This is a "celebrity" type of poem, making
something of one case of murder among many
that go unreported and unsolved. For that reason alone I disregard it.
Comment is about Carol Ann Duffy under fire for courtroom poem (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
An engaging resume, Lynn, on an excellent subject. Although, how COULD anyone tell her 'how beautiful the world is'? It sure makes the reader think long and carefully.
Comment is about Emma was her Eyes (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
As always, I do enjoy your imaginative scope, and I find this very interesting. To be honest, I think it is a bit 'unfinished'. Would you consider leaving out all punctuation? IMO,your word order is very self explanatory, and the roll of such fine words could then flow unimpeded. My thesaurus is a constant companion, and I use it often to find the exact word to express an elusive idea.
Comment is about JANINE AT THE SEA`S EDGE (blog)
Sorry to get anal again :) but there is a place called 'Croucher's Bottom'. I've never been there but my mum and dad did and they took a picture of themselves crouching down/over, next to the sign.
You can see where I get my sense of humour from now :)
Comment is about Poetic place names . . . ? (blog)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Wonderfully 'nothing at all' and 'everything you can think of' both at the same time. What a zany metaphor for Christmas 'family get-togethers'!
Comment is about Your Horse Ate My Pyjamas (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
steve mellor
Wed 11th Jan 2012 12:40
keep running and dodging Dave
wait until there's a 5 at the end, in the year that you write.
what rhymes with 5? 'alive' thank god
Comment is about Birthday with a zero (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
I like her poem. Leaving race out of it, I can identify with any mother's quest for justice - and that is what the poem is about. The death of the officer at Broadwater was tragic and sickening but it isn't topical - Stephen Lawrence is - he was just an innocent boy going about his daily life.
I love poetry that means something, that makes you feel - this poem does.
Comment is about Carol Ann Duffy under fire for courtroom poem (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hola Cynth!
Hey thanks for your note on Tigerella :)
My daughter was born breech, but I was cut so didn't rip (ouch!!). I still tease her for being awkward and coming out arse first into the world hehe :D Fifteen-odd students and a top consultant at the business end...you have no shame after that!
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I really like the exuberance of this, the killing details, the pain and the joy.
Comment is about Hills in Winter (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Hi Laura, thanx for your comment on Seven Billion Reasons, great feedback, yes I still ponder over it and if I think hard it still blows my mind. I wanted to build up a crescendo in the poem with the numbers throughout reducing to one. Yes I dont think we appreciate it enough, anyway glad you liked it, hope to see you soon, WOL on Sunday! X
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hello Cynthia, thank you for taking the time to comment on Falling. You've been away too long.
regards,
Graham
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Val, my single word for the God idea is 'attitude'. I enjoyed this.
Comment is about WOL Competition (blog)
Original item by Valerie Cook
First of all, I am no fan of Ms Duffy's work. That said I think that she should be allowed to write about anything she chooses. As to quality, taking WOL as an example, we are all allowed to be variable in our output.
For me the biggest problem is the matter of the position itself. A Royal Laureate is what it is, outdated and meant to be sycophantic.
I am afraid CAD will become like most of the England football team managers, subsequently wishing she hadn't taken the job in the first place. I bet the sherry is crap too!
Comment is about Carol Ann Duffy under fire for courtroom poem (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I do like the aura of this, and the imagery. Often, that impact alone is enough to make a good poem. IMO, there are some words that caused blockage, like '"recent" rain' (which didn't even seem necessary for metric count). And perhaps 'carillons' is so unusual, a musical word for hair, that its originality bothered me,rather than amazed me. And yet - it sure sticks in the mind.!
Comment is about BETTY IN A WINDY SUNSET (blog)
Enjoyed the poem, the last line is good. It's maybe longer than it needs to be. I thought the middle bit, from here
Since you haven't decided to That's how you disappeared
could have been more compact, snappier. But nice all the same.
Comment is about Camouflage (blog)
Original item by J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang)
Is Ms Duffy contemplating writing some lines about the officer hacked to death at Broadwater Farm and whose killers have yet to be brought to justice?
One was laid low by a single blow,
The other dismembered as the evidence will show;
The death of one - a voice for community,
The death of the other - a silent impunity.
Comment is about Carol Ann Duffy under fire for courtroom poem (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Yeah, wow. It's certainly an experience reading your poems. This feels as rich as Dr Zhivago.So many arresting phrases
the gulping escape
then winter is yet
to solder me infertile
some of it I find too beyond
pad your face out over a place
blank enough to erase,
for example. But as I said, an experience, memorable one.
Comment is about Siberia (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
The Guardian has made the poem available on line here -
http://www.guardian.co.uk/books/2012/jan/06/carol-ann-duffy-stephen-lawrence
Of course as is stated above some will like it some not, others will fall in the middle. Stepping away from the subject for a moment is this not the job of the Poet Laurieate also: To Write words that question and challenge not just our views but how we interact and feel about poetry. and on a wider topic still does the very discussion of a poem make it a piece of art? In other words does the discussion and debate become part of the piece and how it is perceived?
Oh yes... I like it.
Win.
Comment is about Carol Ann Duffy under fire for courtroom poem (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Brilliant, Laura, top-class writing. If your reference to a breach birth is just academic, I stand amazed at your insight. I would never have used 'eased' though, more like 'ripped' for me.
Comment is about Tigerella Warrior (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thanks Chris, I love all things Schiele - such a beautiful soul and creator. The story around his mistress, Wally, breaks my heart. There is a collection of his letters that I have been trying to get hold of for a while.
Have you ever heard of a band called "Rachel's" (another favourite)? They put together a whole album for him. Beautiful music. Here is a snippet (if this link works)
http://youtu.be/hfqg_Pt2Pzg
Take care.
Comment is about chris stevenson (poet profile)
Original item by chris stevenson
Interesting place names...well, Clit-heroe still makes me laugh. But then I still laugh at my own farts.
Comment is about Poetic place names . . . ? (blog)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Thanks, Steve and Greg. End of empire-ish.
Comment is about Erosion (blog)
... perfect for your excellent writing ..Egon Schiele,died at 28,couple of days after his wife..very sad.
Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Jingoism, football hooligans, end of empire? David Cameron's EU veto? I enjoyed the cartoon image.
Comment is about Erosion (blog)
It's the new 40, Dave! I've got a birthday with a zero coming up this year, too. Slow train coming. But you still appear to be fleet of foot. A poem that struck a real chord with me.
Comment is about Birthday with a zero (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
wow i really enjoyed this...it has traces of running up that road...
i like the way your poetry is unfolding and have particularly enjoyed your recent posts.
siberia isnt cold enough
i will run as far as i collapse
and wrap in fur
the journeys task ...:)
your writing is purely poetry xx
Comment is about Siberia (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
poeticide is a good word. i keep the ones that are important. some get deletisized.the genre thing is really to say i have a distance from a lot of my subjects but make them personal. some turn out to be something i want to keep personal. sometimes i write for me. sometimes for others, but i agree that nascent maturity allows for me to see that sometimes what i write is an elaborate escape and sometimes i like to keep it real.
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thanks John, I love this! I'm going to play the audio to my son tomorrow. He's only seven, but I'm sure he'll get the general idea. ;)
Comment is about Father and Son (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hi Laura - thanks for your positive feedback on How Not To Receive A Compliment. Glad you liked it. x
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Welcome to WOL Mike! I read your bio a few days ago and the reference to the spirit level made me smile - there has to be a poem in there somewhere :)
Just turn up at the Tudor - everyone gets to perform on the night. We don't have guest slots, so have a little more time to play with than other venues - which is just as well, since it can get busy sometimes.
The venue is run by John Togher but Louise Coulson will be filling in for him over the next couple of months cos he's just had a new addition to the family :) Look forward to seeing you on Thursday. x
(And yes - teenagers can be a trial at times - like when you have to clean a house full of puke up in the early hours of a New Year...)
Comment is about Mike Hilton (poet profile)
Original item by Mike Hilton
Thank you Laura, MC, Philip. :o)
Comment is about Wandering expositions (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
'Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down.'
Robert Frost
Comment is about I'VE LEARNT (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Hi Isobel,as I'm a virgin to write out loud and the protocol of comments, blogs and electronic discussions. I've only just read your stuff i.e. Made of Love. Brilliant! I've got a 14 year old just like that. I wonder if our parents thought the same about us at that age?
I was thinking of coming to the Tudor on thursday cos I want to learn more about different styles etc. If so, whats the protocol? Do you just turn up with your stuff and put your name down for reading or do you have to contact anyone first?
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Powerful poem. Very well written.
Makes me remember past loves, the
good and bad ones.
Your words bring powerful images.
Great writing.
Shirley
Comment is about Lover's Limbo (blog)
Original item by Ushiku Crisafulli
Many thanks for you snort over Father and Son. I too have snorted when someone was sat on my face!
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
What ho, Isobel? Many thanks for your comments on Father and Son and Walford. I am unsure of the causality between Father and Son and the discussion I started on Better Looking Poets which was turned Feudianly by Rachel and you into a bum fantasy. If I have planted pleasing thoughts into your heads then, in the words of the hymn, "my living has not been in vain".
Unlike Father and Son (which was genuine marriage guidance counselling) Walford was pure whimsy.
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Hello AE. Thanks for your thoughts on Father and Son. Perhaps I should have entered it in the "Joyeux" competition. The idea of those ladies sitting on my face is extremely uplifting.
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Hello Jane. Not seen you on here for a while. Noce to see you back. Thanks for your comments on 1962. I think you seem to weathered the years a bit better than me!
Comment is about jane wilcock (poet profile)
Original item by jane wilcock
Hello Dave. Thanks for your thoughts on 1962 and Walford - a bit differnt from each other in tone. My memory of the Missile Crisis was that the world out there suddenly mattered to me in a life-and-death way. Walford is my usual nonsense!
Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
But Mab is smothered in pearls! (I agree with you about the un-gallantness tho!)
Comment is about Diary of a Spoken Word Bird: boobs, rude words, and a gorilla (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hello Nick. Thanks for your thoughts on 1962. I think you must have been one of the "bigger boys" to be able to remember Suez - I'd have been 4.
Comment is about Nick Coleman (poet profile)
Original item by Nick Coleman
Thanks for your thoughts on 1962, Tom. It was the first time I was given an inkling that world "things" affected me, disturbingly in a life-or-death way - not something would would want a 10 year old kid to have to front up.
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thanks for your thoughts, Greg, on 1962. I would have been 10 at the time and it was a realisation that the world beyond school and home and family was very big and not a place for me to play in; and that those stories they said on the news affected me.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wotcha, MC. Just realised how remiss of me not to pass on my thnks for the comments you made on 1962 (I really do remember rolling around the carpet while my dad shouted at me to keep quiet), Le Pere Fouettard and Walford.
Hope you had a good Christmas and the New Year's been good so far.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
I read this a while back and enjoyed it, meant to comment but somehow got dragged away from the pc and didn't make it back. Then I heard you read it last night at the Bards.
It is very thoughtful.
It is seemingly simplistic, that is to say the technique of a sentence and removing one word at a time is simplistic. But the choice of words that forms the original line needs to be very good (and it is). If it were not the the subsequent alteration of clauses, each subsequent new statement would not work.
Clever and thoughtful; the appearance of simplicity only adds.
Interestingly it has a zen like buddhist quality to it and also oddly reminds me of Japanese rock gardens. You gain a little more if you take more time with each clause/ statement.
My Best
Chris
Comment is about Thou (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
I like this, like the notion expressed.
Well thought.
My Best
Chris
Comment is about Pillow Fights (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Very different- good nonsense!
Lewis Carrol would approve.
My Best
Chris
Comment is about Grunkling Never Gets You Anywhere (blog)
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 10th Jan 2012 17:51
Hi there Lynn and Colin
and the asbo doggy,biting Benji
or should that be asbow-wow doggy?)
No way is he like that!
you did the right thing Lynn
contacting the police
since what seems petty
sometimes escalates into something more serious
The community coppers are quite good
at dealing with incidents like this
and I think a little more able
to keep a regular eye on things.
Very pleased Colin is on the mend.
I took part in our town clean up team
last Sunday.Had a good laugh
with all the Lady volunteers.
And considering the manky drizzly day
we got a lot of council shrubbery beds
tidied up-trimming tree branches and shrubs,
de-littering etc.
and finished off by power washing stonework etc.
Felt great afterwards-
but very very sweaty!
Hope the doggy situ is resolved.
let us know.
Love to all.
Stef and Tricia.xxx
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 11th Jan 2012 13:22
Kealan, I think you are full of Romance, just not the Women's Weekly kind ... more the Burn for Experience of all kinds. Romance is a much maligned word.
Comment is about Love On Pearl Harbour Night (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady