Yes, just one word... lovely. Win x

Comment is about As Autumn Leaves (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

like looking through
a sheet of ice
from the other side.

great line that... grabbed me from the start. Win x

Comment is about The Other Side (Space Poem) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

These young mens bodies are formed around their machines. What a great glimpse of the strange human moulded in this way. Despite all the drugs and stories they are the ultimate athletes, nowhere to hide. You overlay a spicy relationship to this in your poem. Magnificent! Win x

Comment is about Nicolas (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Thanks for your comment John. There will be a very sad follow up to that one and my Original Oak poem. Rising tuition fees make it pretty certain my son will have to study in Oz. He will come out with too much debt otherwise. I imagine he will end up settling there thereafter - that's usually the way. Looks like I'll be doing a lot of travelling and saving up!

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

Original item by John Aikman

I spent the best part of an hour trying to get a 16 year old boy out of bed and off to school this morning...and it lead me back to this poem.

The last verse is utterly beautiful. I know he loves me...though you'd never know it at 8.00 a.m. : )

Thank you!

Jxxx

Comment is about Made of Love (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Then if you've experience of the one-visit-to-the-salad-bar you'll fully understand the concept of using the cucumber as greedy boards.

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Original item by Isobel

Ha - I'll confess to not liking salad that much. I am thinking back to a time in Ruislip - there was a beef eater type restaurant where you could have as much salad as you liked but you had to fit it into one bowl. I managed to pile it high - but it was stupid really - it was always the steak and chips I enjoyed the most!

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Glad you liked Chinese Buffet. I honestly don't think you're qualified on matters of gourmand greed if your experience only runs to salad items like tomatoes, though.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Glad you enjoyed Chinese Buffet. Certainly no offense intended by using the Chinese voice. As an aside I really enjoy the sense of humour and gentle self-deprecation the proprietor of the Wa Yu Wan Restaurant in Spalding has!

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Val
Glad you enjoyed Chinese Buffet - almost a true story.

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Lynn
Glad you enjoyed Chinese Buffet - almost a true story!

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Andy - I love the idea of looking at someone or at a relationship through a sheet of ice - it is a great image to express a cold divide.
'A mirage of Saturn's rings in all their beauty' also relects quite well the out of focus vision you might have through such a barrier. Neatly carried through to the two line ending. It would be great if we could all smash through the barriers wouldn't it?

An good read. x

Comment is about The Other Side (Space Poem) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Ann;

Many thanks for spotting the typo's on 'the other side'. I occasionally do miss them (advantage of my disabilities)and have corrected them..

I will have a think about the 6th stanza, but thank you for thinking it's a top poem! lol xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Ann;

Many thanks for spotting the typo's.. I occasionally do miss them (advantage of my disabilities)and have corrected them..

I will have a think about the 6th stanza, but thank you for thinking it's a top poem! lol xx

Comment is about The Other Side (Space Poem) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

no it was was-War and no bleedin PEACE! I remain yours with a blindfold on and earplugs in-in case you go to hordio-later Lovely-xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Joke explanation for she who has been too cosseted-or is that corseted? soldier tells comrade he would rather be in bed with a book and a big busty blonde than on the battlefield-his buddy astounded that he even thinks about taking a book to bed when he has more than enough to occupy mind-(and body)remarks that the book must be a very good read that it distracts him from carnal activities-the first soldier replys who said I could read...it was supposed to impress the naughty lady....gerrit? PHEW!xx rsvp? not till me musskels bulge!

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I like this Andy. I'm not sure if the 6th verse is a bit of overkill? Just for me maybe. But as you sometimes say - top poem! xx

Comment is about The Other Side (Space Poem) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

I nearly fell off the monkey bars in laughter at your amazing humour! indeed a stick of 'Blacky' rock-with the name Gemma all the way through-it shall remain unsucked!now my musskels need to bulge!

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

in your case sweet feline,the delete button shall only gathereth dust-f'rever! get yer ski,s ready! yours stiffly(all over)Stef on a stick-xx thou shall never gettereth on my wickly moor bahtat-enjoy your day dear friend.(monkey bars are calling-wonder if they sell jungle joose...tee hee)

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Lynn,expect a stick shaped parcel very soon-ta Mrs D-Stef-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks Freda for commenting on-'Shes back'best regards Stef.

Comment is about Freda Davis (poet profile)

Original item by Freda Davis

lovely freda... i think you change the beat in the poem just right on the last stanza.. top stuff x

Comment is about As Autumn Leaves (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

Although I did think 'blanket was a bit of a cliche.

Comment is about As Autumn Leaves (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

How right you are Ray. I will remove the extraneous syllable pronto.

Comment is about As Autumn Leaves (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

It is good, I can imagine the hoover and I like the idea of the woods as a safe haven. For rhythm's sake, should be "defoliating drains" surely.

Comment is about As Autumn Leaves (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

Lovely Freda-especially the last verse-thank you-Stef.

Comment is about As Autumn Leaves (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

I like this Mike. It is certainly true that innocence can stem from new generations not enslaved to the past...so long as they can escape the old teachings and bigotry.

Are the final lines and allusion to 2001 A Space Odyssey...not sure as it has been a while since I saw the film/thought of the Arthur C Clarke.

Certainly in that film one of the main themes is the evolution of man, from primitive to higher being. This is something that echos through this poem in its own way.

Comment is about Guess Where Daddy's From (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Thank you Ann for comments on "Space". I think it is you that are kind! Tootsies are sore so I'm off to beddybies with pain killers. xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I really enjoyed this John.

Love the manner of the nostaglia.

The love for something missed that you simultaneously knew was flawed and a royal pain the rear.

A real narrative.

Comment is about Tom Pudding (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I like this Dave, enjoyed your read of it in Wigan as well.

Comment is about The net (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

I'd never go anywhere near so far Haha...but I simply don't like the colour irrespective.

Funny...a smile raiser :)

Comment is about Pink (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

thars put a pooim on fer thee lass!

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

being a southerner means-you drink tea with your little finger lifted-you eat cucumber sandwhiches-you pronounce your h,s! you would,nt be seen dead in a flat cap-you dont take ferrets to bed-you say yah instead of yeah! you don,t fart in public-you feel as though you are slumming when you talk to rough Rossendalers-lol! you come on here wiv yer fancy ways n airs n gravies-lol!! you don,t laugh at sad northeners who try ter make yer laff-go on Lady Lynn-put down the bone china and grin! I,m even bowing as I write this comment to your Ladyship-bless her n may all southerners sail in her-one way! haha-cheers me owd mukker-scruffy likeable northern loon-xx-xx-the kisses were aimed at yer boots-yer majesty! lol!

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

My grandmother actually learned Russian in her 60's in order to be able to recite Pushkin to me as a child.

She said no westerner could ever understand the beauty of his phrasing and rhymes unless they understood Russian. My grandmother was a remarkable woman...I think she is the reason I try to write poetry to this day...and she's been dead these thirty years.

Thank you for the insight into writing in two languages. Fascinating.

Jx

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

aw ta Lynn-somebody likes me-even if they are a southerner!! ta chuk-Stef-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

oh Lynn!I was absolutely distraught about your comments ruining my masterpiece....HAHAHA!!..hey girly-you can say what the flip you want to me no probs-stop being a worrier! no-my mad half hour came to an end-was only for a larf-hows the plates of meat love? must be so painful-let it recover properly,don,t go jogging just yet-and leave the penny farthing in the garage-tee hee-catch you later chickamungus-yours trooly-Likeable Loon(that one got no votes-grr-haha)love-Stef-xx-B-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you for your observations on my poem.It was mercury the element...well spotted, de-capitalised now. It was a reference to 'fluids' always finding their own level through the topography...finding the quickest route down, the 'line of least resistance' until it pools...into a small 'moon' that mirrors the large moon in the sky. the idea of mercury was also reference to the colour and the effect that, as they warm up, most (all?) fluids run faster and faster. Mercury always seems to be a speedy little fluid...even though it is a metal.I still think, as Isobel said, it's missing one more line now, I think I've edited it too hard and lost a certain degree of oblique reference to what the guilt was all about. I was trying to capture what I think the French refer to as 'post coital tristesse'...or something.

Post coitum omne animal triste est —"After sexual intercourse every animal is sad".


Glad you liked it.

:)

Jx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

It was mercury the element...well spotted, de-capitalised now. It was a reference to 'fluids' always finding their own level through the topography...finding the quickest route down, the 'line of least resistance' until it pools...into a small 'moon' that mirrors the large moon in the sky. the idea of mercury was also reference to the colour and the effect that, as they warm up, most (all?) fluids run faster and faster. Mercury always seems to be a speedy little fluid...even though it is a metal.

I still think, as Isobel said, it's missing one more line now, I think I've edited it too hard and lost a certain degree of oblique reference to what the guilt was all about. I was trying to capture what I think the French refer to as 'post coital tristesse'.

Post coitum omne animal triste est —"After sexual intercourse every animal is sad".

...or something.

Glad you liked it.

:)

Jx

Comment is about Sometimes (extended rhyming mix) (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

I like the way you tie the two spaces together. Space is quite scary - inner and outer! xx

Comment is about Space (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you so much Lynn - Love Visits from Another Planet. You are very kind! Hope the tootsies are OK! xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I like the idea of this, Ann, wish I'd thought of something similar! I like your poem too, inspirational... :) xx

Comment is about love visits from another planet (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

When I read your poem, Carole, I naturally had to do some research to see what this Fibonacci sequence and poetry was... I find it fascinating and will try it when I have some time.

I love raspberries too - reminds me of summertime, picking them off the bushes in France as a little girl : )

Your poem is very sensual, and says so much in so few words.


p.s. I give you an A+

Comment is about Raspberry fib (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Spoken like a true Yorkshire man! Very funny John - at least you ate it...
It's hilarious when people pile their plates high with stuff they can't possibly eat. I can remember doing that when I was much younger - tomatoes bouncing off all over the floor. I've learnt to be more modest with age. Would love to see this performed. x

Comment is about Chinese Buffet - As Much As You Can Eat (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Very funny, hyperbole well done, telling a good story with nifty rhyme. I can't imagine any offense given in use of the Chinese background or the broken English. The situation could have been in any environment.

Comment is about Chinese Buffet - As Much As You Can Eat (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I have the benefit of only this version. It is really good. Are you referring to the planet or the mineral? Capitalisation implies the planet. What is the scientific background of 'lines of least resistance', since you use the reference so solidly?

Comment is about Sometimes (extended rhyming mix) (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

I know lots of 'real men' who wear pink trousers. The last verse actually made me feel antagonistic, not amused; it seems a slur rather than a jest; very Delphic.

Comment is about Pink (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thanks for your comments Laura . I love raspberries :) and my mate Ian set me the challenge of a fibonacci form which i was pleased to undertake :)

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks very much for your comments on Raspberry fib . It started out as a challenge from a freind , and turned out quite sweet I think :)

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

thanks for your comments on raspberry fib :) I don't know about when to stop or start really . My freind here Ian Hayles loves the constraints of form and half challenged me to write a fibonacci sequenced poem. This really appealed because I love the Fibonacci sequence ( nature never wastes a pattern ) and raspberries are just such a fruit.
others seem to repeat or take a set finish . I suppose in research I could've found out the sequence end for a rasberry and used that .. I have only looked at a couple of websites for guidence ,wiki being the simplest so far

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wow. This is pretty damned impressive. Massively sensual and erotic in content and a really complex form . Brilliant! Yes, I think I can almost taste that raspberry too. x

Comment is about Raspberry fib (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole