Bang on Richie! You got it! Prism in Shade works brilliantly as a title, I love it!! Thank you :D and yes, that's what I meant. Without the light, all the beauty is lost - it's potentially there, but you need the light to see it :)
Ta cocker!
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Original item by Laura Taylor
Brilliant! You got it! Prism in Shade works brilliantly as a title!! Thank you :D and yes, that's what I meant. Without the light, all the beauty is lost - it's potentially there, but you need the light to see it :)
Ta cocker!
Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)
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darren thomas
Wed 23rd May 2012 11:50
thanks for your recent comment, Alison - i appreciate it. dt
Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)
Original item by Alison Smiles
'A Prism In Shade' [that refracts no light, I take it to mean?] would be a great title for this, chuck. Not sure which version I prefer; I like the triplet form too.
Comment is about Prism in Shade (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Oh god no Ray - I've never met you in real life but from my interaction with you on here I know you don't have one iota of prejudice in you!
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
Laura. I thought it were summat like that prompted the question. I just see it as I'm giving a voice to a character, same as a novelist might. I'm not Jim Davison. Mind you, I sometimes wonder how the Japanese feel about having their haikus pinched.
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
Thanks for reading...lacking confidence in my own writing at the moment and getting abit lost too so understand what you mean... guess I was trying to think of how quickly things take over, how carried away and how frightening this can be too... I don't know...hmmm...
Comment is about The Gaze (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
What a fantastic night! Chris and Natalie run a tight ship and their MC Glenys takes no prisoners!
The sound was quality, it was a seamless running order, lovely intimate venue (with free parking RIGHT behind it!), some brilliant poetry and music, photos diligently taken, PLUS recordings done of performances (which is something I think other venues should have) - we WILL be back. Thanks for having us, me and Bob really enjoyed it :)
Review is about ThePoetry Spoke on 28 Aug 2012 (event)
Cheers for your reply Ray. I have to admit I do sometimes, often, feel uncomfortable about people appropriating patois.
Oh, I do like the poem btw, sorry to derail - that's not like me at all ;)
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I really liked most of the first verse, and the last two. I got lost a bit int middle.
I love the concept of the gaze though - great subject to write about.
Comment is about The Gaze (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Thanks, Greg. I think your poem is very fine. This is not so much a poem as an anthem, a national anthem, me hopes.
Laura. Writing in patios is fine in weather like dis, but when wind and rain come, me dread.
Ah, patois, me see!Ting is, I hear it in me head like dis sometimes. All de fault o' watching Rastamouse. It suit me righteous indignation.
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
This is astounding - intense, fist-punching-the-air-stuff. I love it. Would love to hear this read - could you put up a recording?
Excellent.
Comment is about The Reality of What It Really Is (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
A cycling romance ... beautifully crafted. The humour of the first stanza means the very powerful final lines take you by surprise.
Comment is about First impressions (blog)
Original item by Alison Smiles
How do you feel about writing in patois, Ray?
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Thanks for all the comments. Laura, I'll put you down for the next New Model Army - and maybe Alison,too. Nicely-crafted poem, MC, although there are a lot of arguments you don't include. My poem needs to be worked on to make it as a poem, but I'm glad it's started something (see Ray Miller's fine offering). The royal family is at the top of Britain's pyramid, and if you think that our country's potential is hamstrung by its class system - and I do - then it all starts with them. To adapt Johnny Rotten: "England's still dreaming." On the other hand, you could argue that the royal family is the one thing that unites many of us, and that getting rid of them would expose the divisions in this country even more. I would say, you've got to start somewhere. But if it would mean precipitating another civil war - and it might - then, yes, Isobel, let them have their glittering carriages, if it matters that much to them.
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Much more uplifting than mine, Ray! And a much better poem, too.
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in In memory of Dike Omeje
the sound effects of assonance, internal rhyme and end rhyme works very effectively to create a flow. and i love the way that stanza 3 uses enjambement.........
superb methods of creating flow and rhythm here.
Comment is about Anwen Lewis (poet profile)
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thanx.......wasnt sure whether it works or not, the repetition........what do u think?
Comment is about A Variant of a SESTINA poem: Little Child Lost. (blog)
Original item by Phillip Kelly
A beautiful tribute to your Uncle Jim! Thank you.
Comment is about We Miss You (blog)
Original item by MNtality
Hmmm - I think you make your point very well in this poem Greg - and that last line is a killer.
I wouldn't put myself as a royalist - but then I'm not a roundhead either. I think old ladies would still have their homes used to offset nursing home costs, whether the royalty were there or not - it's because we are all living so long (thank you NHS) - but I do see the point you are making.
I quite like the Englishness of the whole monarchy thing - it differentiates us from much of the rest of the world - it's quaint. I don't have any statistics on it - but I imagine plenty of tourists are attracted to London, just to see the changing of the guards and because all that pomp and majesty.
I enjoyed the drum but it's not one that I'd bang myself.
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Agreed, but to what avail? They love their queen, Greg. Bizarre, so it is. She did drive that ambulance in the war and her dad stayed in London in the blitz and all.
And she does now pay tax, though why it isn't backdated is a trifle odd.
Nah, MC is quite right, look at what we would lose: er...
I love that Tupperware bit. That reminds just a tad of Tony Walsh's poem, Posh Things.
Excellent.
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Got the stats for that MC? All my life I've heard about how the parasites bring in so much money to this country. Go on then, show me, show me how much and where it's being spent. Then give me a comparison as to how much it costs to keep the monarchy in place.
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Completely thrown by the first line fingering reference until I did a double take. I visit an old lady who was born in the same year as the Queen. She lives in a ground floor one bed flat, relies on her neighbours (also elderly) for shopping and if they can't help goes without. She's just gone into respite because social services can't supply her current needs while she's poorly. I hear the sentiment here loud and clear, perhaps because it's been a bit of an emotional day for me with old lady friend. Your poem hit the spot.
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I like where this led me. An unusual concept that contains the age-old conumdrum of how to deal with "first impressions" and how they can(mis)lead us to something worthwhile.
Comment is about First impressions (blog)
Original item by Alison Smiles
Reminded of Shakespeare's three witches when I'm not confounded by an image of hula skirts!!
Comment is about The Three Hulats (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I assume you mean 'aberration' Tommy?
Thank you Isobel. We are trying it with this project and we shall see how it works.
Comment is about Poems back in the shops - apologies for the buggeration (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
One born to lifetime service in the glare of public life
The other born to humdrum things, someone's
mother, someone's wife.
One admired around the world by nations so diverse
That some are wealthy beyond compare while others clutch their purse.
The other loved by nearer folk with her duty
bound to them
No goldfish bowl existence and no need for the
glittering gem.
One brings in far more money than her family
ever cost
For that alone, if the Crown were replaced,
a lot more would be lost.
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Ha - great piece Greg - just DRIPPING with contempt. Right up my street.
Comment is about Jubilee (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Ah, the power of repetition, lovely.
Comment is about A Variant of a SESTINA poem: Little Child Lost. (blog)
Original item by Phillip Kelly
Liked this very much, JC. Good rhythm, paced, and not knowing what a hulat is, tres intriguing! [by the way a jerk and a twist works best for me.]
Comment is about The Three Hulats (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
''I'm loving'' what foul abortion of the ingland langwige is that?
Comment is about Poems back in the shops - apologies for the buggeration (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
"The Three Hulats" is a pub in Leeds. The name intrigued me - it isn't in my Concise Oxford!
I do now know what one is, although I prefer the inference I give the word in this poem.
Comment is about The Three Hulats (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks for your comments on "Tanaburs", Yvonne. I'd just come off the phone from shoutng at my dad who hadn't got his hearing aid in; and I couldn't break the habit!
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)
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Thanks for your comments on "Tanaburs", MC. The idea was suggested by (plagiarised from) a by-line in Bernard Cornwell's "The Winter King" which I have just re-read. For anyone with an interest in The Dark Ages (Romano-British, Saxon, Viking) times his stuff is a cracking read. You may be best familiar with his televised Sharpe stories.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
I'd say there are page poems and there are page poems...
Some transfer quite easily to performance - the ones that are written to be understood. The other sort just leave an audience cold. I don't think it has anything to do with whether the poem is shouted, rapped or just spoken quietly.
A lot also depends on the audience. I've read to a room full of poets who aren't really listening - just waiting for their turn to 'shine'. I prefer audiences with a good balance.
I think page and performance poetry complement each other - the spoken word being capable of inspiring more people to look at poetry of all different types. To work on the page, performance poetry needs tightening up - the punctuation, the spelling and the layout does matter.
Comment is about Live Poetry: An Integrated Approach to Poetry in Performance by Julia Novak (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I'm loving the idea of being able to run/administer competitions on line, Julian. What a great addition to the WOL menu options! I'm hoping you might open it up also to the informal WOL comps we like to run now and again...
Comment is about Poems back in the shops - apologies for the buggeration (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I think it's always been there
Comment is about The Darkness (blog)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
Fascinating review, Julian. I don't buy into the "page and performance poetry in opposing corners" argument - and I'm sure you don't. Many "page" poets read live - they have to, to spread the word - although they don't necessarily shout and make a song and dance about it. Anyway, at a spoken word night, it's probably good to have an "in-your-face" performer followed by a quieter one, to provide a bit of light and shade. At the same time, it's clear to me why academics aren't particularly interested in spoken word/live performance: there's nothing in it for them. They're not able to mediate between artist and listener, and interpret; they're not needed in that context, not required to add their levels of mystique and complication. Are academics like witch doctors? Discuss.
Comment is about Live Poetry: An Integrated Approach to Poetry in Performance by Julia Novak (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
well im not shakespeare but we all get forgotten, sometimes while we still alive. without creativity we would surely get lost like a forever casual junkie. so just wanna say this is good and something you wouldnt just read and forget.
I am not afraid of ending, it is an endless cycle of skin and bone that kills me
this is one example of why i think that. great description
and that i like the irony that writing a good poem can go some way to save your own life and describe an existence that is much more than its words..
'less than not' is impossible for a writer by virtue of his words. interesting paradox :)
Comment is about Neverless (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
I'm pleased that you did not tell me that the picture was not of your room. I like a modicum of suspense. Oh, and thank you for the spare semicolon. I have put it in my bits and bobs drawer for future use. XX
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
I think this need a health warning - it's enough to awaken the dead including Tanaburs.
I hear they need a town crier in Aberystwyth. Failing that the fog horns packed in on the Anglesey light house. They could play this.
Enjoyably OTT.
Comment is about Tanaburs (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hi Steven - welcome to WOL. Hope to see more of your poetry on here soon :)
Comment is about Steven Parker (poet profile)
Original item by Steven Parker
Well I'll be damned! Sorry Charlotte, trouble with this job, can't do right for doing wrong! Oh well, hope to make it up to you sometime, but all in a good cause if you're at Uni! Looking forward to your guest slot! X
Comment is about Charlotte Henson (poet profile)
Original item by Charlotte Henson
DAMN YOU JEFF I JUST NOTICED YOU BOOKED TONY WALSH ON MY BIRTHDAY AND EVERYTHING AND I'LL BE AT UNI THEN. DAMN YOU.
Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)
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Not to joke about it at all, but heart failure sounds a lot more poetic - there has to be a poem in that.
I'm glad to hear that you are well now.
Isobel x
Comment is about Richard Tyrone Jones: the heart of the matter (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Not a massive heart attack, but massive heart failure, and the facebook event is https://www.facebook.com/events/206236279489229/
Cheers, RTJ
Comment is about Richard Tyrone Jones: the heart of the matter (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
alisonsmiles68@gmail.com
Wed 23rd May 2012 12:01
Thanks for commenting on First Impressions. Weirdly, I hadn't actually thought of it as a romance, more something which might have been but wasn't!
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Original item by Greg Freeman