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Thu 27th May 2010 13:25

what can we say - I'm sure you can hear the applause. B

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Cate Greenlees

Thu 27th May 2010 12:38

Beautiful. Just beautiful. Such a wonderful richness of language and imagery, and this poem will touch so many people on so many different levels. Anthony you have surpassed yourself!!
Cate xx

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shoeless

Thu 27th May 2010 12:17

Oh just some things I brought for you
I thought you might have missed – comforts, more for me than you
perhaps,

The whole poem is very accurate but, yes taking gifts to a grave side is a most devastating moment in life

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Thu 27th May 2010 10:47

I'm soft. My eyes welled up too. In a good way.

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Ray Miller

Thu 27th May 2010 10:32

Ta very much, Tommy, Dave and Andy.

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Ray Miller

Thu 27th May 2010 10:30

Beautiful, I love such poems as these, and though it seems churlish to crib it, I shall anyway. The excellence of the poem lies between "a firmament of winter stars" and "an agnostic's faltering prayer". I think if you ended there and abbreviated the intro somewhat you'd have a great poem.

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Ray Miller

Thu 27th May 2010 10:16

I used "unthought" in the last poem I posted, without being certain it's a proper word. So I'll assume it is now.I love your inventive way with language, without always grasping what you're on about, though that's not the be-all. Funnily enough, I thought the best line was the simple "It makes me want to stamp my feet".

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kath hewitt

Thu 27th May 2010 10:12

Hi Andy, thanks for your feedback. I do agree with you about not needing hard and defensive together but when i read it back again i cant seem to not say it now. x

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 27th May 2010 09:43

Hi, dear Ann! Thank you very much for congratulating me with my birthday. Your birthday is on the 26th of May, isn't it? We are really spiritually very close to each other. My congratulations to you. We say here: better late than never. With warmest wishes, Larisa

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darren thomas

Thu 27th May 2010 08:20

Yes, this is superb. Its language, its pace but overall its theme which resonates with me as I lost a childhood 'best friend' when we were both just 15.

Great writing Anthony.


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Andy N

Thu 27th May 2010 08:12

Hi;

I referred my painter friend Olga over to your comment on your paintings... Have you being given any links off her stuff to look at online (there is a few bits and pieces) x

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Andy N

Thu 27th May 2010 08:11

enjoyed this, marianne.. top banana in particular 'a suspended child willing the will of work away' but the language is generally pretty crisp and shows a lot of thought...

i enjoyed this! x

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Andy N

Thu 27th May 2010 08:10

excellent dave.. i would totally fail to keep a straight face if i was trying to perform this however.. lol

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Andy N

Thu 27th May 2010 08:08

couple of layers there, kath which could be take several ways but i like the way you change it from the third person to the first person in the last stanza works pretty well..

not sure if you need both defensive and hard on the last stanza as i think it adds a extra beat which doesn't exist in the first two stanzas..

either way, top banana - i think you are defo getting better x

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Andy N

Thu 27th May 2010 08:05

excellent stuff - lot of good lines but my favourite is 'the ill-defined tremor of repeat prescriptions'

andy n

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Chris Dawson

Thu 27th May 2010 07:45

Me too ... absolutely wonderful. Love it!
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Ann Foxglove

Thu 27th May 2010 07:15

Are we WOLOPing this month? And thank you so much for lovely comment on "Poetess" too. x

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 27th May 2010 06:46

Blimey Tommy - you windin' me up? ;-) I promise if I ever write the sequal ("Let My Second Cousin Twice Removed Be A Gnu") that the giraffe will have a special verse just for you! But don't hold your breath! x

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 27th May 2010 06:43

What a wonderful poem Anthony. Made me cry. Those last four lines particularly. x

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Francine

Thu 27th May 2010 02:52

You pose some interesting questions Dave, related to puzzles and life...
I personally get frustrated when my puzzles have missing pieces ; )

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Francine

Thu 27th May 2010 02:45

We can all relate to your words in some respect Rosemary, because nobody wants to be ignored or feel the indifference of another they have loved.

Powerful lines:

'It kills me slowly, stabbing the goddess within
It razors my heart in two
And leaves me longing for word of you.'

'a void unfilled now grows within
A black hole in my soul'

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 27th May 2010 02:07

I really like this poem. The image of the cat caught my attention straight away. Then, the "I too was hunting" section brings in regret and memory in a very moving way. A thoughtful piece.

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Thu 27th May 2010 00:56

"Her breasts are a rhyming couplet"

Probably the best line of poetry I have came across in my time on this site.

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 27th May 2010 00:42

But I like giraffes, why are there no giraffes?

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shoeless

Thu 27th May 2010 00:41

thing is ladies , you both know darn well that isnt who i am , it might be who i aspire to be :) but its not how it is
yes chris , you are right tent :)

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Chris Dawson

Wed 26th May 2010 23:42

Lol - I think I've met him.
Croutonic? A little square and crusty? Floats in soup?
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Chris Dawson

Wed 26th May 2010 23:39

You've changed your tent - you need more diamonds for a tent than a tit ... well perhaps not in my case ... I don't own a tent. :)
Love it.
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Chris Dawson

Wed 26th May 2010 23:36

Really like this - fourth verse particularly! though maybe take out the quotation marks and she says?
Well done.
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Chris Dawson

Wed 26th May 2010 23:33

I really like this, agree with Graham, very charming. I can also identify (if you swop the shes & hers to hes and his), which I guess most of us can at some time or other.
Well done.
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Chris Dawson

Wed 26th May 2010 23:29

Hi Isobel,
Thanks for your comments on 'Play Me', glad you liked it.
I've never tried a didgeridoo ... I don't think I'd be able to blow one, I prefer something much smaller and with a little more sophistication to it - like my clarinet. I agree though that finishing on a diminuendo is lovely.
:)
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Chris Dawson

Wed 26th May 2010 23:20

Hi Ann,
Thanks for your very generous comments on 'Play Me' - you're up the right tree, so to speak, though - no, sadly, no lover present.
You should definitely post yours! - I love Sheherezade! :)
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Chris Dawson

Wed 26th May 2010 23:12

Hi Andy - thanks for your comments on 'Play Me' - glad you liked it. Perform it live! ... I think I'd be way too embarrassed! I have only managed to perform one of my own live so far, and that was with Paul & Winston's support - utterly nerve-wracking!
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Chris Dawson

Wed 26th May 2010 23:09

Hi Larisa, Thank-you very much for your kind comments on 'Play Me'.
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Wed 26th May 2010 22:45

every time I make love it's a haiku these days....

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Isobel

Wed 26th May 2010 22:43

Sounds like you've got your priorities right LOL - if he has a brother, do introduce me!

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Isobel

Wed 26th May 2010 22:39

And does he wear his hair long and let it all blow in the wind?

A quirky little poem Dave - I like the ending - there's more to all of us once you look inside.

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Isobel

Wed 26th May 2010 22:36

I love this Ann - all of it. You pretty much sum us female poets up - we love with body and soul - and words are just so important.

The ending is perfect!

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th May 2010 22:12

This may be better without the third and forth verses. But as I hate making decisions I left them in! Maybe because they make her seem like a real person I wanted to keep them in there. xx

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th May 2010 22:08

Ah yes! All that you say is true! And I love the first verse. A poem on it's own. x

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th May 2010 22:06

Thanks for commenting on Family. xx

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Dave Bradley

Wed 26th May 2010 21:58

Can but agree with the others. Outstanding

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Wed 26th May 2010 20:14

Hi there - thanks for the very kind comments on the last two - it's much appreciated. all the best. B

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 26th May 2010 20:07

Loved this Dave. I've always thought it better not to show people the picture on the box.

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 26th May 2010 19:57

Oh! Like the new pic too!

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 26th May 2010 19:56

There is a prayer-like quality to this Ann. I liked it but was also unnerved by its rhythm, strangely.

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 26th May 2010 19:50

This has really pleasing little hooks that amplify what is a quiet little piece. I found it tender and charming.

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Helen Thomas

Wed 26th May 2010 17:59

Thankyou Rev and Ms Foxglove - I've not been on the site for agesam I putting this comment in the right box? But thanks for your lovely comments wherever you are!

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th May 2010 16:01

I guess I was dreaming of a time when the lion would lie down with the lamb etc, and was given the idea by the little picture (top of this page) even tho' it seems more domestic animals are involved here. So I won't be applying for that job at London Zoo then!

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 26th May 2010 14:49

...but why is an elephant wise? and a zebra playful? don't zebra's run to escape lions? who try to eat them? omg your mother eating your sister!...I shiver to think of you in charge-Johnny Morrisy like- of a zoo.

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 26th May 2010 14:41

This is very good.

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