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Andy N

Sat 3rd Sep 2011 00:41

thanks cynthia for the comment here on the end of summer .. it's one to think bout which i hadn't thought about so all suggestions are welcome.. hope you are well - andy n x

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Andy N

Sat 3rd Sep 2011 00:40

thanks cynthia for the comment here.. it's one to think bout which i hadn't thought about so all suggestions are welcome x

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 2nd Sep 2011 22:25

Hello Cynth
Thanks for Twice Bless`d

Thinking on this:
Lots of the discoveries of science are marvellous (genes etc;) but we`ve all got so used to praising them in the terms the scientists use that they read dully. Alan Morrison in his poem `Aloneness` gives a description of `a hand` which approaches a wondering, poetic way of telling (and using)a scientific truth. Both poetry - and science - would benefit if we could do more of it.

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Fri 2nd Sep 2011 21:35


really enjoyable poem
I love the open-endededness

the best to you.

Stef

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Philipos

Fri 2nd Sep 2011 21:33

Hi Ann, so glad you enjoyed 'Reminiscence' and for letting me know.

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Fri 2nd Sep 2011 21:31

we get the gist of what you are saying and can relate to it.thank you.Patricia

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Fri 2nd Sep 2011 21:26

and thank heaven indeed for those greater things.nicely written.thank you.Patricia.

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Fri 2nd Sep 2011 21:22

hello again Lynn,this interesting poem goes to prove my point to you earlier,are,nt we women lovely and not warlike like some! my thanks.Patricia(oh and Stef I suppose)ha

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 2nd Sep 2011 15:00

You're confusing the issue Cynthia...unless otherwise stated-(as in +1 or -1)1+1 always equals 2, as I qualified in my remark re 'dialectics'. Re 'the egg'. You are confusing a simple statement of fact with the qualifier of morality- I said: 'If I take an egg and crush it in my hand- it is an event- indisputable- and only becomes a matter for 'dispute' when a sentient being 'intervenes''. Murder is also an event and is covered by my initial statement.

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Fri 2nd Sep 2011 14:29

Very good Hazel, I enjoyed reading this, good way of defining the word thought.....

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 2nd Sep 2011 13:21

Really enjoyed this poem Marianne. Lovely.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 2nd Sep 2011 13:19

I like this too, but not so sure about the last bit. For me it fades out a bit after the Cowley line. But that's just me.

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John Embley

Fri 2nd Sep 2011 10:39

Well said, Harry.
'Tis an old piece of advice, but never more appropriate -- Never try to refute religion with science, or refute science with religious argument.

Richard Dawkins would do well to acknowledge that logic and spirituality, like commonsense and love, have nothing whatsoever to do with each other, and it's just that difference which makes us human, not machines.

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Thu 1st Sep 2011 23:04

I take it you mean professor Know-all Harry!
I can tell this by your clever BOLD indicative.
A memorable poem.

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Scott Devon

Thu 1st Sep 2011 23:00

These are very good. You have an excellent eye for imagery and a good ear for sound. I see a lot going on here, and admire it in one so young.

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winston plowes

Thu 1st Sep 2011 22:27

Hi Cynthia, thanks for the continued comments. Because each word was treated separately (Cut and pasted if you like) I don't think this piece says anything about football. Maybe that Mr McCarra uses a colourful vocabulary to report it but no more. His match reports would not sit comfortably in a red top for these reasons and this is partly why I like them. Win x

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Thu 1st Sep 2011 22:17

Hi Bernard, Welcome to WOL. Winston

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 1st Sep 2011 21:37

Andy, I like this a lot - unusual, fab images. IMO, I would consider whether the first stanza is needed at all - only because it is so ordinary, in a poem of extraordinary ideas.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 1st Sep 2011 21:30

I enjoyed this, Harry, the delightful sentiments, and the brisk metric style of rhyme and rhythm.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 1st Sep 2011 21:15

Yes, we should correspond more. I have always thought so. BTW, since +1 and -1 = 0, IMO, quoting really simple arithmetic does not have secure bargaining power. And what if the egg had an embryo inside it? Is that still just an event, or murder? I love the grit of active discussion. You now seem more open to active 'give and take', without suspicion, or a kind of gentle snarling. Or am I being too personal?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 1st Sep 2011 20:54

Excellent poem, worth rereading many times for its beauty of images and atmosphere. I agree that the 'horses' scene is outstanding.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 1st Sep 2011 20:47

Brilliant perspective. And I love the endless possible scenarios that could be considered, using this piece as pure metaphor.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 1st Sep 2011 20:44

This is superb, every unusual and brilliant image evoking sheer emotion. 'the sun---marrying her with a strip of sunlight over her fingers' - just amazing. I echo Steve and Andy. I also appreciate that this poem is easy to follow, to relate with.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 1st Sep 2011 20:30

Masterful. I wish I got all the nuanced allusions, but I think I understand enough. With your work, it's the physical feel of the words, and the relentless mood, that absorbs the reader totally.

I really want to catch up with past posts, too. But not tonight.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 1st Sep 2011 20:12

Good start to the month, Kealan. 'terms and profits' is a thinker. Were you eating Rice Krispies with Coca Cola as you wrote this? A nasty word - 'disappear' - just do 'appear' first, and you're home free.

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Dave Carr

Thu 1st Sep 2011 17:05

Ann,
I'd be delighted and honoured for you to read my poem at your meeting.
Best wishes
Dave

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Philipos

Thu 1st Sep 2011 16:08

Thanks for commenting on 'Shades', John. Much appreciated. Goldenrods very common in my neck of the woods.

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 1st Sep 2011 15:44

I am a big fan of your work.

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 1st Sep 2011 15:43

I find your grasp of human connections incredibly humbling. Beautiful and poignant piece. The whole poem but in particular the last lines, are incredibly moving. Keep writing 'incredibly'...ha...

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Adam Lowe

Thu 1st Sep 2011 15:40

Thank you, Winston :)

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SPACEGHOST

Thu 1st Sep 2011 14:31

i've been enjoying listening to this
a former tenant of this fog

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SPACEGHOST

Thu 1st Sep 2011 14:23

NICE ONE i LIKE THE LAST 2 VERSES PURE CLASS

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:34

Hi Jeff;

thanks for the comment over 'My hometown'. Changes noted and made... Have been playing around on keyboard with this also.. Wouldn't mind having a go at recording this for our sessions at Dave's soon (even if it doesn't make the EP)..

see you later

Andy N

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:30

Hi Elaine;

Thanks for the comment over My Hometown.
Oddly enough the last line which seems to be going down so well was the line which was the one I was most worried about, but pleased you liked it.

See you soon (I am almost fighting fit now)

Cheers x

Andy N xx

P.S. - The piece is about my love affair with my hometown (Stretford).

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:28

Hi Antony;

Thanks for the comment over My Hometown. Must admit it's probably my favourite poem out of my recent few, and it's one that has surprised me so many people have liked as I thought it would be too personal, but clearly not - lol.

Hope you are good

Speak Soon

Andy N

P.S. - The piece is about my love affair with my hometown (Stretford).

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:25

Hi Isobel;

Thanks for the comment over 'My hometown'.. Oddly enough the last line was the line I was most worried about, but that's the one everybody is loving so clearly I was my own worse judge there - lol.

Hope you are good

See you soon x

Andy N x


P.S. - The piece is about my love affair with my hometown (Stretford).

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:24

Hi Laura;

thanks for the comment over 'My Hometown'... It's a very personal piece about my hometown (Stretford)- dead pleased you like it.. See you soon (Almost back on my feet totally now) x

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:23

Hi Win;

Thanks for your comment over 'My hometown' and I like your suggestion (will amend into it).

Hope to see you soon

Andy N

P.S. - The piece is about my love affair with my hometown (Stretford).

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:22

Hi Charlotte - thanks for your comment over 'My Hometown'.. The piece is a little rough still and there will be changes, so thanks for your note x

P.S. - The piece is about my love affair with my hometown (Stretford).

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:20

Thanks to all for their comments here.. The piece certainly is a bit of a rough diamond and will certainly get amended.

For those interested it is a piece about where I live in Stretford... x

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:18

Hi Philipos; - Cheers for the note. Yep, Autumn shall soon be here defo although oddly enough it's lovely outside my works today where I am typing.. Surely it can't last however - lol - thanks again... A

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:16

nice stuff, Lisa... i threw me a little with the lack of full stops at the end on first readings, but the use of language here is lovely... x

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:15

lovely stuff, Ann... spot on with the length too as it caries beauitfully x

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:14

enjoyed the repeating of sleep throughout the piece..gives it almsot a chorus which i then like you turned inside out on the last stanza. very clever x

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:13

good pace in this again, Kealan. I wish I could write them as powerful and as quick as you are at the moment...

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Laura Taylor

Thu 1st Sep 2011 12:30

Cheers Rach and Francine :)

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Thu 1st Sep 2011 11:50


thanks for the laughs Lynn
off up a ladder now!

catch yer later Mater.

Trish'n'Stef.

xxxxxxxxxxxx

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Lizzie

Thu 1st Sep 2011 11:03

Thanks :) I will make it a good one xx

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 1st Sep 2011 10:43

Hi Dave - can I read this to my reading group this Saturday, obviously saying you wrote it? We were supposed to write something about riots for "homework" but I wrote about something totally different (they won't mind) but I do think this is a wonderful & v clever poem and I know they would enjoy it if I can read this as well.xx

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Greg Freeman

Thu 1st Sep 2011 10:40

Poignant, painful, loving, perfect

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