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Hazel

Sat 1st Oct 2011 20:13

Thank you Lynn for your comment on Sexy at Sixty. I have to say I do try. Hazelx

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Philipos

Sat 1st Oct 2011 20:09

Cosmic consciousness an awesome idea - like the way you handle these concepts and that of colour - are we lucky or what who have the faculties to see these things when some folk I know are colour blind for example and cannot think outside their own space.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 1st Oct 2011 19:08

Thanks Lynn ( beguiled by seals)- I know "nature" poems aren't everyone's cup of tea! When I was staying in St Ives last week I went for a walk on the beach just as it was getting dark and there were these two seals really close in to shore. Magic!xx

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 1st Oct 2011 19:07

Thanks Lynn - I know "nature" poems aren't everyone's cup of tea! When I was staying in St Ives last week I went for a walk on the beach just as it was getting dark and there were these two seals really close in to shore. Magic!

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Lynn Dye

Sat 1st Oct 2011 18:02

What a lovely poem, Ann, I love seals (well, all wildlife really) and this is so charming. x

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Lynn Dye

Sat 1st Oct 2011 17:51

I really enjoyed this poem, Harry. As Stella says, very heartwarming.

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Lynn Dye

Sat 1st Oct 2011 17:42

Yep, raised a big smile here too, Hazel. Having not long passed this stage, I would say why not be sexy at sixty if you want to be? Ignore the bits that droop, that's what I try for! Lol.
Really enjoyed this, Hazel.

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 1st Oct 2011 16:22

:o)

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Linda Cosgriff

Sat 1st Oct 2011 10:25

Thanks everyone! I just wanted to share my good news :)

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Noetic-fret!

Sat 1st Oct 2011 06:34

I cannot help but admire this poem (even though I have real physical problems with my own feet lol). It is a sad tale, and in some parts i find it a little cryptic, but as Stella says, it is a positively enchanting poem. But i didn't know whether I should be laughing at the comedy or feeling sad. Nice work though ray.

rgds

Mike.

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Hazel

Sat 1st Oct 2011 00:15

I enjoyed this very much Stella.
Hazel

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 23:05

congrats!

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 23:04


I was enchanted by this Ray..read several times..great work :)

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 23:02


Raised a big smile from me Hazel..seems though the older I get the more things droop, fall off or just don't want to work anymore :/

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 22:55


What a heartwarming write Harry..such a smiler for me :)

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 22:38


oo..like this :)

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Ray Miller

Fri 30th Sep 2011 22:31

Nice poem. I'd prefer "ripening time". I found the last 3 lines less than smooth, maybe you could lose "ever" from the last line.

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 22:27



Reads very well Chris..super work methinks :)

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 22:24


And I bet now it feels really real?..

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 22:16


your best one up to now Harry.

beautiful format
of beautiful words.

regards.

Stefan.

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 22:13

Boo! I've found you ! I am so glad that you liked my poem.

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 22:10


both I
and my 'crazy diamond'
love this neat,sweet little poem.

the said 'crazy diamond'
absolutely loves the Autumn,s
display of fiery leaves.

for me
as Autumn fades into Winter
I just love being in front of
me log fire,
a glass of whisky in hand-and
an evening of-FUTURAMA!

just call me Mr Easily-pleased!

(please keep other names you can think of
to yourself!)

yep! good poem Lynn.

Wildes-X-2.......xx

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Francine

Fri 30th Sep 2011 21:36

I enjoyed reading this too... so many descriptive feelings and of longing to be somewhere else... a real sense of freedom in letting your mind wander.

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 30th Sep 2011 21:01

:o) ta Laura

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Ray Miller

Fri 30th Sep 2011 20:30

Well, the poem comes to a great climax, the universe is a big bang and some gases and try as I might I'm not the centre. The last two lines are excellent. But it all starts off poorly, I think, the first 9 lines are letting down the rest. Another crap pun for you.

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shoeless

Fri 30th Sep 2011 18:46

thankyou for your encouragement and comments :) x

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Rachel Bond

Fri 30th Sep 2011 18:23

haha yep...we lit one on new years and in my new found state of social responsibility wanted to climb up the tree where it had got stuck incase tree burnt down and flaming branch killed passing cat or something...it didnt. theres always next year :)

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Philipos

Fri 30th Sep 2011 15:36

Hi Lynn, the little devil was probably in hiding awaiting the dinner gong - very much share your fascination with these strange mouth woven works of art.

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Philipos

Fri 30th Sep 2011 15:14

Hi Lynn, (Leibfraumilch) thanks v. much for commenting on the poem. Appreciated.

Good to have your views on Cherry Blossom also, and yes thank you for asking, the pesky neck has been much better this week with a series of acupuncture sessions to follow.

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Fri 30th Sep 2011 15:04

Congratulations!

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 15:01


Corr..yes impressed..just rolls off the tongue..nice work indeedy.. :)

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 14:56



That second to last line Rach..tis a killer.
Thoroughly enjoyed..

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Greg Freeman

Fri 30th Sep 2011 14:53

Well done, Linda!

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Fri 30th Sep 2011 14:53


It was great to read you!
You have caught that feeling of claustrophobia so well but with the great observations intertwined too you bring out some hope that maybe one day..nice work indeed.. :)

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Philipos

Fri 30th Sep 2011 14:46

John (Leibfraumilch) I'm sure they do look at us but not in a way we would wish. Reminds me of the song 'Standing on the corner watchin' all the world go by......' Well its a good job we can't go to jail for what we're thinking. Even if these days it's just to stand and admire the outer beauty of youth and perhaps not without a little envy. Thanks for commenting.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 30th Sep 2011 13:55

I love this. At first you almost start feeling the same claustrophobic almost-migraine-like oppression as the writer, and then it gently and sweetly brings you out of that, to a new level of calm and beauty...and real hope and inspiration at the end.

Fantastic my dear, thanks for posting. Exactly suits my mood this week :) xx

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Laura Taylor

Fri 30th Sep 2011 10:55

I'm gonna repost my comments here :)

Fantastic, I LOVE it. You did just the kind of thing that was going through my head seconds after suggesting it, except you added that first bit about belief, about a faith almost.

Love how it's just an insignificant bit of plastic, but then becomes full of hope and dreams until reality strikes and then it's a tag in a gutter again. Brilliant symbol of how life isn't fucking fair! Then that rejection - don't do balloons anymore. Fuck it. I'll use it instead for another purpose.

Christ - actually, that sums up a lot about you and me that poem. I love it. xx

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Julian (Admin)

Fri 30th Sep 2011 10:28

I really love this, for similar reasons to yours for writing it. having just cleared my sister's house, I have foudn similar photos, ones I did not know existed.
I agree with Greg; I would drop the first verse - too prosaic - and imply it elsewhere in the poem.
That would leave that wonderful first line - ...beatniks on the pier.
I remember them at Polzeath.
There is a clash, for me, between your barefoot self as the theme, and your raggety black jumpered self. how about you substitute 'barefoot' for 'little' in the first line of what is your second verse?
None of my business - your poem - I know. I should critique less and write more! thank you for this diversion.

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Lynn Dye

Fri 30th Sep 2011 09:59

Hahaha, More than one bugger's, I should think, or wait a minute, does that sound like boasting??!! Lol. Thanks for commenting, Stef. xx

Thank you Stella, yes, it certainly is! xx

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Eli

Fri 30th Sep 2011 01:26

Greetings.
Thank you for the comment.
I've rethought the snug and wraps, and have made a subtle change. This tightens up the piece, and it scans a little better.
The feels good.
What do you think?
OL.

Ps. Never thought about the regional issues. Food for thought.

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winston plowes

Fri 30th Sep 2011 00:19

A difficult intangible thing to get hold of, fear. You have some good descriptions in your opening stanza and then with the hunger analogy and I especially liked to way you handled this.

A couple of suggestions
snuggy - snug?
wrap - wraps?

These could be regional preferances, where are you?

Keep posting,

Winston

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Eli

Thu 29th Sep 2011 23:08

Greetings.
I would appreciate feedback/comments on the above piece.
OL, Eli

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Thu 29th Sep 2011 22:29


Lynn-
shove a rosette on your boobies
and I,ll definitely vote for you.

does,nt matter what colour-
just stick yer chest out with pride
but be careful you dont have some
poor buggers eye out-haha

order!!! order!!!

P&Sxx

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Andy N

Thu 29th Sep 2011 22:21

Hi John;

thanks for your comments on my the end of summer poems... mean a lot to me, so thanks for that.

the third one is now up, and the fourth should be following soon, then I'll be onto my next sequence after that which maybe about the end of Piers.

see you soon at Stockport.

Andy N

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Andy N

Thu 29th Sep 2011 22:19

Hi Jennie;

thanks for the comment over 'the end of summer ii'.

i am really enjoying writing this series that much have now gone and blogged part iii and hoping to blog part iv (the finale) next week or maybe week-end.

hope you are good and hope to see you again soon

cheers x

andy n xx

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Andy N

Thu 29th Sep 2011 22:16

hi lynn;

thanks for the comment over 'the end of summer iii'.. been quite a straight forward a series for me to write this actually - probably because of the strange weather up my way - lol recently.

either way, i think there is one more to comment and then i'll be onto another sequence..

hope you are well

cheers x

andy n x

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Andy N

Thu 29th Sep 2011 22:15

Hi Kealan - thanks for the comment on 'the end of summer iii' m8... i think there is just one more to come on this series which i may post over the week-end.

i was also at openmind the other night too and was hoping to see you there.. maybe next time, eh?

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Andy N

Thu 29th Sep 2011 22:14

thanks to all for your comments here on this series.. i think there is just one more to come here, then if all goes to plan - I'll then be starting on the next series of short poems which has a working title of 'the end of the pier'.. x

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 29th Sep 2011 20:42



Heartfelt moving poem.

The second part full of calmness.

feel better for reading it

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Thu 29th Sep 2011 18:41


Full to brimming with the Craft Cnythia..I adore this one of yours :)

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