Donations are essential to keep Write Out Loud going    

Profile image

alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Sun 27th Jun 2010 16:00

Graham's coomments were great, very constructive. I sometimes get a blind spot for repeats so happy to take those on board. more than happy in fact - grateful!

Made a small tweak as a result, so anyone reading now, don't think Graham's gone nuts - he was absolutely right!

Comment is about How? (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Sun 27th Jun 2010 13:16

I made a compromise - I DID change the word (good idea!)but totally ignored your advice on what to change it to! Te he! ;-)

Comment is about pussycatdreaming (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

Cathy Bryant

Sun 27th Jun 2010 12:41

Thank you very much for your kind comments! This is a fantastic site, isn't it?

Comment is about Cathy Bryant (poet profile)

Original item by Cathy Bryant

Profile image

Isobel

Sun 27th Jun 2010 12:28

Awww - your story has a happy ending - you managed to save yours! Beginnings, endings and inbetweenings - we are all somewhere along that line, dreaming our dreams...x

Comment is about pussycatdreaming (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

Isobel

Sun 27th Jun 2010 12:22

A nice reflective one Pete. The sea has that affect, doesn't it? Though you'd have to walk a long way to get to it in Southport - and you are normally lying in something other than sand when you get there!

I like the gentle timelessness of it all - it reminds me a bit of another poem you wrote using the sea. I also like the idea of 'throwing our troubles into orbit' - if only we could...xx

Comment is about the speed of life (blog)

Profile image

Noetic-fret!

Sun 27th Jun 2010 11:46

Pete my man! This, although one of your shorter poems is absolutely fantastic. So much emotion and so much declared. There is pain here i can identify with on many levels. Just wish i had the chance to bask in the sun awhile too. But yeah, i can really identify with the easing of your mind and soul on a beach basking in the sun. Nice one Pete.

stay well

Much love and respec to you.

Mike

Comment is about the speed of life (blog)

<Deleted User> (7790)

Sun 27th Jun 2010 11:16

Oh, what a beautiful little bird! Hooray for sparrows everywhere! xxx

Comment is about pussycatdreaming (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

kath hewitt

Sun 27th Jun 2010 09:30

Hi Ann, hope you are well? Thanks for commenting xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Sun 27th Jun 2010 09:06

Just a sunday morning snapshot. Cats have senior moments too!

Comment is about pussycatdreaming (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Sun 27th Jun 2010 08:35

A horrible feeling very well described Kath! xx

Comment is about My affliction. (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Sun 27th Jun 2010 08:32

Great couple of poems Thomas. I could so identify with your feelings in the first poem - I was the female version! xx

Comment is about Cinema Child & When I Leave The Cinema (blog)

Original item by Tom

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Sun 27th Jun 2010 08:22

Hi Cathy - very striking stuff! Your poem "Proud" - I wrote one on a slightly similar theme "Having a Poem". About giving birth to the poem and then letting it go out into the world (probably, in my case, to disappear forever!) Anyway, welcome to WOL.

Comment is about Cathy Bryant (poet profile)

Original item by Cathy Bryant

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Sun 27th Jun 2010 07:23

Hi Lynn - thanks for kind comments on Slumber!

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 27th Jun 2010 00:03

Gooooooood evening Lynn! haha! yes one about customers like me(misery guts!)thanks Lynn-have a peaceful night-see thee on the morrow-goodnight-Stefan-xxx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Rachel Bond

Sat 26th Jun 2010 23:36

gorgeous poem, very clever...glad to see you lip cut inspired such good poetry :)

Comment is about In the Blood (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Profile image

Isobel

Sat 26th Jun 2010 21:51

Thanks for commenting on my latest Ann. If I don't always thank you, it's because I tend to make assumptions with people I feel I know. x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

Isobel

Sat 26th Jun 2010 19:45

The picture is good but I think it glamorises something that shouldn't be. Reality is never that pretty.

You never checked out our Pandora results - you naughty boy! You missed a lot of good fun and some lovely poetry. x

Comment is about She Loved Sundays (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

<Deleted User> (8394)

Sat 26th Jun 2010 19:05

I think they are really good, though I am but a novice, I used to feel like this when reading books, especially when I read Jane Eyre, I actually was her!

Comment is about Cinema Child & When I Leave The Cinema (blog)

Original item by Tom

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sat 26th Jun 2010 18:44

Hi again Lynn-me n thee must have similar thoughts when it comes to subject matter-your poem'Vacancy' reminded me of an old one of mine-called-Tosh(take two)...type that in top left search box-I think it would be right up your street-thanks-Stefan-xxxxx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sat 26th Jun 2010 18:29

Hi Lynn-in total agreement with previous comments-well observed indeed!do keep them coming please-Best regards as ever-Stefan-xxxx

Comment is about Vacancy (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

<Deleted User> (7073)

Sat 26th Jun 2010 18:22

I am late as per usual, what can I say, another great poem from my lovely talented little sister ;-)Love yer XX
PS Lose the Ostriches head it sucks....Bro XX

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sat 26th Jun 2010 18:21

Goooooood Grief Lynn! What have I to deserve all your lovely comments-thank you very kind Lady-been in my garage most of the day-spring/summer cleaning the car.But many many thanks to you for your time-I see you have another poem on-just going to have a butchers-catch you later-thank you very much again Lynn-enjoy the rest of your day-Stefan-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

<Deleted User> (7073)

Sat 26th Jun 2010 18:20

I like the gentle nature of this Alison, Especially the lines 'With an ethereal tendril,sent by thoughts so gentle' A wistful poem I believe.
TC X

Comment is about How? (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Profile image

Graham Sherwood

Sat 26th Jun 2010 16:09

I liked the enquiring nature of this Alison. The last verse could be re-worked. I didn't like the survives, demise,defies and disguise quad much or the repetition of survive. Super sentiments though.

Comment is about How? (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Profile image

Graham Sherwood

Sat 26th Jun 2010 15:59

A vacancy filled with a vacancy, classic stuff Lynn. Nice observations

Comment is about Vacancy (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Profile image

Graham Sherwood

Sat 26th Jun 2010 15:57

Good graphics on this one Kath.

Comment is about My affliction. (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Profile image

Graham Sherwood

Sat 26th Jun 2010 15:55

Nice piece Gus, good to read your work again. I like her eyes too.

Comment is about She Loved Sundays (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Profile image

Gus Jonsson

Sat 26th Jun 2010 15:15

Lovely to hear from you too ...ya little minx of passion.... it's the hot weather we are having here... it never fails to bring me out... in hives usually... but there ya go.

Hope u r well!

XXXX

Comment is about She Loved Sundays (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Profile image

Francine

Sat 26th Jun 2010 15:12

So happy to see you back Gus!
Mmmm... And I would have to agree... Still in proper form ; )

xxx

Comment is about She Loved Sundays (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

<Deleted User> (8159)

Sat 26th Jun 2010 15:11

Cynthia
i 've changed the name of the poem to stop the confusion. Thank you for taking time to read!

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Profile image

Jon

Sat 26th Jun 2010 09:26

Hi Duffy,
Loved "One Second".Does your head in to try and grasp what can happen in that timescale!You capture it well

Comment is about Duffy (poet profile)

Original item by Duffy

Profile image

Jon

Sat 26th Jun 2010 09:20

Hi Lynn,Really enjoyed this little observational piece.I esp. liked the line about her replacement being "A vacancy filled with a vacancy".I work in retail myself and know full well the horrors of apathetic staff and customers alike! Haha

Comment is about Vacancy (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Profile image

Lynn Dye

Fri 25th Jun 2010 23:11

This is so beautiful, Ann. I love it.

Comment is about slumber (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

Lynn Dye

Fri 25th Jun 2010 23:07

Yes, I've written poems about the recession and the election too, and appreciated the poems that Larisa mentions, of her own and of David Dunn's. Nevertheless, I like this, and think it would indeed make an excellent rant.

Comment is about Things We don't write about (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Fri 25th Jun 2010 21:40

ThanksIsobel - re Love to the Blood and Bone. x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Fri 25th Jun 2010 21:40

Thanks Dave - re Love to the Blood and Bone. x

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Fri 25th Jun 2010 21:39

Thanks Dave - re Love to the Blood and Bone. x

Comment is about Dave Carr (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Carr

Profile image

Ann Foxglove

Fri 25th Jun 2010 21:37

Thanks again Cynthia. x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

<Deleted User> (6895)

Fri 25th Jun 2010 21:17

Absolutely fantastic! loved it-ta Marianne

Comment is about The Famished Asylum (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

<Deleted User> (8159)

Fri 25th Jun 2010 19:26

Re: Fairytale

Thank you for your comment! In "half sleeve" i referred to Hans Christian Anderson's fairytale "The wild swans" where girl kept her silence and was knitting robes from nettle to save her brothers from a curse that turned them into swans.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Profile image

Isobel

Fri 25th Jun 2010 18:01

It's Klimt, Cynthia. I have his Water Serpents over my fireplace - but I've hung it sideways - it's in browns, beiges and golds so goes perfectly with modern decor. I think his Mother and Child picture is lovely too - though some of his work is getting so popular that it's losing its edge for me.

I think the picture fits the poem well. Love that defies everything - its passion all the more heightened by the inevitablility of death. I like the urgency in it.

Comment is about love to the blood and bone (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 25th Jun 2010 17:09

This is brilliant, Isobel. I am so glad I know you personally now. You see so deeply, and think so embracingly, and never underestimate the wisdom of children. Your son's comment was simply invoking God as he understood it. It makes a superb title. And this is SERIOUS poetry. Lift up your eyes and clap your hands! You have major talent!

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Profile image

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 25th Jun 2010 16:47

I had this picture in my bedroom for years! Loved it! Loved it!! Somehow I lost it. Whose art is it anyway? I can't remember, only that I think it was called just 'The Kiss'.

Comment is about love to the blood and bone (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 25th Jun 2010 16:44

The second stanza is lovely. I like the way you 'enter' into scenarios, and develop characters with personal 'stories'. Very imaginative.

BTW, the new photo of yourself is gorgeous.

Comment is about slumber (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Profile image

Isobel

Fri 25th Jun 2010 15:52

Genital herpes - why don't you have a go at that...

Comment is about Things We don't write about (blog)

Original item by Andy N

<Deleted User> (7164)

Fri 25th Jun 2010 14:42

I think you have shown great compassion in this Isobel.

Janet.x

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

<Deleted User> (7164)

Fri 25th Jun 2010 14:35

Hi Andy, i think you could produce a decent rant style poem from this first draft, taking the other comments on board. ;-)

Comment is about Things We don't write about (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Profile image

Isobel

Fri 25th Jun 2010 12:25

Hello Lynn - I don't think our paths have crossed before. Thank you for your comment on my latest - it is probably one that mothers can easily identify with.
I have enjoyed reading through your profile. I see, like me, you favour rhyme. I find it hard breaking the habit of a lifetime so my bird one was a bit of a step away from the norm. Glad you enjoyed it. x

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Profile image

Greg Freeman

Fri 25th Jun 2010 12:18

This is so touching, as well as being rhythmic and well-structured. Well done

Comment is about How? (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

<Deleted User> (6895)

Fri 25th Jun 2010 10:29

just popped on to wish a lovely Lady good morning-catch you later-enjoy your day-Stefan-x

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

More Comments

◄ Prev123 … 293 … 586 … 879 … 1172 … 1465 … 1758 … 2051 … 2344 … 25862587258825892590 … 2637 … 292329242925Next ►

This site uses cookies. By continuing to browse, you are agreeing to our use of cookies.

Find out more Hide this message