Haiku... You write the first and never know where the flow will go. I think I ended up with the songs from 'Junior Choice' meet the scenes from 'Midnight Express'!

Glad you got it and liked it Martin. Much appreciated.

Comment is about WANDSWORTH WUFFIAN (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Excellent poem!xx

Comment is about Write Your Own Lines (blog)

Original item by Candice Reineke

Just finished reading this and it's brilliant.

Comment is about Poet Nathan Filer scoops £30,000 Costa award with first novel (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks for your comments on the red chair M.C.
I also realised after posting this that I had forgotten about the buzz of the electric cutters.
Cheers

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Very clever Daniel I like it. I can't imagine many people whistling his tunes now.

Comment is about WANDSWORTH WUFFIAN (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Hi James
Thank you sincerely for your very kind words.
I just want you to know that you have a wonderful blog of work.
Anyone who has ever been smitten by love should be able to relate to your work 'On the Influences of Love'... delete 'dime store' and insert 'poundshop' for the people of the UK.. but it is great as it is.

'The Slow Boy' is a beacon of hope for anyone, regardless of gender, with confidence and self-belief.
"It's amazing what that boy achieved
When he failed to listen, but believed...

I hope that somebody more articulate than I could read, comment and maybe analyse your poem 'A River' (after first reading your preface 'I thought to try something different').
It is indeed a most beautiful piece of work.

I am humbled that you like my stuff! Thank you.

Comment is about James Roper (poet profile)

Original item by James Roper

An unusual topic that brought back my own childhood and memories of big red chairs with
those foot levers that barbers used to raise & lower the infant customer...part of a long-gone
premises opposite Paignton railway station in
South Devon. You had to walk through a shop to
get to the barbers at the rear...a strange
place to a child: full of men and their talk, cigarette smoke, and the smell of hair lotion.
And, of course, that sinister hiss of a strop
razor expertly wielded behind a recipient's
uneasy reflected stare.

Comment is about The red chair (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

This is really good. It makes me want to sit back and enjoy and take part in the little things that sometimes make all the difference in your day. Great job!

P.S. Thanks for the comment :)

Comment is about Write Your Own Lines (blog)

Original item by Candice Reineke

Woops! - found the theme; it's "grit"...
OK OK I shall go away and stop causing trouble....
Dorinda
x

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PRESS RELEASE: Wakefield's Church-based Destiny Poets are celebrating 4 years of their successful monthly Writers workshop group .
Held every first Tuesday in the month,since 2010, at 7 p.m.at Wakefield's historic Henry Boon's pub on Westgate , Destiny Poets' monthly Not Just Poetry workshop group has been re-branded " Writers " to better reflect Destiny Poets' progressive,international profile and online recognition where www.destinypoets.co.uk International Community of Poets are already participating in their Writers section for all non-poetry literary posts. Poets' founder Louis Kasatkin says that a new shared name which identifies and honours both our impressive international online membership and also our local real workshop participants, enhances the standing and offer of both. Monthly workshop attenders can still rely on the sessions continuing refreshed and unabated every first Tuesday in the month at 7p.m. as usual.
For further information please visit www.destinypoets.co.uk and Destiny Poets on facebook 1

Review is about Destiny Poets monthly workshop session on 5 Aug 2014 (event)

Thanks for the positive reinforcement Daniel; I think it is people like you that make something like this work.

Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Hello there! - I thought I'd sent a message yesterday, but I cannot see it here, so I'm re-sending! Just got back from two lovely weeks in France, and I cannot find what the theme is for our next meeting (that has nothing whatsoever to do with the vin rouge!!!) - so if someone could let me know, I'd be grateful.....
Thanks, and see you next week - Dorinda x

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Original item by Stockport WoL

I like this poem, especially the pay-off.

Comment is about Unravelling (blog)

Thank you Dom, it's hard to get away from Adelstrop at the moment, figuratively speaking. I don't doubt trains have slipped into my subconscious, as they would in to a siding.

I'm glad you liked Old Men, that poem means more to me than some of my other poems.

Comment is about FREQUENCIES. (blog)

Dominique, thanks for sharing your story in such a beautifully vulnerable, lyrical way. I pray that you will continue to have the courage to take it one day at a time, standing firm on the reality that shame and fear no longer have a hold on you. p.s. thanks for your note on "don't put me in your box" :)

Comment is about 8 Months (blog)

Original item by Dominique Smith-Bryant

Ha, I like this a lot! Yes, YOU should keep writing. And you're right, "everyone's a writer these days", but not everyone can make you want to read (and keep reading) what they write.

Comment is about Everyone's a writer these days... (blog)

Original item by Edie Hope

oh wow....a very impressive spontaneous poem...which uses immensely effective personficcation of time, tress, and the pool.
its like...you captured a perfect moment in time with your writing....AMAZING. !!.

Comment is about Two Trees Bending (blog)

this is an immensely effectively and pleasant to read piece of poetry. I LOVE IT !!....the repetition, rhyme, assonance and consonance blends very well to creative a good rhythm. The rhyming is very quirky and unusual which is intriguing...and the turn in the final stanze...is superb...the way you reference "They" ..but still everyone knows you mean family and friends. lovely poem.!!

Comment is about When You're Low (blog)

Original item by Candice Reineke

LOL. THANKS FOR COMPLIMENTS CANDICE REINEKE...much appreciated. and the idea was a too generalise all guys perceptions...but actually was just my inner thoughts and fantasy ..because im quite a withdrawn, shy type of guy...not type of guy to be confident in making a move on a lady in public....so just kinda my inner fantasy and wish...to have a lady at pub come up to me and flirt and be domnant and confident one and tell me ... "" you are taking me out to dinner this weekend. ""

Comment is about Fishing For Fella's (blog)

Original item by Phillip Kelly

Wow. This is a really powerful piece. Not just the subject matter but the way it flows. I love it. Welcome to W.O.L.

Comment is about 8 Months (blog)

Original item by Dominique Smith-Bryant

I really like this piece. It's so relatable yet anyone who reads it can make it their own. Very nice

Comment is about Don't Put Me in Your Box (blog)

Original item by Candice Reineke

Like you, I have a family army connection.
My great-grandfather was a master gunner with
Queen Victoria's army - with service in China.
My father was a young officer in WW1 France and
the Italian Front, and was in uniform again on the home front in WW2.
A maternal uncle was killed in action in France
in 1916, and a first cousin once removed (an army lawyer) was shot down in front of his wife by the IRA during the original Anglo-Irish War back in
the early 1920s (the original Bloody Sunday).
My own brother served with the Royal Engineers in locations as diverse as Cyprus, Kenya and Borneo,
before retiring to become an instructor (later its
manager) of the ski centre in Aldershot prior to
final retirement.
The army in particular has a habit of connecting families, doesn't it?
Best wishes for your work on WOL and elsewhere.

Comment is about Tj Steele (poet profile)

Original item by Tj Steele

Thanks for that Daniel,
Yes I had forgotten about the combs dunked in what one can only presume to be some form of disinfectant.
As to the things that were only for the weekend, I can well remember when I had apparently reached adulthood a friend asking me to make purchases on his behalf, even though I didn't need a haircut !

Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Howdy M.C, just dropping by to say thanks for the comment on "Zero to Hero", it was quite insightful. I never knew that Norman was in the armed forces. I have an appreciation for the forces as my father was regular army for 23 years and has now been t.a for nearly 10. Thank you for the info.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Helene, I really like this one...it reminds me of that Charles Swindoll (Lou Holtz) quote: "Life is 10 percent what happens to you and 90 percent how you react to it."

Comment is about "Schemie Burd" (blog)

Hello everyone! - got back last weekend from a wonderful two weeks in France......and now I'm back I cannot find the theme for the next WOL (that has nothing whatsoever to do with vin rouge!!!) - so please could someone let me know what the theme is? - Thanks so much! - Au revoir! -----Dorinda x

Comment is about Willpower - June Collage Poem (blog)

Original item by Stockport WoL

Haha this is great :) Seems like the woman is doing ALL of the work for "romance at last!". Is this how "fellas" expect and/or prefer women to act? Or has this just been your experience?

Comment is about Fishing For Fella's (blog)

Original item by Phillip Kelly

"She dream-footed lightly"...awe what a lovely way to put it :) You've got some interesting take-me-away-deep-into-your-characters type of poems here. Looking forward to perusing more of your work. By the way, I left a response to your question on my "Don't Put Me in Your Box"...thanks again for your comment :)

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I like your style!

Comment is about The Awakening (blog)

Original item by Twilbury Wist

How many ways are there to eulogise love that
haven't been done before?
The ancients had their day, some still quoted.
The Elizabethans were masterful, and so were
some Victorian versifiers. Those falling within
"the last 50 years" will have to be very special
to match those who have gone before but who still
stay in the mind.

Comment is about Hear 50 of the world's greatest love poems at the Royal Festival Hall (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

your thoughts reflect my comments in "Silent Poets" (wannabes)

Comment is about Secret to Success (blog)

Original item by James Roper

Succint, earnest and delightful

Comment is about ANALOGY OF BEAUTY (blog)

Original item by Phillip Kelly

this is a very well written poem......reads very nice good flow.....i dont want to offer constructive criticism...as there is nothing here really to criticise..THIS POEM IS FANTASTIC....but id just like to offer a new outlook viewpoint to the poem if thats ok...why not experiment...from point of view of child ...let your imagination run free and wild...i think it would be worth exploring a more fantasy-like magical perception of the weather, rainbow. ..as i think there is alot of potential in this poem...and just needs extending a little....contrast the dull gloomy rain storm to all the vibrant colours...birds singing...sun beams transform silver to gold...kinda like think of WIZARD OF OZ SOMEWHERE OVER THE RAINBOW...when she goes to munchkin land...but before that..there was black and white movie......try to achieve that effect

Comment is about Rainbow (blog)

simply unbelieveably good ! perfection !.

the rhyme scheme and structure is superb.

the voabulary is emotive...gained from mix of first person, second person , third person and inclusive personal pronouns....which creates sense of universally speaking out...THIS IS WHAT MAKES THIS PIECE SO INTERESTING !!....and i love the repetitive use of siiles in stanza 2 which increases the emotive hyperbole.

this is my favourite poem of yours ..id love to have discussion about where you got inspiration from...ideas etc.. its written in the style of poet GILLIAN CLARKE, similar to her poem, CATRIN.

Comment is about My Inner Child (blog)

THIS poem is extremely well written and emotive . i love it. you manage to create rhythm very well through use of assonance, consance, rhyme and enjambement. and love the twist of "everyday child" at the end. thanks.

Comment is about Wednesday's Child (blog)

THANX FOR YOUR KIND COMPLIMENTS...ADDING AUDIO TOMORROW

Comment is about ANALOGY OF BEAUTY (blog)

Original item by Phillip Kelly

Nice one Martin. I remember the similar experience myself, so elequently put in your poem.
The highlight being a penny toffee 'Arrow Bar' at the end.
Mysterious places the Barbers... combs in big jars of gloop and mysterious things offered to adults for the weekend!

Comment is about The red chair (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

My deepest thanks extended to you for your kind, sympathetic messages of support.
The Journey, relates to a thirty four year period that changed my life forever, punctuated by the loss of my eldest son.
Concise, untidy, spontaneous, true.

Yet as we speak in facets of life, of love, of honour, tho in angels footsteps we lightly tread for fear of the darkness.

Regards

Paul

Comment is about The Journey (blog)

Original item by Paul Letch

Hi Vanessa Glad you liked the poems! I'm not as active as I used to be on WOL and mostly use it when I want to post a poem and a picture on my FB page. I'll check out yours when I can settle down them properly. David

Comment is about vanessaorina (poet profile)

Original item by vanessaorina

thanx Daniel; love all your poems like your style very much :)

Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Hello Cynthia, in the end the prisoner lost the plot.

Comment is about Babies (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Absolutely superb work Phillip.
The last stanza is so complimentary and ties the other two to perfection. (Thank you for the commentary as well).
Love it.

Comment is about ANALOGY OF BEAUTY (blog)

Original item by Phillip Kelly

Love the lines
'I roam the history of our making
Trying to find a gem of remembrance...'
I also like the picture of the couple who do not seem to be looking at the shooting star which sets the poem.

Thanks also for the kind words on 'In Llanfairpwllgwyngyll' Jean.

Comment is about ESTRANGED (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Have gone through your work....i must say am impressd. It is just ...i like it: 'Your Chair' i love it

Comment is about David Cooke (poet profile)

Original item by David Cooke

She held herself stil'....i like it:

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Tommy thanks: This is just my fevourite. In kenya most culture believe that a woman is to serve her man and nothing more.

I wanted to bring out the picture of a woman who has dreams too. A woman who wants to be free. A woman who wants to be something in the society and gain respect just like the men. A woman who wants to have something of her own and be proud of.

Am glad i did. Thank you.I will keep writting

Comment is about vanessaorina (poet profile)

Original item by vanessaorina

Cynthia, thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment :) The box is all about fear. As human beings, we will always be fighting fear: our own comfort zones and other peoples' expectations of us...our own box, their box and society's box. This line is actually a proclamation: I've learned that fear is relentless but have decided to not let it beat me. It's also a warning to others: don't let fear make its home inside your heart. I see that maybe this line doesn't really flow but thought it essential to break free from tidiness in form. Hence the cry: don't put me inside your box ;)

Comment is about Don't Put Me in Your Box (blog)

Original item by Candice Reineke

Beautiful imagery, deep meaning!

Comment is about The Awakening (blog)

Original item by Twilbury Wist

Hi Vanessa :) ''A Woman In Diamonds'' exposes something I have never known. Your words educate, your words expose desire and frustration in a unique way. Write more- write often. :) Tommy

Comment is about vanessaorina (poet profile)

Original item by vanessaorina

Thanks alot for those encouraging words: I will keep writing. Expect to see more soon.

Comment is about PAGES OF MY LIFE (blog)

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