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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:26

gawd knows re bugginton blues-one minute fine-then next all 'ell broke loose-but being the calm youthfully capable man wot I am,I just stopped short of putting me bloody foot(which was,nt actually bleeding)through the ******* screen-but hey! dont you being worrying your pretty little head over moi-you have enough to do-gallivanting!..ta though chuck-SW.xx

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Isobel

Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:23

Food for thought indeed Bernie - bring back hanging, birching, the electric chair, the guillotine and anything else that's going.

Joking apart, anyone that mugs old ladies needs a good seeing to and I love the social commentary.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:22

This poem is excellent, one to bookmark for many visits. 'blooms uncaptured...at last our patience' is one vivid expression among many.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:14

Another good poem, I think (hope)you are lambasting the common excuse: Blame it on my childhood when I couldn't cope with problems; so it's all the fault of society. Not my responsibility!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:08

I can. Words too. That's why this poem is a scorcher in sarcasm. Bernie, this is rightfully socked into our faces: his home is his box is his medals is his life.

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alan barlow

Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:01

cheers wild thing there were a number of themes and contortions running through my mind at the time i must admit plus i hadnt slept for over 24 hrs so it probably added to the mess i was trying to create lol

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:00

one did indeed have said gee gee doing a plop all over the proceedings-and the bugger still aint stopped galloping! ta for concern-Mr Grrreygrumps.xx

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:40

you are right Dave-holy wars?definitely a contradiction in terms-as for Norma Jean-they don,t make or break 'em like that anymore-rock on Mr D!-my best to thee-SW.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:19

Good poem Mr Alan!being open to lottsa interpretation-suits me sir!-SW

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:16

I can connect with this so much! And what a good poem!

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:15

I,m pondering over this poem in a very nice slow way-SW.x

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Philipos

Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:08

I've seen guys like this former heroes hooked on booze - Kipling has a lot to say about our boys when the spotlight goes off them - a serious poem about serious issues - I wonder how many people if surveyed could tell you how the British Grenadier went these days - I suspect pitifully few - your poem brings that reality home to us

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:08

good poem Ma Dye-I can actually speak two languages-English and rubbish-can you guess which one I speak more fluently? shhh! ta Ma D-Stefano.xx

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Philipos

Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:03

Was seduced at first by the cute puppy and then realised the seriousness of your message here - great idea for a poem and opens up the social issues we face today in modern society - a lot that could be said about the deeper message which means your poem works and gets us thinking

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John Aikman

Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:01

'Only the presence of an absence'

Fab line. It captures that feeling so well...

Thank you.

Jx

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Dave Bradley

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:41

Tricky indeed. Lots here to paint half a picture and get the imagination going on the rest

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Francine

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:25

Beautiful words, Kath...
'I'll be there with you.'... both loyal, and eternal within the context of your poem.

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bernard shelton

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:19

excellent

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bernard shelton

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:17

original and good

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Philipos

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:16

Hi Bernie - thanks for your comments on Freshfield Sands - very much appreciated

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bernard shelton

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:14

liked this, got me wondering who"she" is?

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Philipos

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:14

Laura - fancy you being at Freshfield Sands as recently as you were - wow - I'm quite sure it looks heaps better than on my last visit - nature trail and all lol x

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bernard shelton

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:12

a hard piece to read but well written and heartfelt

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Philipos

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:11

Dave - so glad you and your friends enjoyed Freshfield Sands and for taking the trouble of saying so

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bernard shelton

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:09

a good well written piece deserving of the good reviews

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Philipos

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:04

Hi Ann - re; Freshfield Sands - yes places do move our thoughts and usually because of who we're with at the time - appreciate your getting in touch x

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bernard shelton

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:03

well held sentiments

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Philipos

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:02

Hi Ann - yes places do move our thoughts and usually because of who we're with at the time

Stella - delightful to think our Dad's shopped at the same short's shop

Dave - so glad you and your friends enjoyed the read and for saying so

Laura - fancy you being at Freshfield as recently - wow

I will contact your pages separately - much obliged for getting in touch

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winston plowes

Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:58

Ray, this is a well considered well observed and thoughtful piece, loved it. Loved the slipstream bit and the outliving at last our patience especially. Win x.


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Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:57

Ray, this is a well considered well observed and thoughtful piece, loved it. Loved the slipstream bit and the outliving at last our patience especially. Win x.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:56

hey fingy!beastie-Barlow ta for sparing me a serious view(almost)on me poo-im 'unseen foe'-el mucho thanko,s squire-Wotsisname.(me am just back from the gremlin wars...bloody so called technology!)

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bernard shelton

Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:55

enjoyed this

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:53

hi Ann-thanks for all recent comments-just back from warring with the computer gremlins-big lot of dead good regards-SW.XX

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:04

Hi Kate, both Sunday Morning TV and the sump hunt made me smile - I think our 'escape' video when the kids were teeny was Postman Pat, lol. Best wishes, Dave

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Burns

Mon 17th Jan 2011 15:34

Vampires get tooth decay all threw the night and threw the day.Werewolves fleas, bring them misery. There claws too sharp to ich them free.However zombies don't use prosthetic knees just one dark nght to make them free.Fairy tale princesses hardly ever say please, behind the curtain there full of greed.Can witches have white weddings is a trick question. For a white which is really quite pleasent.Mummies have concreate for their bedding without a duvet or no linen.Do Orcs have to shave to ask this question is quite brave.Angels never misbehave there, there to watch us throughout are days.A goblin’s average height is 2ft tall to be a nuisance they can never get tall.Giants never start off small?Now here are your answers i've answerd them all, I had no money for a stamp. So i posted it on this wall.
thourght youll like this Dan Marcus Burns

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Greg Freeman

Mon 17th Jan 2011 15:01

These ceremonies seldom match expectations; I recall a similar one in Spain which involved an eight-hour round trip. And yet we felt we had done our duty; and my wife felt strangely comforted. Your clear-eyed view doesn't dispel the beauty of pink and purple petals entwining into a garland.

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winston plowes

Mon 17th Jan 2011 14:43

Hi andy, than ks for reading my Ghazals... 'the north sea rolls'I think this is the best bit too, (if it has a best bit) and yet they are all really simple words in that line (maybe that tells us something eh. Also like long words too .lol ,Win X

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Greg Freeman

Mon 17th Jan 2011 14:32

We won't get fooled again, as Pete Townshend said. More in hope than expectation

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Petrova Fairhurst

Mon 17th Jan 2011 14:16

Hi Andy, thanks for your comments on "Empty" the repeated no could be seen as a refusal of the fact as well as the fact...

Didn't make it to Wigan, some upset occurred which needed sorting - things don't happen when there's nothing planned! Ah well, Bolton isn't too far, used to live in Farnworth a moon or two ago, I'll check out the details, thanks x

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Andy N

Mon 17th Jan 2011 14:02

Powerful stuff, Petrova - particularly like the repeating of No in one of the stanzas, but it's a excellent piece throughout..

hope you enjoyed Wigan the other week.. if it's not too far out you should try 'guitars and verse' in bolton that i help my buddy, Jeffarama look after.

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Andy N

Mon 17th Jan 2011 14:00

another good un, dave.. enjoyed this - eye opening certainly! lol

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Andy N

Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:58

hi dave - bit of a change in voice for you there, but i love it.

good to meet you again on sunday.. i remember meeting you briefly with Isobel at Liverpoetry last Jan - where does the time go?

top stuff anyhow returning to your piece

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Andy N

Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:55

top stuff, Kath.. Are you going into writing songs as this is very close to it but the repeating use of i'll be there is subtle but sweet x

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Lynn Dye

Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:55

This is so good, Cynthia, I love it all. x

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Dave Bradley

Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:49

Good fun. Don't know if you are a dad but if you are, or will be, your kids are going to have a wonderful time with bedtime stories.

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Lynn Dye

Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:27

Hi Tommy, I just logged on to answer your comment, and then saw it had changed. To clarify, my poem is no way meant to be derogatory to the Welsh, Scottish or Irish, I have all 3 nationalities in my family or circle of friends. It is the British government I am really knocking and their political correctness. I am not being patriotic in saying I'm English, I am simply stating a fact.

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Petrova Fairhurst

Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:23

Thanks Laura, it was a difficult but also a deeply profound experience which was hell to go through but later provided such immense learning and opportunity for personal growth - which is often the case... xXx

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Petrova Fairhurst

Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:22

Thanks Laura, it was a difficult but also a deeply profound experience which was hell to go through but later provided such immense learning and opportunity for personal growth - which is often the case... xXx

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Laura Taylor

Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:03

Petrova - this, as you already know, is incredibly powerful. I don't get emotional very often about poems, but this put goosebumps all over me, and tears pricked my eyes. Writing it out can be quite useful, helpful, cathartic, can't it? Thank you for sharing this, it's a hugely moving piece

Laura x

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winston plowes

Mon 17th Jan 2011 12:46

Thanks for your observations. I am interested what it means to YOU. So actually you are the person best of all to qualify on my work :-)

Whilst I like some bits, Couplets 2,6,7 & 9. Others are not poetic and are more just like statements. It's ok if they are odd and quirky or dont make complete sense but they need to do something and not be just bland. Maybe I have been reading too many free verse ghazals lately. The disconnected narative is a feature of the Ghazal form and so is ok but strange if you are not used to it. In the hair ghazal the shers are also disconnected BUT they are pulled together by the common refrain "your hair". Here the refrain "By it" makes things more random.

Also interesting that often (and on this page) people liked the shers I didn't particularly like, Hmm.

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