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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th May 2010 17:52

This was written some time ago, but still seems very relevant today.

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Sat 15th May 2010 17:38

thank you for the welcome Dave

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Sat 15th May 2010 17:25

Hehe - we have 2 cats that work that trick - then abandon us once fed of course.... Welcome to the site Rosemary

Best wishes

Dave

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th May 2010 17:00

The workshop must be working. This is piquant and funny.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 15th May 2010 16:57

If you had to choose three words to describe my own work, what would they be? Don't be dodgey; I'm a big girl now.

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Sat 15th May 2010 15:52

This poem reminds me of kids making rhymes up, as they play in the playground. Jo

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Nash

Sat 15th May 2010 15:44

And you too Stefan, thank you

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Nash

Sat 15th May 2010 15:43

You're quite right, Ann! Thank you

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 15th May 2010 15:33

I like it Nash, except the last line. I'd leave that out, but it's your poem ;-)

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winston plowes

Sat 15th May 2010 14:36

Like this Cate. Great string of words through it. Win x

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 15th May 2010 14:25

Hi Cate,

And thanks for your welcome greeting!

Cargoes eh? And not a quinquireme, (one of my favourite words - I well remember having it explained to me as wide-eyed kid) moidore or cheap-tin-tray in sight.

Perhaps it isn't cargo, but "baggage." Baggage frequently contains dirty laundry; some of us have washing machines, others choose to flaunt their skidmarks in the public launderette - pretending they are doing someone else's washing. Me? I think I'll go commando from now on!

Regards,A.E.

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shoeless

Sat 15th May 2010 12:05

hi si !!! *gasp* so nice to meet you on thursday at wigan. Best wishes for the future

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Isobel

Sat 15th May 2010 12:03

Love this one Cate. Yes - there are rather a lot of shrivel sacd/sacked saddos out there, venting their bile...
I wouldn't have known this was a pastiche, had you not explained it to me. I wonder if anyone else will know the poet and poem?

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Sat 15th May 2010 11:20

ah! thats only your opinion-(perhaps-in-and not-for-grief? I humbly ask.

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winston plowes

Sat 15th May 2010 10:05

Hi Nash, Thanks for looking at my stuff and commenting on ' On mondays I fall in love' Leeds can actually be a romantic place (If you are lucky enough) Win

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Nash

Sat 15th May 2010 10:05

I'm not sure I like this

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winston plowes

Sat 15th May 2010 10:00

Welcome back Nicky... Loved the ending especially, Hovering there... Win

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winston plowes

Sat 15th May 2010 09:56

Hi Nicky.. Thanks for looking at ';-P'. Brilliant view of it I thought, There are lots of lines in there that suggest your interpretation, more so at the end. Thx Win x

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Sat 15th May 2010 09:55

Good morning oh bewhiskered one! ta for opening my day with laughter-off to find needle and cotton-before me sides burst!-but sorry, was,nt funny enough to deserve a kiss! haha! hope you enjoy your day-Stefan......no!

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winston plowes

Sat 15th May 2010 09:53

Hi Anthony, Thanks for your comments on ';-p' as to wallowing in a wonderful disease... You may be falling into the trap of assuming the poet (me) is writting from his own true experiences. In this particular case is it too mischevious of me not to say if this is the case or not. Win :-)

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Sat 15th May 2010 09:51

Consider me a lazy old git when I say my comments on this outstanding work are repeated word for word in the comment given in-'Our Child' 'me flippin 'ed is reelin'(haha) with inspiration from you!-and boy,do I love its effect! Stefan.

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Sat 15th May 2010 09:45

Good morning Mike.I summon up every scrap of praise I can muster and give it to you Mike for this truly AMAZING! poem,that will embed itself forever on my whole being.If I could buy all the REAL gold in this life and beyond and present it to you,so would I do.Even that would not be enough to show you how wonderfully affected I am by this stunningly composed and read piece.No matter what obstacles get in your way,never,never allow them to hinder your giftedness.I am totally blown away! again and again and again.Some may think this is an over the top comment-so be it-you took me there-WOW!-Stefan.

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Nash

Sat 15th May 2010 09:43

Thanks, Francine!

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Dave Carr

Sat 15th May 2010 01:34

I like this: will have to try it.
I always remember
Evil rats on no star live

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Pete Crompton

Sat 15th May 2010 00:36

Gus!
youre back!
greetings
missed you at Wigan was hoping to catch up.

"I wanna be a part of it, NewYork NewYork|!!"

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Fri 14th May 2010 23:12

One of your best works I think, showing us your great humanity. Best wishes, Dave

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Fri 14th May 2010 23:10

Hello my friend, nice to see you here too :) Best wishes, Dave

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winston plowes

Fri 14th May 2010 22:47

Hi Ann. difficult to do justice to the funiest man that has ever lived IMHO he was a genius and much loved... As a big fan you have not offended :-) well done with the Youtube vid. Win

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winston plowes

Fri 14th May 2010 22:36

Currently, Dave has fly-away hair :-)

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kath hewitt

Fri 14th May 2010 22:10

Hi Cynthia,

RE Avon calling; It isn't myself i am denigrating, more the old image ( Edward Scissorhands ). I was mulling over it the other day while delivering brochures.
Ann was right with the toilet, an attempt at word play.

Re Downpour ; I really wanted to keep this short and simple but i really struggled with it for some reason. In the end i gave up and just wrote it as it came.

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Hope you are well x

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Francine

Fri 14th May 2010 22:10

This is fabulous!
Oh là là...
'I imagined kissing you in French.'

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winston plowes

Fri 14th May 2010 22:06

Could really connect with this... Isn't poetry an amazing / powerful thing, it can bring the strongest, most unexpected feelings / memories to the surface. This did that for me Pete, Thx. Win x

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kath hewitt

Fri 14th May 2010 21:53

Hi Ann,
Thanks for commenting, glad you like Avon calling. You were right about the loo by the way xx

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kath hewitt

Fri 14th May 2010 21:50

Hi thanks for your comment on Avon calling. Much appreciated ;-)

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winston plowes

Fri 14th May 2010 21:49

Hi There... My word! Loss on paper is brilliant. Not read that before, Nothing is wasted, no weak lines, a concise grimness of loosing. Many have been there but to capture it in balance on the page... brilliant. win x

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Francine

Fri 14th May 2010 21:31

I love this Thomas.
I see the 'wish to die' as the regret and guilt. Those emotions are so destructive if you let them take hold of you... Accept that you will make mistakes. Things happen for a reason...
Live, learn, and move on : )

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Lynn Dye

Fri 14th May 2010 21:26

I enjoyed reading your poems on here, Ann,especially Why Can't I Find a Man who can Dance. (I never found one either!!) Love the Dray too!

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Rachel Bond

Fri 14th May 2010 21:05

oo great kealan ill have a go now...

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Fri 14th May 2010 20:47

Many thanks for your very kind comments , I have had a peek at your work and I like it as well
Spencer x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 14th May 2010 20:20

Kath, this is a great particular image of a universal thought. I think the poem would be really good if you coolly culled nearly one-third of the words and netted the idea more succinctly. My opinion entirely. I've heard this so often about my own work, and I think I have profitted.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 14th May 2010 20:11

Jeez, I never thought of that! Too close to the subject and nursing sentiment. Deadly combination.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 14th May 2010 20:07

Maybe it's a joke Cynthia - and it does smell of a toilet????

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 14th May 2010 20:01

Memories! My mum was an Avon lady. This is really good, a witty soliloquy, and consistently accurate in mood delivery, and tone. I'm not sure why you are denigrating yourself as 'all lipstick and no sense'; could understand the barb levelled at a second or third party Avon pedlar. But it's a powerful self-statement. I still think of Avon with admiration to be honest, and loved their products while becoming a young woman. Very clever poem, refreshing. Picky point: even Americanised, wouldn't it be 'Eau de toilette'?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 14th May 2010 19:43

Thomas, this is very emotional, brutally self-honest.I do not presume it is the writer personally. Such deceit as this seems to be is a killer if it bothers the deceit-er (so to speak); and nothing to bother about if it doesn't. 'I used to sigh away the smile inside' is really good. Perhaps the 'roadkill' stanza is just overkill. I can't think what it adds to your whole idea except unnecessary hyperbole. Other than the pangs of conscience about feeling free, I don't 'follow' what has occasioned the 'wish to die', the tragic tone. So, for me, I lose a sense of balance.

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Nash

Fri 14th May 2010 19:39

That's great, Ann! I'm very pleased...one day soon I may get back up behind a mic, who knows! x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 14th May 2010 19:32

Blimey! Can't wait to try one.

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Isobel

Fri 14th May 2010 19:19

I like toilet humour Jon, so I found this amusing.It feels like 2 separate poems stuck together though - was it meant to be?

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 14th May 2010 19:15

Hi Nash - I'm enjoying your bloggs. Ta! xx

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Isobel

Fri 14th May 2010 19:14

A very odd poem but I like your humour!

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Nash

Fri 14th May 2010 18:44

Thanks Ann - unfortunately, I think my adolescent lust never abated.

And thanks Banksy - sorry it brought back those memories! If it's any consolation, I had similar experiences, the classic - I never told you but...- Why not? was my drooling and staring not clue enough?!

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