly lips and tongue logo well to the fore. The song itself had a self-deprecating truth to it. 'The anthemic sham of Street Fighting Man.' That's a great line! And perfect iambic pentameter!

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salfordman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:35

what do you do with your songs when you have written them
Salfordman.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:27

I am going through your oeuvre, Trevor, enjoying every one, and embarrassed that I hadn't discovered you before now. A shining light on Write Out Loud! You're so right about old poems that don't seem to quite work. Keep them! Years later you may find that missing last line that transforms the poem into something special.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:24

This is a wonderful poem, crafted, understated. There's so much here, if you care to look. 'Press-ganged onto a ship of fools as Old Blighty sets sail for uncertain future ... the sun sinks slowly in the west." Well, yes.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:16

Excellent. Well crafted poem, Trevor. So interesting to read this a year on, with the climate changed so much for schools.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:11

Lovely poem, Trevor. Says it all. The best and worst of England. Very sorry I missed this first time around.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:08

Pele? You must have been good. Excellent poem, Trevor, which I hadn't spotted at the time. Worth reminding us, amid all the glory of '66, how Pele was kicked out of it early on. Ironically, it was Portugal who did that to him. Eusebio subsequently won plaudits as 'the new Pele'. So good that functional old England disposed of them in the semi-final. I can be as patriotic as the next man when it comes to football! Going back to your poem, I like the way it portrays grassroots football, down at the rec, in fact. We played there every night for two months in the summer of 66.

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ZTK Space

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:06


Thank you Paul.

Music too, being robbed. After several years of posting on youtube, and still the counter does not go up when a lot of works are more than passable compared to trax singing about pizza on Radio One are given airing, you get a real feel of the level, and depth of disgrace, and disgust, and fakery in our so called United Kingdom.

They have no right to do what they have done unto I and my family and Paul, it is still ongoing. It would be fair to say that if you know of a delegate from UN or Brussels, I have a case for human rights abuse to my family and I, and a look in, would definitely reveal my case and yes, I have documents that back up what I am saying.

Have a choon Paul, one to relax to. I have 82 entries on youtube. It would be interesting to know how many you see.

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCHO1WwQ9RLnzFXSOC_9P8DQ/videos?view_as=subscriber

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6TKpL6P3mX8

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ZTK Space

Wed 9th Sep 2020 09:01


I have a ton of works, i could pass to someone of integrity to keep in their vaults, who 'do' understand the plight of those who are appalled, and against this primitive class system.

If you are interested, i could pass them to you, in person.

I began writing poetry ways back, when Paul B was around. I thank WOL for encouraging me, but would want you to know that yes, I and my family are being shit on. Let me know, when and where WOL events are being held, there may just be a tired and broken visitor with a box for you.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 9th Sep 2020 08:21

Britannia waives the rules, 'in a very specific and limited way'. Makes you even prouder. Not.

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