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John Coopey

Tue 20th Aug 2013 20:31

Heartfelt and simple Shirley.
If I was being picky I didn't like the "did" in "did cry". It always feels like a spacer to me.
On another level, if this is personal and recent, my condolences.

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John Coopey

Tue 20th Aug 2013 20:23

Fine poem, Ian.
Very vivid.
I'm not so sure about the "saviour" bit.
I've seen a lot of them!

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John Coopey

Tue 20th Aug 2013 20:17

Go for it MC.
F**k the detractors.

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 20th Aug 2013 16:59

Hello JC - I can get the words and a tune
together but you have that extra ability to
accompany and perform your own stuff. Long may
it be so!!
P.S. I'm having DKJC promoted on a Hotdisc
compilation that gets sent to Country music DJs
around Europe and beyond in September. Nothing
ventured...nothing gained - as they say. Plus -
it's also promised a few online plays on www.ukcountryradio.com then. Bring it on!!

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Laura Taylor

Tue 20th Aug 2013 13:50

No, it's not waffle at all, and I completely understand. Sometimes I want a little knowledge ahead of it all, sometimes I don't, but what I hate most of all is having someone else's knowledge imposed on me. Monothought makes me itch all over.

I enjoyed reading your post as much as your poem, as it goes :)

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Tue 20th Aug 2013 11:10

Thank you for your time and comments and for following too Cynthia!

Laura - yes! Thank you for taken what you have taken from this poem for that is, unfortunately, how I feel sometimes. I do think that there is an elitist attitude sometimes that strips away the question of a differing response to art being accepted rather than just being simplified and i think sometimes this is due to a self imposed importance that sometimes academics place upon themselves. I encountered a few pretentious exercises during my undergraduate degree when it came to the prospect of working with certain tutors - almost as if it was proving your intellectual fuckery (if you pardon my language) in order to write which is not how I see it all at all. (I must say i did end up work with two excellent people during that time - Michael Schmidt and the late and beautiful Linda Chase who inspired me a great deal).

The further I continue with my own little writing journey, the more I am confused and the more art I see, the more child like I wish to become - I have this wish to stand in front of work as if i was the only want to see it, without the jargon of write ups or all those who have had their opinion before which cannot help but add to mine sometimes. I know this to be quite selfish I suppose but I am sometimes quite solitary in my walking about life, and so I suppose its my way of wanting to be friends with what I see! I do believe I am waffling now.

I had a bit of head on me this day. there is so much to love in the poetry world today too for I must say that my heart always wants to read those who throw their emotions completely into the wind and don't care how obscure, or how grandiose, or how unstructured their work chooses to be. That they have expressed some beauty within or outside themselves which is too painful to keep in rather than write tightly and appreciative of competitions and alike.

I love reading stuff at Ravenna press at the moment too. Beautiful work there.

"Beauty will be compulsive or it will not be at all." Andre Breton (x)


Thank you and again sorry for waffle! x

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garside

Tue 20th Aug 2013 07:14

apols for the delay Cate - thanks for reading :-)

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Mon 19th Aug 2013 21:34

what!? no Stranglers!!(cool poem)xx

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 19th Aug 2013 21:21

Harry - delighted you found and enjoyed "Daddy Knew Johnny Cash".
I knew I was on to something when a pal of many
years - a published suthor of a book about the
origins of the Oxford Dictionary and a retired
lecturer in English at a Canadian university - told me how much he had enjoyed it. Just shows you never
quite know who - or where - your audience might be!!
Now -an annoyed P.s. - however much I have tried to make the above lines neat and tidy - they are
reproduced here like the product of some wayward sub-editor's untidy mind. Most aggravating.
Apologies!

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John Coopey

Mon 19th Aug 2013 21:19

Hello Isobel,
Thankyou for you thoughts on "WriteOutLoud Women Blues".
Glad to see that the depths of my crudity do not disappoint you! Of course, I don't know what half of those poetry terms mean - I had to look them up.

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John Coopey

Mon 19th Aug 2013 21:15

Hello Foxy,
Thankyou for reading "WriteOutLoud Women Blues". There's a lot goes on in my head (not much outside!)

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John Coopey

Mon 19th Aug 2013 21:12

Hello MC,
Glad you enjoyed "WriteOutLoud Women Blues".
I have to say it's not a patch on your Johnny Cash tribute.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 19th Aug 2013 21:12

Titter ye not
If ye squitter a lot!
Anally retentive is not a phrase to mess with
here!!

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John Coopey

Mon 19th Aug 2013 21:10

Hello Starfish,
Thankyou for reading (maybe listening to) "WriteOutLoud Women Blues". I didn't mean to alarm you with my manifesto!

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Isobel

Mon 19th Aug 2013 19:45

Well if you were to ask me to lick this piece into shape, I'd have to say that some of the demonstrative and possessive pronouns in your song were at odds with the written format - perhaps you became more demonstrative and possessive as you got really into your subject matter, John?

For now, I think I'll echo Ann - but I did have a jolly good chuckle - and I LOVE the blues - the guitar work and the flow of your poetry. Did it just trip of your tongue John?

We should do a double act - when I'm being smutty, I think I could out-smut you!

;)) x

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Jonnie Falafel

Mon 19th Aug 2013 16:36

E-motion recalled in tranquility as Wordsworth might have said!

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 19th Aug 2013 15:27

Oooh, sorry if I've got mixed up! Looks like you've done plenty! (Who's Ian?) :)

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Nigel Astell

Mon 19th Aug 2013 15:23

Ann I think you mean Ian or do you want me to do a bit more?

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Nigel Astell

Mon 19th Aug 2013 15:18

Inside the lines
the boy smiles
what is missing
is your love.

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darren thomas

Mon 19th Aug 2013 13:14

Hi Ann - thanks for the 'hello'. :)

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Karen Robinson

Mon 19th Aug 2013 13:03

Thanks for your comments John and for listening to my lastest entry.

Rhyme is not dead yet and though it might be outmoded in some quarters, the proverbial man on the street still enjoys it. I do hope your rhymes are not changing!

Karen.

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Karen Robinson

Mon 19th Aug 2013 12:49

Thanks for your comments on Grumpy Summer and thanks for listening.

Karen.

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Karen Robinson

Mon 19th Aug 2013 12:38

Thanks for listening to "Grumpy Summer" and your comments. I appreciate it. You highlighted the lines I rather like myself!

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Isobel

Mon 19th Aug 2013 11:04

Enjoyable review - I'm fascinated by the combination of poetry and comedy. Many poets try to cross over into comedy - it's interesting to hear of comedians doing the same thing - with or without success.

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Isobel

Mon 19th Aug 2013 10:20

Thanks for your comment on my Beautiful poem - I'll try to perform it next time I'm at the spoke - and I'll expect you to join in on the chorus!

xx

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Sun 18th Aug 2013 22:05

despite no mention of the Clash,
I love this piece.x

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 18th Aug 2013 20:40



Disappointment, Anne, disappointment.

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Andy N

Sun 18th Aug 2013 17:28

nice stuff with a great ending dave. top one

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Andy N

Sun 18th Aug 2013 17:28

the use of the slight change at the end of the stanzas works really well here. have you tried this live yet? it should work really well

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Andy N

Sun 18th Aug 2013 17:26

the last stanza is a killer, katy here but an top piece all round i think

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Andy N

Sun 18th Aug 2013 17:24

interesting ideas, david. enjoyed.

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Andy N

Sun 18th Aug 2013 16:55

hi m.c. - thanks for the comment regarding peterloo. it's a piece that means a lot to me and is still in flux a bit but pleased you liked it.

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Andy N

Sun 18th Aug 2013 16:55

hi harry - thanks for the comment regarding peterloo. it's a piece that means a lot to me and is still in flux a bit but pleased you liked it.

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Andy N

Sun 18th Aug 2013 16:52

thanks guys. it's a piece which still in flux a bit means a lot to me and i am pleased to read your comments.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 18th Aug 2013 15:04


M.C.

Even to a country-music ignoramus like me that sounds really good!

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 18th Aug 2013 14:35


Dave,
You weren`t pedalin`, were you!


Stop bein` cruel :)

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 18th Aug 2013 14:27

As a Bing Crosby fan I`m absolutely relishing the fate of all you later-on `World Shakers`(Just look at the cut of Jagger and the rest of them now)

I know they`ve got money - but the gobs on them! (As they say: `Everything comes...)

By the way,I like the way you`ve shortened the lines of that middle - mood and theme change -stanza, thereby pulling the begining up.

I also like the way the random rhymes help to `strap` the recount of the somewhat hectic theme together.

Enjoyed.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 18th Aug 2013 14:07

The reasons for marching in the prosperous West) are becoming depressingly fewer.

Think of it: `No more coal-smoke - (it-makes us all cough`)...`Don`t frack in my back yard`(It spoils my view)...`No more cuts` (you`re taking away my holiday money)

Why do they all sound so selfish?

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 18th Aug 2013 13:37


Enough of a `story` in this to stop anyone snoozing their way through it.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 18th Aug 2013 13:02


This needs a wider space between stanzas two and three.

I agree: an `ego` can`t get much brasher than to change the historical institution of marriage withiut hardly any reference to anyone at all except himself.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 18th Aug 2013 12:54


Karen,
Well written - and read - and music-ed.

Delighted with:

`and death by perspiration`

`Endure bifurcated grief`

Also enjoyed the comic walk and thunderstorm ending.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 18th Aug 2013 12:50

A good, well thought out, tender read. I liked it too.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 18th Aug 2013 12:46

:)

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 18th Aug 2013 12:40

Hi Nigel - a very warm welcome to WOL. Hope to see some more of your work on here soon. And hope you will enjoy being a part of the site :)

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 18th Aug 2013 12:26

Great to see you on here - and I love your profile page poem. I remember you well on that course - a wonderful poem about your mother making you some clothes? And you have a lovely voice! Hope to see more of your work on here soon. Enjoy granma-hood! And so glad you are doing well with your poetry! x

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Julian (Admin)

Sun 18th Aug 2013 08:56

Hello Anne. It is good to see you on these pages. I have noted the showcase event in my diary. Glad the course was useful.

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David R Mellor

Sat 17th Aug 2013 20:08

poundland tanning studios ........... and violent pubs

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 17th Aug 2013 15:16

An historical tragedy. One wonders about the
ruling mindset - and its ongoing fear of "the
mob". A fear that would have also taken note
of the uprising and outcome of the French Revolution. It is still a fact that a large
group of people can be a crowd one moment, and
a mob the next - and that has never quite left
political thinking and actions, even to this day.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 17th Aug 2013 15:02

Ho-ho. That's something I hadn't realised.
Maybe...just maybe
She can't rhyme with baby.
If he was here now - by golly,
She could've asked Buddy Holly.
:-)

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Laura Taylor

Sat 17th Aug 2013 14:29

Ooo! Rousing! Would like to hear this performed. Open mic at the Diggers? I hope so.

One little typo - the 'littered with the bones' line, that should be a capital L.

Nice one our kid!

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