Hello Tricia
Welcome to Write Out Loud.
I hope you enjoy the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.
Thanks for uploading a picture of yourself. It’s good to see what our fellow poets look like.
Have a good browse around, there’s lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free. It’s the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s always someone who’ll help you out with a problem, so just ask and someone will get back to you. It’s a friendly place, so welcome once again.
Graham Sherwood
Comment is about Tricia Hague-Barrett (poet profile)
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Philipos
Mon 9th Jun 2014 17:01
Have responded to your kind comment about Touchstone on my wall. Thanks again. P.x
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Mon 9th Jun 2014 14:14
Hi Ian
Nice one, You should follow it up with a musical entitled
"Savilles Scandals"
I can imagine the first scene, Enter Jim stage left holding a young girls or boys hand, smirking, here's one I did earlier, oo'er missus
Comment is about Children Of The Glamned (Resurrection Shuffle) (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Mon 9th Jun 2014 13:51
Sorry Marianne
This one to me is like the times crossword, it leaves the reader too much to do. Well written but
to my failing faculties, nigh incomprehensible. xx
Harry's shot at analysis left me equally puzzled.
Comment is about Death (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Really well-considered, well-written and very thought-provoking. From mediocrity to profundity and back again to what exactly? Satire?
Comment is about Winebar in Worktown (blog)
Original item by Dave Morgan
Thank you for your time.
I think you have understood my poem very well Harry, thank you for the considered time reading.
I am sorry and not sorry for leaving the reader with so much hard work to understand me, its a daily struggle I have with myself!
am working on a collection now based on the love affair between Leonard Cohen and Marianne Ihlen which is proving quite interesting because I am writing about figures that are probably a bit too personal to the people involved! nevertheless it is an inspirational little venture.
Comment is about Death (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Well - a masterpiece of original thought, dynamic imagery and the flying words to give them life in an Orgy of Musicality as you stream all the skills of word sounds throughout, in one continuous dance.
Nuff said. You'll think I'm barmy.
Comment is about Cascade (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Writing is an excellent means to sort out emotions. It's even better therapy as you begin to critique your own ideas in their relativity to other people's similar feelings. The world begins to take shape beyond self-made horizons. I think it's the start of real self-wisdom, especially essential to poets.
Comment is about Yenimls (poet profile)
Original item by Yenimls
Yes, brief but poignant, striking a compelling truth that is universal, both to women and men. Well done. I look forward to more.
Check: turmoil
Comment is about Mirror (blog)
Original item by Yenimls
Sunshine on a cloudy day. For me, your innate humour is infectious across the lines. I wonder if family and friends know just what to do with you.
Comment is about The Fairy's Tale (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
I like this very much, great pace for an impossible job, in a hurry! Very good.
Dom.
Comment is about First Date (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Of course, this analogy doesn't work with people who write poetry. But that's the point, isn't it?
Comment is about Poets should engage with ordinary people much more, says Forward prize chairman Paxman (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
People ask me "Why don't you get your poems published?" I ask them how many cars they've ever bought. Usually over a lifetime its a dozen or so. Then I ask them how many poetry books they've bought.
Comment is about Poets should engage with ordinary people much more, says Forward prize chairman Paxman (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
There is a famouus exchange between de Gaulle and Dean Rusk where de Gaulle, as part of France's withdrawal from NATO, said that all American troops should withdraw from France. Rusk replied "Does that include those in the cemeteries?"
Comment is about ARROMANCHES - a Re-post of Remembrance for 2014 (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Eh up - thank you very much Steve :)
Tis a shame the photo only came out small - but I've put a link on to show it bigger anyway.
Comment is about Cascade (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Enjoyed this, Yenimls. Very tight.
I thought the rhythm hiccupped a bit with the word turmoil.
Comment is about Mirror (blog)
Original item by Yenimls
<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 9th Jun 2014 08:56
we would have used the last three lines only CB.A clever piece nevertheless.xx
Comment is about Fading Imperial Standards (blog)
Original item by c byrne
Brilliant Trace tells the story perfectly.
Well done you.
Comment is about One day soldier (blog)
Original item by Tracey Bucknell
Marianne,
I`m `going into` this a bit because, like others on here I am attracted and affected by some of your poems but sometimes have difficulty in `understanding` them. This is an attempt.
The poem is `about` death.
The unusual syntax of the beginning three
line question suggests that the rest of the
poem will consider `earth` `eternally`.
The nightly `dying` hummingbird and the
(Egyptian viscera -containing?) alabaster
both suggest–in differing ways- the theme
of death (and also eternity?) both followed
by the `soft woes` of the woman turned -
(hyphenated) into a `muse`s muse` ( is this
the poet herself?) who folds (composes?)
the woes into a `poem` like a flower losing
itself to winter and pain of all it`s colours
`chap the palms` of bone white hands`
(unresponsiveness?)
The following `what drop of honest blood`
harks back to the `what drop of tear` at the
start, as the the vague idea of perhaps trying
to restore circulation is strengthened by the
following metaphor of `veins` and `rivers` in
a rather bleak figure of a nail-clawing, animal-digging, tree-fighting, misty (nature?) which in `areoles` and `unborn` links budding plants and female teats into the metaphor.
The last five lines sum it all up dismissively
as `just dust` with (perhaps) the word`drawn`
being ambiguous. All is `just dust`.
The general drift is the inability of eternal poetry to soften the hard bleakness of the cold earth.
The poet has used enough reasonably valid
figures to explain why the poem is affective.
But I feel that those figures are too personal
to herself and that she would not leave the reader with so much hard work to understand her.
But she is (with difficulty) understandable and
miles superior to those incomprehensible navel-gazing `mystics` around.
Comment is about Death (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Hello MC. Thanks for commenting. It was a re-post but I thought the timing vindicated some Old Shite.
Comment is about Ode to Roy (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I wrote this in rememberance of D day 70th anniversary. whist listening to one of the veterans of that day talking about his friend who had died getting off the landing craft after being a soldier for just one day.
Comment is about One day soldier (blog)
Original item by Tracey Bucknell
Lol, Stef & Patricia, the only part I believe is the snigger, snigger! Thanks for comment. xx
Daniel, thank you for your comment. But of course that would be the logical meaning! ;-)
Comment is about Safe Sex (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
steve mellor
Sun 8th Jun 2014 17:11
Hi MC
Thanks for taking the time to comment on 'Forgotten'
I just have the feeling that many folk in the 'NORTH' feel like they're going to end up as one big exhibit in a working museum
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
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steve mellor
Sun 8th Jun 2014 17:07
steve mellor
Sun 8th Jun 2014 17:05
Really, really liked the piece. Nothing else needs saying (from me anyway)
Comment is about Cascade (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Point: The essential raison d'etre for Ukip is
"Who rules the United Kingdom?" In a Brussels-
based political club of nearly 30 nations
out for themselves, this is even more relevant.
Point: Immigration must be a decision for the
country affected not for those beyond its shores.
Point: The staff of the NHS could be significantly enhanced by home-grown numbers if
the billions paid each year to the EU (for what
"benefit" to us exactly?) were channelled into
the NHS funding. We shouldn't NEED to rely on
bringing in staff from abroad from countries
which stand to lose that talent from their OWN
health services.
We are a rich nation but our finances seem mis-directed in so many ways while our politicos
love to strut the world-stage and enjoy the
self-regulated (try getting a proper accountacy of the vast EU budget!) perks it provides...
even in retirement.
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Terrific spoof on the EU hymn - with better words!
As for the picture taken at a certain soccer match
and now on view online........
Lift your banner
Put a spanner
Into sporting football's works
Who cares to win like Argentina
When they show how they have been a
Sorry lot of childish berks?!
Comment is about Ode to Roy (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks for the comments from two WOL contributors whose own work I enjoy. You will
see from the reference to HM that this was
originally written (now slightly amended) for
the previous big anniversary when a certain
Jacques Chirac was the French president...
providing some merriment when he attempted to
"shepherd" the unamused Queen to her place!
I thought the speech from Obama elsewhere was
particularly good and certainly well received
by the US vets who were present. He is an
accomplished "Mr Everyman" type of public speaker, giving the impression that his words
are "there and then" instead of the carefully
prepared and rehearsed content required for
such an important occasion. The speech itself
- like Lincoln's Gettysburg address - deserves to be remembered in the context of war and what
the rest of us owe to those who served.
Comment is about ARROMANCHES - a Re-post of Remembrance for 2014 (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sun 8th Jun 2014 15:41
Cheers for your note on me review Dave :)
Comment is about Dave Morgan (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Morgan
It works in the summer as well Dave. Certainly giving me a "guilt trip" today. Like the analogy of the "voices" adding to the "to do" list. Very good.
Comment is about Voices Off (blog)
Original item by Dave Morgan
Very strange indeed. It certainly seems to have dissapeared into someones 'Room 101' ;)
Thank you Lynn. No problem.
Comment is about SMELLY BOGS AND DIAMOND DOGS (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
...and Lynn, I used to think 'sex on the hoof' was something to do with Lady Godiva! ;)
Comment is about Safe Sex (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Yes Brian P. always seemed the quiet boyish one, but he knows how to manage an audience (not that his audiences are going to make life difficult for him). Whether it's stuff from the back catalogue or more recent writing, he has a gentle voice that smiles and entices, an accent that is still "exceedingly rare", and a wry self-deprecating manner that wins hearts and minds. Always makes me smile and he's not a bad poet to boot.
Comment is about Recapturing that 60s mood with Brian Patten in night of laughter and nostalgia (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Good to see this. Steve had quietly submitted a poem to our forthcoming Words from Worktown anthology which Scott was happy to accept. Then we find he's just walked away with the Saboteur Award.Impressive.
Comment is about Steve Nash and Sophia Walker win Saboteur spoken word awards (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Nice one Laura. Your last comments are very telling and should form the basis for the kind of discussion about what we do, that we generally run a mile from.Perhaps Julian can confirm that this is the same Lucy English he inveigled to perform in Bolton about seven years ago. She was brilliant. A memorable night at the old Phoenix Youth Theatre Bar.
Dave
Comment is about Prayer to Imperfection: Lucy English, Burning Eye (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 7th Jun 2014 20:40
and heres us,thinking butter wouldn't melt in your mouth Lynn-(snigger snigger)xx
Comment is about Safe Sex (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thanks for the kind and supportive comments guys. So Dominic, what's wrong with those particular verses? If I don't know then I can't do much about it :-) they still work fine for me ;-)
Comment is about Passchendaele (Autumn 1917) (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Ha ha, John, I'm sure I was thinking of a much younger me, also!
Yes, that does sound painful, Solar, lol.
Thank you both for comments :-)
Comment is about Safe Sex (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
I enjoyed this, Daniel, many happy memories, even the white dog shit - how strange that was!
Thank you for your kind comments on my profile page, much appreciated.
Comment is about SMELLY BOGS AND DIAMOND DOGS (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Thanks for the kind words, Daniel.
I'm afraid I can't claim the "postcards" line as my own - I heard Tommy Docherty say it about Scotland some years ago.
Comment is about Ode to Roy (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I'm still giggling about the "Home before the postcards..."
Excellent work John. It gave me, as an Englishman, a great smile to start the day.
Comment is about Ode to Roy (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
As a guy who resented Sinatra challenging Crosby
I retire defeated.
Nice hectic performer.
Comment is about Children Of The Glamned (Resurrection Shuffle) (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
How little those who participated spoke about it afterwards (including my father in law) Perhaps it was the case that there was so much dying still to do afterwards, that the dying that had just been done was repressed...(sobering, isn`t it)
Good one M.C.
Comment is about ARROMANCHES - a Re-post of Remembrance for 2014 (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks Laura and John, for the comments. Both of you are right about the challenge.
The political implications of UKIP`s success are fascinating.
Should (as is being proposed) the conservative party now unite in some way with with UKIP and enough Labour supporters go over and vote for the new situation, then it could be an election
winner next year.
In that case Cameron`s present ploy of pretending to re-negotiate the terms, agreeing some`cosmetic` alterations and holding the referendum with a
conservative `accept` recommendation would ( like similar policies in other `right-wing beleaguered` Europe- nations) be in grave danger of rejection.
The whole basis of the conservatives beloved `economically only Europe` is the free movement of capital, goods, services and–in particular–people within the `free trade` area. Anyone who thinks that this can permanently be restricted to `cherry picking` only the the ones we want (such as foreign trained doctors) is living in cloud cuckoo land.
The (partly legitimate) present concerns about the speed and volume of the movement of people now has a politically important focus. So perhaps now the politicians will be forced to give the European argument the public airing it so sorely needs.
On the breeding `hurry up` call to middle-class women: How refreshing to see a woman looking about her and (somewhat belatedly) suddenly
realizing why all these immigrants are here.
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
thanx Daniel and big welcome to the site Love your style :)
Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
I am not worried by UKIP, Harry. I am worried by the 4.3m people who voted for them. That is our challenge. Let's hope Lincoln was right about fooling the people.
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Graham Sherwood
Mon 9th Jun 2014 18:09
Hello Joanne
Welcome to Write Out Loud.
I hope you enjoy the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.
Thanks for already uploading a picture of yourself. It’s good to see what our fellow poets look like.
Have a good browse around, there’s lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free. It’s the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s always someone who’ll help you out with a problem, so just ask and someone will get back to you. It’s a friendly place, so welcome once again.
Graham Sherwood
Comment is about Joanne Rimmer (poet profile)
Original item by Joanne Rimmer